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“難忘記憶”是典型的事件描述類文章，“時刻” 規(guī)定了內(nèi)容是有關(guān)于當(dāng)時發(fā)生之事，“難忘”要求了語言要生動形象，能夠突出有力地說明讓人難以忘懷的原因。比如，因?yàn)橐姷搅四硞€重要人物而尖叫瘋狂，你們又有些什么樣的互動?因?yàn)閰⑴c了某個有趣的活動而心情激動，你在活動中又獲得了什么?因?yàn)楂@得了別人的表揚(yáng)而驕傲自豪，你又對未來有著怎樣更雄偉的計(jì)劃?總的來說，這類事件描述部分完成后，結(jié)尾還要抒情以明志，使主題得到更好的體現(xiàn)。另外，歷年?？贾谐霈F(xiàn)過的類似題目不僅僅涉及“難忘”，諸如“一-次快樂的記憶”、“一 次珍 貴的會面”等也是屬于這個話題的變式文章。 <a hRef=http://www.zequeka.cn/miNifoRm.Html>蘇州初中語文補(bǔ)習(xí)</a>
下面，我們就以“難忘”為切人點(diǎn)，來具體談- -談這個話題的寫作。
實(shí)踐案例
題目
Write a composition in at least 60 words on“An unforgettable first for me". (寫一篇題為“對我來說非常難忘的第一次”的短文，字?jǐn)?shù)不得少于60個詞。)
提示:每個人生活中都會有難忘的第一次，例如第一-次見到某個重要人物， 第一-次參與某項(xiàng)活動，第一-次嘗試做某件事情，第一次獲得某種榮譽(yù)等等， 請按題目要求寫出對你來說非常難忘的第一次。
這箱全命題文章主題突出“難忘”和“第一次”，題目要求并不復(fù)雜，要求學(xué)生能完恭描寫出“第次”(仰按照記敘幾大要素再現(xiàn)事件始末)，并點(diǎn)明其“難忘”(寫出真情實(shí)感。因此這篇文章選取的內(nèi)容不能太隨意，要選擇有意義、寫得出“難忘”的理由才行，比如某個“第次”讓你學(xué)會了自立所以難忘，讓你收獲了友誼所以難忘，讓你得到了教訓(xùn)所以難忘，讓你受到了表揚(yáng)所以難忘等等。另外，中文題目還給出了可寫話題的參考:見到某人、參與某活動、嘗試做某事、獲得某榮普等，就更為學(xué)生提供了選擇，降低了難度。語言方面，要用生動形象的文字突出該事件對人影響頗深、令人感悟良多，這樣才能契合“難忘”的主題。
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
雖然這算作文可寫的話題不限，可發(fā)揮性強(qiáng)，但是也不能雜亂無章，還是有規(guī)矩可循的，敘事最起碼要交代清楚人物、時間、地點(diǎn)、還有事情發(fā)生的前因后果(即who/ when 1where /what,最后還要點(diǎn)明這樣的“第一次”為何“難忘”、有何重要性(即how).根據(jù)題目要求，可以參考以下結(jié)構(gòu)進(jìn)行寫作:
第一部分The lst part
點(diǎn)題-----我曾經(jīng)歷的__ _(事情)是我人生中很難忘的第一一次。
My first time to ... is important for me.
I will never forget the moment when I ... for the first time because it is so... for me.
第二部分The 2nd part
描述這個“第一次"發(fā)生的幾大要素，包括時間、地點(diǎn)、參與的人物、事情如何發(fā)展和結(jié)束等。
It happened on .. in ...
When I was at the age of ...
第三部分The 3rd part
結(jié)尾一打發(fā)感情， 這個“第一次”令我難忘，對我影響重大。
This was such an unforgettable experience that I would remember it forever.
This moment will be the most precious memory for me because it makes me ...
核心語匯
an unforgettable experience一次難忘的經(jīng)歷
officially meet somebody正式會見某人
leave 1 make a deep impression留下深刻印象
precious memory珍貴記憶
at that moment在那一刻
from then on從那時起
Have a great influence on .....影響重大
try doing something嘗試做某事
win honor for...獲得..的榮譽(yù)
to one's surprise令...驚奇的是
have some difficulties in doing 做....有困難
make me excited and thrilled令我萬分激動
參考句型
It's the first time for me to......這是我第一-次....
I still remember doing ..我依然記得我做....
I didn't realize ... until that moment直到那-刻我才意識到....
I will never forget that....我永遠(yuǎn)不會忘記.....
. It is this unforgettable first that helps me ...正是這難忘的第一次幫助.....
It's a great honor to do很榮幸做....
The reason why I think it unforgettable is.....我認(rèn)為其難忘的理由....
It won't be forgotten because it teaches me ..我不會忘記它因?yàn)樗虝?/span>.....
1 I will cherish this precious memory forever.我將永遠(yuǎn)珍藏這段珍貴的回憶。
習(xí)作1
I always think I'm not good at maths. But I changed mind since 1 won my scholarship for the first time.
When I was at 7 grade, I studied very hard every day. One day, my maths teacher encouraged me to take part in the maths competition. But I refused her because I told her that I wasn't good at maths at all But she said that she believed me I can do it. Then I agreed to have a try. I was very nervous during the competition. But I didn't give up. And I said to myself: you can do it Come on! As a result, to my surprise, I won the first prize. And I got a scholarship of300 yuan as a reward. Though it was not a lot of money, I was satisfied enough.From then on, 1 am more confident by myself.
點(diǎn)評:
這篇習(xí)作洋洋酒酒有150多字，但其實(shí)大部分都是偏離主題的，因?yàn)樵撋鷮?/span>“第次”的描述雖有一氣阿成的感覺，但細(xì)細(xì)讀來會發(fā)現(xiàn)太過繁瑣，抓住主線“七年級一 我第一次參加數(shù)學(xué)競賽一出人意料地獲獎了” 就可以，但作者描述得太詳細(xì)，導(dǎo)致結(jié)尾的感想沒有花費(fèi)什么筆墨，讓人感受不到為什么“難忘”，沒有很好地點(diǎn)題。而且，由于水平、時間都有限。簡潔明了的文章往往是考場上更好的選擇，有時候?qū)懙枚喾炊e得多。這篇文章的話法錯誤就不少，如第句的否定轉(zhuǎn)移沒有注意，應(yīng)為1 don't think 1 am god a.在七年級應(yīng)為in Grade Seven或in the seventh grade; 另外還有I have changed my mind since../she believed that I could do it /I am confident by myself等。
修改稿
In my mind, I'm always poor at maths. But I have changed mind since 1 won my scholarship for the first time.
When I was in Grade Seven, my maths teacher encouraged me to take part in a maths competition. I refused at first. But she said that she believed I could do it. Then agreed to have a try.1 was very nervous during the competition. But I didn't give up. To my surprise, 1won the first prize. And I got a scholarship of 300 yuan as a reward. Though it was not a lot of money, I was satisfied enough.
It was an unforgettable and important first for me, because it made me realize that 1should believe in myself and be more confident, As long as I'm not afraid of trying, I know 1can do everything.
習(xí)作二
As a fan of bullet, I make progress every day, and I never forget this is all because of my first performance on the stage.
When I was only 5, I was a shy girl but crazy about ballet. After 3 years' hard training,I was finally offered a chance to perform in front of over 500 people. I felt nervous and was about to give up, but somehow I found myself already on the stage, dancing - - and dancing well At that moment, I knew I was born for this! I love dancing ballet! A that moment, I decided never to doubt my capability of being a ballet dancer!
With my efforts and perseverance, I believe I will realize my dream, and that unforgettable moment- my first performance will be my most precious memory forever and will always urge me to do better.
點(diǎn)評:
這篇習(xí)作在開篇引人話題一最難忘的是 “舞臺上的第一次芭蕾舞表演”。 中間部分對難忘的表演時刻進(jìn)行詳細(xì)到位的描寫，在交待清楚了時間和前因后果的前提下，形象的描寫讓人切身體會到她第一次表演時的緊張激動，如finally / nervous 1 be about to give up/ be born for this等。最后點(diǎn)明這一難忘經(jīng)歷對 自己的重要影響?？梢哉f文章結(jié)構(gòu)安排合理，切合題意。語言方面表達(dá)通順，會靈活運(yùn)用被動句，會恰當(dāng)使用make progress 1somehow / be born for / effort / perseverance / precious等詞匯，句子之間邏輯緊密，緊扣主旨，充分體現(xiàn)了這令人難忘且意義非凡的“第一一次” 。
相關(guān)話題滿分范文解析
假如下面是你們班教室里的照片墻，墻上記錄了中考前學(xué)習(xí)和生活的點(diǎn)點(diǎn)滴流，以及考前老師的溫馨提示。忘不了備戰(zhàn)中考時充實(shí)而快樂的時光，請你以“Preparation for High School Entrance Exam”（備戰(zhàn)中考）為題，寫一篇80-100詞的短文。
1. 請闡述圖中信息，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名、校名和地名；
3. 字跡工整，語言流暢，表達(dá)正確。
學(xué)習(xí)區(qū) |
Listen to the teacher | 生活區(qū) |
Eat healthy food | 提示區(qū) |
Avoid making mistakes |
Take notes |
Exercise |
Learn to relax | |||
Finish doing… |
Have enough sleep |
Be on time | |||
… | … | … |
Preparation for High School Entrance Exam
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【寫作思路】
這篇作文要求我們以Preparation for High School Entrance Exam為題，介紹備戰(zhàn)中考的時光。題目中用照片墻的形式呈現(xiàn)了備戰(zhàn)的具體內(nèi)容，并給出了一些關(guān)鍵詞，學(xué)生們應(yīng)依據(jù)這些圖片和關(guān)鍵詞，展開合理的想象，充實(shí)細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容，并用正確的英語表達(dá)出來。審題可知，這篇短文的主要內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括三個方面：分學(xué)習(xí)、生活和提示三個方面解析介紹，注意分清層次和結(jié)構(gòu)，合理安排各個方面的信息，注意上下文的銜接、過渡應(yīng)自然。短文應(yīng)以第一人稱為主來敘述，時態(tài)應(yīng)為一般過去時，注意謂語動詞的正確形式。寫作時應(yīng)注意英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語的不同，不要根據(jù)漢語思維逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，寫完整的句子?？梢院唵尉浣Y(jié)構(gòu)為主，清晰、準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)自己的意思。而為了提升作文檔次，應(yīng)在文中穿插并列句、復(fù)合句以及其他復(fù)雜句式和結(jié)構(gòu)。同時注意語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢。
【參考范文】
Preparation for High School Entrance Exam
High School Entrance Exam is arriving. I still remember the days when our teachers and students worked together to prepare for it. In order to get a good grade, we all listened to the teachers carefully in class and took notes at the same time. After class, we finished our homework on time. If we had some difficult problems, our teachers would explain to us in details. All the teachers encouraged us not to give up and keep on studying. Besides, to study well, health comes first. Our teachers told us to eat healthy food, such as eggs, meat, vegetables and so on. We also did exercise every day and had enough sleep. The teachers told us not to feel stressful and learn to relax. We must be careful in the exam and avoid making mistakes. What’s more, we must be on time. We all felt tired and nervous, but what a full and happy time!
這是一篇比較不錯的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，回憶了自己和老師們一起備戰(zhàn)中考的一段充實(shí)、快樂的時光。題目以照片墻的形式展示了備戰(zhàn)的過程和內(nèi)容，非常新穎獨(dú)特，分析照片墻可知，文章應(yīng)從三個方面進(jìn)行介紹：學(xué)習(xí)、生活以及老師對學(xué)生的提示。這篇短文也正是按照這個思路進(jìn)行展開敘述的。短文層次很清晰，敘述也很清楚。短文主要使用了一般過去時態(tài)，符合表達(dá)的需要，語法規(guī)范，注意了動詞過去式的變化，尤其是不規(guī)則動詞的過去式形式。語句通順，句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整，符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。句子以簡單句為基礎(chǔ)，也使用了賓語從句、狀語從句等復(fù)合句句型，調(diào)整了文章的節(jié)奏。短文中使用了一些較好的短語和句型，如I still remember the days when our teachers and students worked together to prepare for it.、If we had some difficult problems, our teachers would explain to us in details.、Besides, to study well, health comes first. Our teachers told us to eat healthy food, such as eggs, meat, vegetables and so on.、We must be careful in the exam and avoid making mistakes.等等。
相關(guān)話題滿分作文必背
（一）
Write at least 60 words about the topic“An unforgettable experience". (以“一次難忘的經(jīng)歷”為題，寫篇不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格。)
初中生活即將結(jié)束，三年的初中生活一定給你留下 了很多難以忘懷的經(jīng)歷。請談?wù)劻钅汶y忘、值得回憶的-次經(jīng)歷。
Phrases for reference (以下短語僅供參考):
graduate from .....
a meaningful activity
enjoy oneself
remember .. forever
(注意:短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分。)
范文
An unforgettable experience
I'm one of the members of our school's volleyball team. Last month, my teammates and I entered for the teenagers' volleyball league and we made it to the finals. It turned out to bean unforgettable experience.
Facing our strong opponents, we made joint efforts to take hold of every opportunity in order to beat them. In the last round, when everyone was excited to wait for the result, I succeeded in getting one key score and our team won! But my ankle was injured. However,I thought it was worth it and I felt thrilled. My teammates were also proud of me and hugged me.
This experience is unforgettable not only because of all the praise I received but also because I know about one thing better: it is happy to make contribution to the team.
（二）
In 60 to 120 words, write about the topic "Meeting a special friend for the first time". (以“與一個特殊朋友的第一-次相見"為題，寫篇60- -120個詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格。)The following are for reference only. (以下問題僅供參考。)
1. When and where did you meet the friend for the first time?
2. Why do you think the friend is special?
3. What made your first meeting so impressive 1 unforgettable?
4. How are you getting along with each other?
(注意:短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的真實(shí)姓名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分。)
范文
Meeting a special friend for the first time
In the coffee shop near my home last week, I met a special friend, Mary, for the first time. She was special because we met on the Internet and we never met in person.
Just as she told me through the Internet, she shared the same interest with me. Both of us like travelling and taking photos. We talked about places of interest we had visited and shared some of our best photos. I found she was kind and patient and I expected to know her more.
This first meeting was so impressive and unforgettable because I made one more friend.Besides, it made me realize that meeting net friends were not that frightening as long as we paid attention to telling the real information from the false and treating people with honesty.
（三）
Write a passage on“A happy memory in my junior high school" in at least 60 words according to the given situation. (以“我初中時期的一次快樂的回憶"為題，寫-篇不少 于60個詞的文章。)
提示:初中時期留給我們很多快樂的回憶，你可以結(jié)合學(xué)習(xí)或生活中的某一個情 景或具體事例，例如:一次班會、一次活動等等，談?wù)劤踔袝r期曾經(jīng)留給你的一次快樂的回憶。1Phrases for reference (以下短語僅供參考):
a spring outing
a class meeting
a party
take part in
play with
be happy
A happy memory in my junior high school
Last summer, I went to Australia to visit our sister school for getting an unusual experience in a foreign country. I stayed there for about ten days and there were a lot of things that impressed me.
I noticed the lifestyle there was very different from ours. They have a bin in the house to separate and recycle the daily rubbish. I think it's really useful and necessary. My host family was very friendly. Susan (my host mother) treated me as her own daughter. She made cookies and other delicious food for me. She's really nice! I also had classes there. Their educational system is different from ours. There’re only 5 classes each day, but some courses are offered in the school earlier than ours and they cover a really wide range of subjects.Their class is attractive and of great fun.
This experience is a happy memory and I learnt a lot that couldn't be learnt from the books. I improved my English and learn the importance of independence. I also made lots of Australian friends.
《中考英語作文寫作指導(dǎo)：如何寫難忘記憶》添加時間：2025-01-07；更新時間：2025-03-15
