文書批改：英文推薦信。TPO小站綜合點評及批改意見：總的來說，這份推薦信語言表達較為流暢，但篇幅略長，建議稍作精簡。建議將文中關于學科部分的內容介紹可以去掉，增加一兩句對目前所就讀的學校介紹。推薦信中，關于學習的介紹是重點內容，要具體細化出來。另外，建議將課外活動的過程及細節(jié)描述做精簡，從邏輯上來說，推薦人作為系主任，不可能清楚知道非常詳細的細節(jié)。
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Dear Sir or Madam:
In my capacity as vice dean of the Department of Business Management, XXX University, it is with great pleasure that I write this letter of recommendation for one of my students, Ms. XXX I first became acquainted with her during her sophomore year, when she took my course Introduction to Management. This course is a compulsory course required by Management School. I found her to be a positive thinker and an active speaker in class, and I owe my thorough understanding of her to the various departmental activities she engaged in. 蘇州易優(yōu)中考語文培訓,吳老師語文課（Tel:181-1815-9898）
For as long as I have known her, Ms. XXX has shown exceptional versatility. Her academic performance has been stable and she has built solid foundations in every relevant area of expertise. She is hardworking and deeply involved in departmental activities. I was her advisor in the Qualification Program (QP) Case Analysis Competition, in which participants were required to complete an English-language report on a case study. Ms. XXX's team looked at Kunming Excellence Cars Company, and recommended what they believed to be the best strategy for the company. Ms. XXX”s group undertook a comprehensive SWOT analysis and Ansoff product-market matrix, during which she displayed her analytical abilities and strong logic; she was also able to mobilize close cooperation between her team's members. In the end, their report won praise from everybody.
Ms. XXX, together with some of her classmates, organized a quiz covering geography, history, literature, science, art, and other subjects as a way of enriching classmates'lives after school. She was also selected to be a member of the department's choir, and she represented the department in the school's annual chorus competition. Her team devoted more than a month to intensive rehearsals, and ended up winning fourth place among more than 20 teams. Ms. XXhas also taken part in voluntary activities, for instance helping organize bicycle parking in front of the teaching building, and assisting forums and meetings hosted by the Department of Business Management.
蘇州吳中區(qū)小學生語文提優(yōu)，蘇州名校沖刺培訓，（Tel:181-1815-9898）20余年輔導經驗，每年都有數(shù)十個成功案例。
Once Ms. XXX has told me about her career plan.Thinking of her goal in market research, I suggest that she needs to learn more about establishing models, programming with statistical software, and combining theory with practice.These are the aspects where she can improve.
Meanwhile, I recognize Ms. XXX's as an individual of passion, kindness and outstanding intelligence. It is for these reasons that I strongly recommend her to your esteemed school. She is intellectually capable, has a clear plan for her future education, plus fine interpersonal and research skills. Accordingly, I urge you to give her application your full consideration.
TPO小站綜合點評及批改意見：
這份推薦信總體來說語言表達較為流暢，但是篇幅略長，建議稍作精簡。文中關于學科部分的內容介紹可以去掉，增加一兩句對目前所就讀的學校介紹。推薦信中，關于學習的介紹是重點內容，因為最好把學習表現(xiàn)及成績具體細化出來，最好寫出在班級或在院系的具體排名。另外，建議把活動過程做精簡，因為推薦人作為系主任，工作內容非常多非常忙。從他的立場上來說，是不太可能把你的事情知道的非常詳細
