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成長歷程的話題無外乎是有關(guān)學(xué)生成長過程中所經(jīng)歷過的事件，以及從中學(xué)習(xí)到的經(jīng)驗和教訓(xùn)，主要集中于學(xué)生走向成熟、擺脫稚嫩的過程。從學(xué)生的身份角度來講，話題可能會涉及家庭生活和學(xué)校學(xué)習(xí)方面所擁有的成長經(jīng)歷，以及人生體驗而引發(fā)的處事態(tài)度、人生觀、價值觀、人格品質(zhì)等方面的回顧和分析，并進行領(lǐng)悟和自我完善。如，通過某個挫折學(xué)會了自我鼓舞;通過某次經(jīng)歷學(xué)到了自信獨立;通過某項活動提高了自身能力等等。而這些題目既可以是全命題文章，也可以是半命題文章，話題多樣，要謹慎審題，安排好文章結(jié)構(gòu)。 <a hrEf=http://www.zequeka.cn/miniform.html>提分快的蘇州初中作文閱讀培訓(xùn)</a>
我們就以某次經(jīng)歷為例，來具體剖析如何寫好這類作文。
實踐案例
.題目
Write at least 60 words with the topic“I learn from this experience". (請你以“我從這次經(jīng)歷中學(xué)會”為題， 寫一篇不少于 60個詞的短文。).每個人在成長歷程中，都有著各種各樣經(jīng)歷，這些經(jīng)歷對其成長也起著不同的影響。請你選取一次經(jīng)歷進行描述，并與大家分享你從中學(xué)會了些什么。
審題
這是一篇以成長中的學(xué)習(xí)為主題的半命題記敘文。learn 后面可以補充to be ... 1 to dosomething / something這些形式，但具體選擇什么取決于后面的“this experience"。乍一看，應(yīng)該有很多話題可供選擇，或許會無從下手。但仔細思考，應(yīng)該選取那些對個人成長起積極影響和作用的經(jīng)歷，比如“學(xué)會團隊合作的一次活動”、“學(xué) 會誠實守信的一次體驗”“學(xué)會尊重他人的次經(jīng)歷”等，題目明確要求“就其中個進行描述”，并且要交代 “你從中學(xué)會些什么”。因此，選取一個有意義的話題進行描述，交代清楚幾大要素:人物、時間、地點、發(fā)展經(jīng)過(即who 1 when 1 where 1 what)，并寫出它對自身成長的重要性(即how).這些是文章的內(nèi)容精髓。所以，該題目的審題核心詞在于:“一次經(jīng)歷”和“學(xué)會些什么”。同時還需要注意的是，對于“經(jīng)歷”的描述應(yīng)使用過去時。
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
本文可采用三段式的寫作結(jié)構(gòu):
第一部分The 1st part
補充題目，引人文章的主題，為想要記敘的主題進行鋪墊。如:
During my process of growing up, I learn a lot from the experience ....
I have had this experience that teaches me a lot about
I remember one experience clearly because it enables me to realize that ...
第二部分The 2nd part
文章的中心部分，對選取的話題展開描述。如:
It happened on ... /in ..
When I was at the age of....
第三部分The 3rd part
文章的結(jié)尾段，對全文進行總結(jié)，情感升華，首尾呼應(yīng)，說明“學(xué)會些什么”。如:
From this ... experience, I realize / learn that ...
... was known / learnt from this experience, and I will / won't ... in the future.
核心語匯
■growth 成長(名詞)
grow up 成長
learn from sb.向某人學(xué)習(xí)
. learn about sth.了解某事
. learn the lesson of ...得到教訓(xùn)....
. learn .. by heart/ keep ... in mind牢牢記住
be fully aware of ...充分意識到.....
■... play an important role...起重要作用
. develop a good habit of ..養(yǎng)成....的好習(xí)慣
■overcome:/ solve / work out difficulties克服/解決困難
■experience the excitement of growing up體驗成長的快樂
manage to do 1 succeed in doing成功做某事
enable ... to do ...使....能夠做....
■team work (spirit)團隊合作(精神)
. be responsible for.對....負責(zé)
參考句型
. Life is full of ups and downs.生活處處有苦也有樂。
. The reason why ... is that .......的原因是.....
This experience taught me a lot because ....這次經(jīng)歷教會我很多，因為....
Thanks to this experience, I finally realize that... 多虧了這次經(jīng)歷，我終于意識到......
Growing up means we should ...成長意味著我們應(yīng)該.....
. I didn't realize how important ... is until ...直到....我才意識到....的重要性。.
I realize that .. is so important that I must ..我意識到....如此重要， 我一定.....
It is ... that makes me grow up more ..正.....使得我成長得更.....
. I learn from the experience that ...我從這個經(jīng)歷中學(xué)到....
. Difficulties and frustrations are unavoidable.困難和挫折是不可避免的。
We should pull ourselves together.我們應(yīng)該振作起來。
習(xí)作1
I learn love from this experience
My mother teaches me a lot of things. But the most important is that she teaches me how to love others.
Last month, my mother took me to a charity organization where lots of people were waiting there to donate money to some poor children in the remote countryside. Besides money, we also bring a lot of used clothes. She told me she wished there wouldn't be poor children who suffered from hunger and cold. She also hoped me to be a person full of love.
I learn love from this experience. I hope there will be more love in the world.
點評:這篇習(xí)作從結(jié)構(gòu)上看基本是完整的，但從整體內(nèi)容上看，與其說是從“this experience"中學(xué)會"love" ，倒不如說是“my mother"教會我的，所以主題上對于“this experience"的處理不是很恰當(dāng)，即沒有在審題的時候抓住核心詞“-次經(jīng)歷”，而是偏重于突出“母親”對“我”影響，而非具體描述這次經(jīng)歷。語言上問題不大，出現(xiàn)一處時態(tài) 上的錯誤，we also bring應(yīng)為we also brought。除此以外，句型結(jié)構(gòu)比較單， 還可以通過變化句型來使文章再提高一個檔次。
修改稿
I learn love from this experience
I had an unforgettable experience that taught me to love others.
Last month,my mother took me to a charity organization where 1 had never been.When I saw so many people waiting there to make donation I felt shocked and moved. A volunteer told me here were lots of poor children who didn't have enough money to buy food or clothes Another one advised me to donate some books because it would be helpful for those children to gain more knowledge. So I returned home and brought lots of books immediately.
It is love that enables so many people to care for others who they even don't know. It is love that makes the world a happy place. After this experience, I decide to join in charity activities more often to spread my love to others.
習(xí)作2
I learn to be brave and independent from this experience
In the process of growing up, it is unavoidable to face some difficulties. But there is no need to be frightened because learning something from them is the most important.
Last year, I went abroad for sightseeing. I was so excited at the beautiful scenery that I failed to stay close with my parents. I lost my way. Tears and fear tuned out to be useless,so I had to calm down. I knew I must depend on myself.Finally, I managed to find the local police and the problem was solved.
From this experience, I learn to be brave and independent, because courage and independence can help me overcome difficulties and get prepared for other problems in the future.
點評:成長歷程有很多可以寫的東西，-次印象深刻且有教育意義的經(jīng)歷不失為一一個易寫的話題，可以輕松做到寫之有物兼顧語言精練，這篇習(xí)作便是如此。以“人生難題”為引人，“異國迷路”為主題，“勇 氣加獨立”為成長教訓(xùn)，結(jié)構(gòu)安排上中規(guī)中矩，可以得到滿分。從unavoidable / there is no need to / be excited at / turn out等地道表達和多樣的句型結(jié)構(gòu)中，也可知該生語言修養(yǎng)上乘，思路清晰。本篇作文語句精簡，無冗贅之辭，所以可以算是一篇A檔優(yōu)秀作文。
相關(guān)話題優(yōu)秀范文解析
（一）
Mountain Climbing
last summer, I went mountain climbing together with my father. I still remember the day until now.
We started climbing the mountain early in the morning.But when the sun came up, it became very hot. I got all
sweaty, feeling dizzy and tired, so 1 couldn't help complaining and wanted to quit. Hearing my complaint, my father encouraged me not to give up and helped me wipe away the sweat on the face. He said, "We won' t see the fantastic scenery unless we reach the top." | suddenly cheered up and continued to climb with full strength. We got to the top at last and enjoyed the beauty of the nature that I had never seen.
I could never forgot that experience and the lesson from that day. The beauty can only be seen after you make your efforts.
參考譯文
爬山
去年暑假，我和爸爸一起去爬了山。 直到現(xiàn)在我還記得那天。
一大早， 我們就開始爬山。但是當(dāng)太陽出來的時候，天氣變得很熱。我全身都是汗，又暈又累，所以我禁不住抱怨起來，并想要放棄。聽到了我的抱怨，爸爸鼓勵我不要放棄，并幫我擦掉了臉上的汗。他說:“除非我們到達山頂，否則無法看到美麗的景色?！蔽彝蝗皇艿搅斯奈?，繼續(xù)全力往上爬。我們最終到達了山頂，并欣賞到了我從未看過的大自然的美麗。
我永遠不會忘記那次經(jīng)歷，也不會忘記那天得到的啟示。美麗只有在你努力過后才能看到。
亮點詞匯
together wit.h.. ....一走
come up出來;出現(xiàn)
sweaty 出汗的
dizzy .眩暈的
complaint抱怨;怨言
wipe away擦掉;抹掉
出彩句型
I couldn’t help doing.....我禁不住
Hearing.....，my father.......聽到了....我爸爸.
We won't.. unless.我們不會... 除非.......
The beauty can only be seen after you make your efforts美麗只有在你努力過后才能看到，
高分點評
本文描述了作者和爸爸的一一次爬山經(jīng)歷，豐富的細節(jié)描寫，使人有身臨其境的感覺。作者在文中運用了豐富的句型，如when引導(dǎo)的定語從句和unless引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句，為文章潤色不少。最后得出的啟發(fā)，更是點出了文章的主旨，將文章提升了一個高度。
（二）
Go Back Home Alone
There was an unforgettable experience in my childhood.When 1 was seven years old, my mother would pick me up from the school every day. But one day, my mother told me that she wouldn't do this any more. 1 was afraid of going back home alone, so 1 tried to persuade her. Although 1 told her my fear, she still insisted on her idea.She thought "It was good for me to learn to be independent.The next day after school ,I took a bus to go back home. I forgot to see the bus route when I get on..Therefore when the bus was more and more far away from my home, 1 felt very terrified.Finally, I go 1o the last stop, and then took the Same bus back home.
After that, 1 learned to go back home alone. And this experience made me know more about independence.
參考譯文
獨自回家
我的童年有過一次難以忘懷的經(jīng)歷。
在我7歲的時候，我的媽媽每天會接我放學(xué)。但是有一天，媽媽說，她不會再接我放學(xué)了。我害怕一個人回家，所以我試圖說服她。盡管我告訴了她我的恐懼，她仍堅持她的想法。她認為學(xué)會獨立對我來說是件好事。第二天下課后，我就坐了-輛公共汽車回家。當(dāng)我上車時，我忘記看路線了。因此，當(dāng)車離我家越來越遠時，我感到非常害怕。最后，我到達了終點站，然后坐了同樣的公交車回家。
從那以后，我學(xué)會了獨自回家。這次經(jīng)歷讓我更了解了獨立的含義。
亮點詞匯
go back home回家
persuade勸說;說服
far away from.. 遠......
alone 獨自地
independence 獨立
出彩句型
There was a().. experience in my childhood在我的童年，有一次..的經(jīng)歷。
Although . she still insisted on her idea.即.....她仍堅持她的想法。
She thought it was good for me to..地她認....對我好。
I forgot to... when I got on.當(dāng)我上車的時候我忘記..
高分點評
本文以頗具戲劇性的過程展現(xiàn)了作者學(xué)會獨立的一個過程一學(xué) 會自己放學(xué)回家，文章細節(jié)生動，真實具體，并在其中呈現(xiàn)了“我” 和“媽媽”兩個人物鮮明的性格特點。作者對賓語從句的運用非常嫻熟，如"my mother told me that."和"She though."，地加句式變化的同時，使文章的表達更為流利、順暢。
滿分作文必背
（一）
書面表達：
Write at least 60 words about the topic "I try, I grow!" (以“我努力，我成長”為題，寫-篇不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點符號不占格。)
提示:在你的學(xué)習(xí)和生活中，一定 遇到過很多困難或挑戰(zhàn)，在應(yīng)對這些困難和挑戰(zhàn)的過中，你一定學(xué)習(xí)和體驗過很多東西，請選其中-件，談?wù)勀愕慕?jīng)歷以及收獲和體會。
I try, I grow!
As a Grade Nine student, the time of graduation is approaching. Looking back on the
past three years study, there have been many difficulties for me not only in study but also in life. There is an unforgettable experience Id like to share with you.
It was the first time that 1 didn't pass an important exam At that time, 1 was 80depresed that 1 could hardly control myself After knowing that I was in bad mood, my best friend spent all her free time comforting me and never sopped encouraging me With her help and my own fores, 1 finally succeeded in making progress
After that, 1 will never lose confidence and will always keep working. because 1 firmly believe that if there is no sweat, there will be no sweet.
（二）
書面表達：
Write at least 60 words on the topic "Harvest". (以“收獲”為題，寫箱不少于 60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點符號不占格。)
The following is for reference only. (以下問題僅供參考。)
1. Which harvest impressed you most in your growth?
How did the harvest happen?
3. Why do you think it was a harvest?
4. Do you have any changes after the harvest?
Harvest
In my growth, giving an English speech in front of all the students was the greatest harvest.I had been afraid of English learning until it was my turn to give the class an English speech. With the help of my teacher, I, a rather shy person by nature who easily surfers from stage fright, had to plunk up great courage to take part in it. To my surprise, 1 did it successfully.
For me, it was a meaningful step forward, small as it was, in the long journey toward the final success in my life, because 1 had truly gained confidence by participating This harvest enables me to be more confident not only in English learning but also in many other aspects of my life.
（三）
書面表達：
Write at least 60 words with the topic "Growing up". (請你以“成長”為題，寫筒不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點符號不占格。
提示:在每個人的成長過程中，有些因素對人的成長具有重要的作用。如，一樁事、一件物、一個人、一段經(jīng)歷、一次體....請你就其中的一個進行描述， 與大家分享。
要求:內(nèi)容切題、語句通順、意思連貫、字跡清楚。
Growing up
Among so many people who love me in the process of growing up, my father gives me the most useful education. For example, when he taught me how to ride a bicycle, I learnt more than that.
When I was 10, my father told me I could try to ride a bicycle. After telling me some skills, he just let me practice by myself. I kept practicing though I fell down many times.Three days later, I could manage to ride the bicycle very well. And then my father said he wanted me to learn that some skills were helpful while some were not suitable for me. And the best way was to experience and practice by myself.
It is true, and it is very useful for my growth.
《中考英語作文指導(dǎo)：如寫成長記憶》添加時間：2025-01-07；更新時間：2025-03-15
