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Times need heroes, and heroes stand out. Franklin Roose velt is just a hero of the times. Well known for his unprecedented 13 years as the President of U. S. , he is regarded as a savior of America. However, it is not his brilliant achievements that attract me. What I really admire are some qualities shining in his whole life such as fortitude, courage and also his amiability.
His early time, I mean before his forties, was smooth. He was born rich and had a happy marriage. After graduating from Harvard, he served in the Navy. At that time, he had already shown his remarkable leadership and since his uncle was a President, he would surely enter the political arena. But everything changed when he was 39. Healthy and strong as he was, he was attacked by polio after swimming, which caused the life long de formity in his legs. It was extremely hard for this ambitious man to face the misfortune. He was, of course, in a bad mood and wanted to give up all his dreams at first. Then, after careful thinking, he finally decided to bestir himself. He was not a man
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easy to surrender. Again he took part in political activities and,at the same time, practiced standing up and then walking with a stick. Eventually this brave man won the battle against fate. He became the only disabled President in American history and unprecedentedly served four terms. All should be attributed to his fortitude.
"The only thing we fear is fear itself." This famous saying now has spread all over the world and encouraged lots of people.Roosevelt first said it, and as a great leader, he made all his people believe it. He practiced what he preached for he was surely a courageous person challenging the tradition. He formulated new policies to help his nation out of the Depression. He declared war against Fascists though most of the Congressmen opposed him at that time. All proved that he was right for his courage was not rash but based on careful thinking. "A leader is one who dares to dream, and then, dares to achieve."
He was great, but not great in appearance. He looked like a kind grandpa at the first sight. He initiated the fireside chat to express his ideas and explain his policies in a relaxed atmosphere on radio. He always smiled sincerely when speaking and listening. These didn't lower his prestige but made him amiable and welcome. 易優(yōu)作文投稿、作文評(píng)價(jià)系統(tǒng)，http://www.zequeka.cn/jiaoshoulanmu/
He is surely not a perfect man no one can be perfect.Every age has its hero in the forefront, just like Franklin Roosevelt a man I admire.
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本文記敘了作者心目中崇拜的人——美國前總統(tǒng)羅斯福。文章主要圍繞他的毅力，勇氣和和藹可親三種品質(zhì)來展開。首先，作者以平實(shí)流暢的語言表現(xiàn)了他得了小兒麻痹癥后如何戰(zhàn)勝自我，重拾信心，身殘志堅(jiān)，并史無前例地四次當(dāng)選美國總統(tǒng)的頑強(qiáng)毅力。其次，作者描述了羅斯?？偨y(tǒng)帶領(lǐng)美國人民向傳統(tǒng)挑戰(zhàn)，度過經(jīng)濟(jì)大蕭條時(shí)期，并不顧多數(shù)國會(huì)議員的反對(duì)向法西斯宣戰(zhàn)的巨大勇氣。最后，作者又表現(xiàn)了羅斯?？偨y(tǒng)和藹可親的一面，他真誠的笑容和他以爐邊談話的形式通過電波與美國人民在輕松的氣氛中進(jìn)行交流。
本文還引用了羅斯?？偨y(tǒng)的名言，如“The only thing we fear is fear itself．”’“A leader is one who dares tO dream，and then，dares toachieve．”等，增加了文章的說服力。 蘇州少兒書法培訓(xùn)，推薦<A http://www.zequeka.cn/Miniform/tYpe_3.html>易優(yōu)少兒書法培訓(xùn)</a>，語文成績好，書法少不了。
但文章仍需在以下幾個(gè)方面有所改進(jìn)：一、段落之間缺少承上啟下的自然銜接(transition)，意義的轉(zhuǎn)折顯得生硬，比較突然。恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用銜接手段可以將幾個(gè)段落有機(jī)地結(jié)合成一個(gè)整體。二、段首最好能有依據(jù)概括大意，點(diǎn)明中心的主題句(topic sentence)，使讀者對(duì)每一段的內(nèi)容一目了然。三、第二段對(duì)羅斯福生平的介紹稍稍過長，破壞了文章整體的結(jié)構(gòu)平衡，不妨將一些與主題無關(guān)的句子刪去，效果會(huì)更好。
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A Person I Admire——Franklin Roosevelt由英語作文網(wǎng)整理收集 英語作文網(wǎng) www.345543.com
