中考英語(yǔ)作文指導(dǎo)：如何寫出游見聞
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相關(guān)話題素材儲(chǔ)備和寫作指導(dǎo)
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有關(guān)旅游的話題多種多樣，可以是外出野營(yíng)、游覽風(fēng)光、出國(guó)游學(xué)、交流訪問(wèn)等等，體裁形式也可以各不相同。“出游見聞” 屬于事件描述類，所見所聞都應(yīng)當(dāng)以具體事件的措述來(lái)呈現(xiàn)，大部分是記敘文，也有部分是夾敘夾議，對(duì)所見所聞發(fā)表感想。
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下面就以記敘文為例來(lái)詳解如何寫好這類文章。
實(shí)踐案例
題目
Write a composition in at least 60 words on "A special trip”. (寫篇題為“次特殊之旅"的短文，字?jǐn)?shù)不得少于60個(gè)詞。)
作為初中生，你肯定已經(jīng)有過(guò)旅行的經(jīng)歷。哪次旅行是讓你至今不忘、印象深刻的呢?發(fā)生的什么事情使得這次旅行如此特殊?請(qǐng)具體描述，與大家分享。
這篇全命題文章要求學(xué)生能夠?qū)懗鲆?/span>-次旅行，并且要突出其“特殊”之處，那么就不能泛泛而談某次旅行風(fēng)景秀麗、文化多元等，而是要將這次旅行所發(fā)生的(特殊)事情通過(guò)敘事手法具體描述出來(lái)，因此可以確定這篇文章是記敘文。體裁確定以后，文章就好寫了，選取旅行中一次特殊經(jīng)歷，交代清楚事情發(fā)生的前因后果，不要忘記文章最后要有感情上的升華。就這篇文章面言，可以寫一寫這次特殊旅行帶給你的經(jīng)驗(yàn)、教訓(xùn)、感悟等。
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
根據(jù)題目要求，可以參考以下結(jié)構(gòu)進(jìn)行寫作:
第一部分The 1st part
開篇點(diǎn)題。
I had a special trip which 1 still remember clearly.
Among all the travelling experiences, the tip to. was the most special one
第二部分The 2nd part
描述次特殊的旅行，語(yǔ)言生動(dòng)，重點(diǎn)突出其特殊之處。
1 had the trip with .. when .
During the trip to .... some special events happened.
第三部分The 3rd part
這次旅行對(duì)你產(chǎn)生的影響等。
From this special tip, 1 realize / learn that
This special trip was unforgettable and meaningful because it not only enabled me to enjoy .. but also taught me ..
核心語(yǔ)匯
places of interest名勝古跡
tourist attraction觀光勝地
scenic spots景點(diǎn)
go sightseeing去觀光
the local / locals當(dāng)?shù)厝?/span>
local culture and custom當(dāng)?shù)匚幕土?xí)俗
show respect to 1 respect the local ...尊重當(dāng)?shù)氐?/span>.....
an exciting and meaningful trip一次有趣又有意義的旅行
landmark building地標(biāo)建筑
enjoy the natural scenery享受自然風(fēng)光
appreciate the human landscape欣賞人文風(fēng)情
impressive and unforgettable印象深刻又令人難忘
參考句型
It is exciting for me/ I am excited to have a trip to ..去 ....旅行我很興奮。
It is ... that makes the trip so special.....使得這次旅行如此特殊。
I learn from the special trip that I should ...從這次特殊的旅行中我學(xué)到，我應(yīng)......
Only after the special trip did I realize that ..這次特殊旅行后我才意識(shí)到....
Not until the trip came to an end did I realize ..直到旅行結(jié)束我才 意識(shí)到...
It was the special trip that taught me to ..正是這次特殊之旅教會(huì)我....
習(xí)作1
A special trip
One of the most impressive trips for me was the one to the city of Ningbo.
Unlike any other city,I didn't need to worry about the dangerous cars there. Whenever1 was trying to cross the road, all the drivers would politely wait because of the rule of pedestrains first.
Therefore, it was the perfect traffic that made the trip very special and I rally thought the traffic in my city should be improved like this, which would definitely reduce the number of traffic accidents.
點(diǎn)評(píng):
該生審題有誤，內(nèi)容及體裁上均有不當(dāng)之處。首先從內(nèi)容上講，與其說(shuō)這篇文章的主題是“一 -次特殊之旅”，不如說(shuō)是介紹“-座特殊之城”，因?yàn)槲恼聸]有通過(guò)事實(shí)來(lái)描述某次旅行的特殊之處，而是對(duì)寧波這座城市的特點(diǎn)泛泛而談，而且，學(xué)生所提到的“交通秩序好”并沒有用有效的語(yǔ)言描述成非常特殊的方面。其次從體裁上講，這篇文章不能算作是記敘文，沒有特定事件的描述，這也是明顯不符合題目要求的。但該生在語(yǔ)言方面的表現(xiàn)還是可取的，比如運(yùn)用強(qiáng)調(diào)句、定語(yǔ)從句等，詞匯方面也較為地道流暢。如果內(nèi)容的選取上沒有失誤就更好了，可見認(rèn)真審題的重要性。
修改稿
A special trip
One of the most impressive trips for me was the one to the city of Ningbo.
I remember when I was about to cross the street and looking around for the traffic, a kind driver stopped his bus in front of me and waved his hand to show me that I could go first. How surprised I was! I noticed the passengers on his bus didn't show annoyance but waited for me to cross the street, too. Later, I learned that everyone in Ningbo was a firm supporter of the traffic rule of pedestrians first. Indeed, I didn't need to worry about the dangerous cars in this city.
Therefore, it was the perfect traffic that made the trip very special and I really thought the traffic in my city should be improved like this, which would definitely reduce the number of traffic accidents.
習(xí)作2
Last year, my family had a trip to a remote mountain area for its unique natural beauty.It turned out to be very special for me.
When we walked along the narrow road, we came across a little girl who kept staring at our camera, so I offered to take a photo for her. She agreed with great joy, and asked if I could send the photo to her father who worked in a far place. I did what she expected me to do and she thanked me many times. As for me, I felt extremely happy too.
It was this incident that made the trip so special, and I learned that helping others helped me gain happiness too.
點(diǎn)評(píng):
這篇習(xí)作對(duì)主題的把握是比較到位的，通過(guò)去年一次鄉(xiāng)村之旅期間發(fā)生的一件小事，來(lái)突出這次旅行的特殊之處:予人玫瑰，手有余香。對(duì)該事件的敘述也是清晰流暢，簡(jiǎn)潔明了。從語(yǔ)言上看，該生會(huì)用turn out、come across等表達(dá)，會(huì)用強(qiáng)調(diào)句、定語(yǔ)從句等，都是有助于提高分?jǐn)?shù)和檔位的方法和手段，值得大家借鑒。
相關(guān)話題范文解析
（一）
為豐富初三學(xué)生課余生活，上周末你校組織了一次社會(huì)實(shí)踐活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容提示，用英語(yǔ)寫一篇短文，介紹此次活動(dòng)，并談?wù)勛约旱母邢搿?/span>
活動(dòng)內(nèi)容：
1．上午游覽人民公園：欣賞美景、歌舞聯(lián)歡、拍照留念；
2．下午參觀市民廣場(chǎng)：觀看圖片展，了解祖國(guó)和家鄉(xiāng)70年巨變。
你的感想：
1．師生情深，感謝老師和同學(xué)的幫助；
2．倍受鼓舞，決心勤奮學(xué)習(xí)報(bào)效祖國(guó)；
3. ……（考生自己發(fā)揮）
要求：
1．詞數(shù)100左右。開頭已給出，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)。
2．所寫內(nèi)容必須包括內(nèi)容提示中所提供的信息，并可作適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮。
3．不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名、校名、地名等相關(guān)信息。
參考詞匯：市民廣場(chǎng)Civic Square
In order to enrich Junior 3 students' after-school life, our school organized a social practice activity last weekend. All the teachers and students of our grade took part in it. _______________________________________________
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【寫作思路】
這是一篇材料作文，根據(jù)材料中的相關(guān)信息介紹一下上周末你校所組織的一次社會(huì)實(shí)踐活動(dòng)。所提供的材料中列舉了活動(dòng)內(nèi)容和你的感想。主要從：1．上午游覽人民公園：欣賞美景、歌舞聯(lián)歡、拍照留念；2．下午參觀市民廣場(chǎng)：觀看圖片展，了解祖國(guó)和家鄉(xiāng)70年巨變。以及表達(dá)師生情深，感謝老師和同學(xué)的幫助；倍受鼓舞，決心勤奮學(xué)習(xí)報(bào)效祖國(guó)；（自己在發(fā)揮一些）。這幾個(gè)方面去介紹。時(shí)態(tài)為一般過(guò)去時(shí)，人稱為第一人稱。注意作文中必須包含材料上的所有信息，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫作時(shí)，避免使用漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)，盡量使用我們熟悉的句子或短語(yǔ)。語(yǔ)法要正確，表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，注意時(shí)態(tài)、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系，表達(dá)具有條理性。
【參考范文】
In order to enrich Junior 3 students' after-school life, our school organized a social practice activity last weekend. All the teachers and students of our grade took part in it. In the morning, we visited the People’s Park. In the park, we enjoyed the beautiful scenery, danced and sang, and took pictures. I would like to thank my teachers and classmates for their help. In the afternoon, we visited the Citizen’s Square. In People's Square, we watched the photo exhibition and learned about the great changes of our country and hometown in the past 70 years. After seeing these photo exhibitions, I was inspired and determined to study hard to serve my country.
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
【高分句型一】
I would like to thank my teachers and classmates for their help. 我要感謝我的老師和同學(xué)們的幫助。該句話用到了would like to do sth. 豐富了語(yǔ)言。
【高分句型二】
In People's Square, we watched the photo exhibition and learned about the great changes of our country and hometown in the past 70 years. 在人民廣場(chǎng)，我們看了70年來(lái)的攝影展，了解了祖國(guó)和家鄉(xiāng)的巨大變化。該句話的語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練，層次分明，語(yǔ)意明確，用簡(jiǎn)單的句子表達(dá)了豐富的內(nèi)涵。使人讀起來(lái)朗朗上口。
相關(guān)話題滿分作文必背
（一）
近幾年，旅游已經(jīng)成為一項(xiàng)全民活動(dòng)。初中生們旅游的機(jī)會(huì)也有很多，因此，旅游也是初中生們津津樂(lè)道的話題。
你的美國(guó)朋友Tom非常喜歡中國(guó)文化，去年暑假你和他一起從桂林出發(fā)去北京旅游了幾天，你們參觀了一些著名景點(diǎn)，還品嘗了一些有名的小吃，請(qǐng)把你們的旅游經(jīng)歷寫成一篇不少于80詞的短文。
參考范文：
A Trip to Beijing My American friend Tom and I went to Beijing by plane last summer. On the first day，we visited the Palace Museum and Tian'anmen Square. The next day，we climbed the Great Wall. We took lots of photos. Although we felt tired，it was a fantastic experience. The third day we relaxed. Then we had the Beijing roast duck for lunch. I think it is the most delicious food in the world. Tom is interested in Chinese culture，so we drank tea and saw Beijing Opera in Lao She Teahouse in the evening. Finally，we did some shopping and flew back to Guilin. The trip to Beijing was short，but it was wonderful. Tom said that he would never forget it.
（二）
假如你參加了學(xué)校組織的“走近鄉(xiāng)村”寒假社會(huì)實(shí)踐活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)要求，向某英語(yǔ)網(wǎng)站投稿，分享活動(dòng)經(jīng)歷。
要求：1.80~120詞，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2. 文中不能出現(xiàn)自己的姓名和所在學(xué)校的名稱。
參考信息：
Have you ever got close to the countryside and had a special experience? Let me share mine!
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【寫作思路】
本文屬于一篇圖表作文，根據(jù)表格提供的信息來(lái)介紹“走近鄉(xiāng)村”寒假社會(huì)實(shí)踐活動(dòng)的經(jīng)歷。人稱為第一人稱，時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般過(guò)去時(shí)。動(dòng)筆前先要注意認(rèn)真閱讀材料確定寫作內(nèi)容；文章必須包括要點(diǎn)中所給的信息，既要寫活動(dòng)的過(guò)程，又要總結(jié)活動(dòng)感受與收獲。并補(bǔ)充兩條個(gè)人的觀點(diǎn)。表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，注意時(shí)態(tài)、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系，表達(dá)具有條理性。多種句式交叉使用來(lái)豐富文章的文采。高分句型：1.We experienced the life in the countryside, learned something that we couldn’t get from books before. 我們經(jīng)歷了農(nóng)村的生活，學(xué)到了一些我們以前從書中得不到的東西。that we couldn’t get from books before.是定語(yǔ)從句，修飾不定代詞something。2. We really hope we’ll have another activity like that this winter vacation! 我們真的希望今年寒假還能有這樣的活動(dòng)！hope后面是省略that的賓語(yǔ)從句。
【參考范文】
Have you ever got close to the countryside and had a special experience? Let me share mine.
During the winter vacation my classmates and I joined in the school activity “Get close to the countryside”. We live in the farmers’ homes. Their great living conditions surprised us a lot. Do you know where vegetables come from? We got the answer when working with the farmers. Besides, we learned about other plants and some farm animals. How interesting!
We experienced the life in the countryside, learned something that we couldn’t get from books before, and felt the wonderful changes of the countryside. We realized how hard the farmers worked and decided to save food. We were happy to see the farmers’ life was getting better and better.
We really hope we’ll have another activity like that this winter vacation!
《中考英語(yǔ)作文指導(dǎo)：如何寫出游見聞》添加時(shí)間：2025-01-07；更新時(shí)間：2025-03-15
