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My favorite idol
審題
看題目是全命題作文，重點(diǎn)闡述why he 1 she is your favorite idol.
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
My favorite idol應(yīng)該是夾敘夾議的文章，因?yàn)樽髡邔懙?/span>idol對讀者來講可能不熟悉，所以可以對idol有些外貌描寫，讓讀著有一個形象上的認(rèn)識。接著，可以寫這個idol身上特有的些品質(zhì)，值得作者學(xué)習(xí)的地方，突出favorite.
核心語匯
have influence on對....有影響力
take a great interest in.對....產(chǎn)生濃厚興趣
catch the eye of sb.引起某人注意
keep up with跟上
a household name一個家喻 戶曉的名字
speak highly of ...高度評價(jià)......
one-hit wonder縣花一現(xiàn)的歌手、演員等
show off炫耀
gain popularity受到歡迎
role model榜樣
be credited to歸功于
deserve to be ...當(dāng)之無愧.....
參考句型
1.be undoubtedly an idol for ..毫無疑問是 ....的偶像
e.g. The handsome pop star is undoubtedly an idol for teens around he world.
這個帥氣的流行歌星毫無疑問是青少年的偶像。
2. balance the acting life with her personal life平衡好演藝生活和個人生活
e.g. She chooses her roles carefully and works hard to balance her acting life with her personal life.
她仔細(xì)地選擇角色，努力平衡好自己的工作和生活。
3. have a passion for ..對..生強(qiáng)烈的興趣
e.g. Born into such a musical family, G.E.M had a passion for music when she was a little girl.
鄧紫棋出生在這樣一個音樂世家，她在很小的時(shí)候就對音樂產(chǎn)生了強(qiáng)烈的興趣。
4.be due to .... 歸因于.....
e.g. Kim Soo Hyun's success is due to his serious attitude towards acting.
金秀賢的成功歸因于他對待演戲的那股認(rèn)真勁。
5.He is famous because ....他出名是因?yàn)?/span>.....
e.g. He is famous because he has got talent for playing basketball
他出名是因?yàn)樗写蚧@球的天賦。
6.He is famous not only for ... but also for ...他出名不僅是因....更是因?yàn)?/span>....
e.g. He is famous not only for his amazing height, but also for his perfect sills in basketball.
他出名不僅是因?yàn)樗橇钊梭@嘆的身高，更是因?yàn)樗峭昝赖幕@球技術(shù)。
7.Her contribution to society is ...她對社會的貢獻(xiàn).....
e.g. Her contribution to society is showing Chinese culture to the world.
她對社會的貢獻(xiàn)是向世界展示中國文化。
8.be fascinated by ... .....著迷
e.g. In his childhood, he was fascinated by Bruce Lee, much like other children at his age.
小時(shí)候，他與同齡孩子們一一樣，對李小龍非常著迷。
習(xí)作一
My favorite idol
My favourite idol is Ninomiya Kazunari - the member of ARASHI.He has good skin as if he were just 23 years old, but in fact, he is 33 now.He①is good at writing and singing, as well as dancing: He has won the award
of the Japanese Academy and he is also interested in doing magic tricks. Sometimes he is quiet as an adult and sometimes he is smiling like a child. He is an attractive man and I like him very much.
注：①be good at擅長于，
as well as也
點(diǎn)評:小作者寫她的偶像二宮和也，涉及面比較廣:年齡、特長、獎項(xiàng)、愛好，讀起來文章比較流暢，但句式簡單，如果把簡單句變成復(fù)合句會更好。比如原文中He is good at writing and singing, as well as dancing.可以用 so . that 結(jié)構(gòu)，改成He is so talented that he is good at writing and singing, as well as dancing.表明他是一個很有天賦的歌手。
習(xí)作二
My favorite idol
The public tends to think that Miley Cyrus has a bad influence on teenagers because of all those crazy things she has done after leaving the former Disney star title behind.
Regardless of what others think, Miley Cyrus is my favorite idol.Aside from the fact that she has a hoarse voice which can be easily distinguished, I like her as a person. Unlike most Hollywood stars,she is bold, and most importantly, she is true to herself. She sings the songs she wants to sing, even though the theme relates to controversial issues. She does charity, helping many kids either psychologically or financially. Getting rid of her former identity as Hannah Montana, Miley Cyrus has finally grown up and become a celebrity who has impact on the society, and this makes her my favorite idol.
注：
1.regardless of 不管不顧
2.Aside from the fact that she has a hoarse voice which can be easily distinguished, I like her as a person.定語從句
3.get rid of 摒棄
4.Getting rid of her former identity as Hannah Montana, Miley Cyrus has finally grown up and become a celebrity who has impact on the society, and this makes her my favorite idol.定語從句
點(diǎn)評:
小作者寫這篇名人文章的視角比較獨(dú)特:沒有按一般思 路從這位當(dāng)紅歌星的作品及獲得的獎項(xiàng)出發(fā)，而是另辟蹊徑，將Miley Cyrus和其他明星的不同處寫了出來: She isbold, and most importantly, she is true to herself.除此之外，她還有更加高貴的品質(zhì): Shedoes charity, helping many kids either psychologically or financially.這樣，這位歌星為何是作者最喜愛的，就-目 了然了。作者詞匯、句型運(yùn)用流暢得體，可見語言功底很好。
相關(guān)話題范文解析
（一）
Lin Dan A Super Sports Star
Lin Dan, whose nickname is Super Dan, is a famous badminton player of China. Lin Dan has an outstanding performance in the badminton history. At the age of 27, he won all the major titles in the badminton word. No one in the word has done better than him.
Lin Dan is an enthusiastic man, and he is a person full of passion. He puts his heart and soul into his training and contests. He is the kind of person who believes in himself. And he will not give up, until he achieves his goals. It is this kind of spirit and hard work that make him a legend in the badminton world.
Lin Dan is worthy of the name- -super sports star.
參考譯文
林丹------------一位超級體育明星
林丹，昵稱為“超級丹”，是中國著名的羽毛球運(yùn)動員。林丹在羽毛球歷史上有著出色的表現(xiàn)。在他27歲時(shí)，他就贏得了羽毛球世界里的全部主要頭銜。世界上沒有哪個人能比他更優(yōu)秀的了。
林丹是一個非常熱情的人，同時(shí)，他也是一 一個充滿激情的人。 他會全身心地投入到訓(xùn)練和比賽中。他是那種一一直堅(jiān)信自己的人。不實(shí)現(xiàn)目標(biāo)，絕不輕言放棄。正是這種精神和他的刻苦，讓他成了羽毛球世界里的傳奇人物。
林丹不愧為超級體育明星。
亮點(diǎn)詞匯
nickname昵稱
outstanding 卓越的;出眾的
passion 漱情
achieve one's goal實(shí)現(xiàn)某人的目標(biāo)
spirit精神
legend .傳奇
出彩句型
whose nick name is.. ..... 昵稱為.....
He has an outstanding performance.他有著出色的表現(xiàn)。
He puts his heart and soul n...他全身心投入到....
He will not give up, until..他不會放棄，直到....
It is... that..正是..... .....
高分點(diǎn)評
本文主要圍繞"super" 這一字眼展開， 以對林丹性格特點(diǎn)的詳細(xì)描寫，來突出他的卓越之處。本文多處使用了定語從句，如whose引導(dǎo)的定語從句和who引導(dǎo)的定語從句，還運(yùn)用了強(qiáng)調(diào)句“It s.at...使文章變化多樣、 精彩絕倫。
（二）
A Pop Singer
Justin Bieber, a Canadian pop singer and actor, was born on March 1st, 1994. He lives in the U.S.A. now. He has a handsome look.
He has a deep love for music. When he was eight years old, he could play the guitar and drum. At that time, he often played the guitar in the street, which attracted many passers-by. Now he is a real superstar, who is popular all around the world. A lot of teenage fans are obsessed with him. One reason is that his songs are very positive, encouraging people not to give up easily.
He has a great talent in music. 1 hope he can do better in the future.
參考譯文
一位流行歌手
賈斯汀.比伯，一位加拿大流行歌手和演員，出生于1994年3月1日。他現(xiàn)在居住在美國。他有著英俊的外表。
他很熱愛音樂。他八歲的時(shí)候，就能彈吉他和打鼓。那時(shí)候，他經(jīng)常在街上彈吉他，吸引了很多路人?，F(xiàn)在他是一個真正的超級明星，在全世界都很受歡迎。很多青少年粉絲迷戀他。其中一個原因是他的歌很積極，鼓勵人們不要輕易放棄。
他在音樂上很有天賦。我希望他以后能做得更好。
亮點(diǎn)詞匯
handsome 英俊的
passer-by 路人;行人
positive 積極的
encourage鼓勵
出彩句型
He has a... look.他有...的外表。
He has a deep love fr...他很熱愛....
At that time.,...在那時(shí)，....
.. is/are obsessed with... 對.......迷戀.
One reason is that...一個原因是.....
高分點(diǎn)評
本文從賈斯汀.比伯的基本概況到音樂之路依次展開，通過連接詞“at that time"等的使用，使得文章起承轉(zhuǎn)合順暢自然。作者將同位語、分析結(jié)構(gòu)和定語糅合使用，既使表達(dá)簡練，又使句子富于變化。如文章的第一句中同位語 "a Canadian pop singer and actor"和who引導(dǎo)的定語從句結(jié)合使用，清晰明了地傳遞了作者的意思，非常精彩。
書面表達(dá)滿分必背
（一）
Superstar and I
In my heart, G.EM Tang is a superstar. She is my favourite singer who has a really amazing voice. She started her career when she was only sixteen years old - a year younger than I am now! She did her gigs when she was nineteen- the time when most of us are struggling for the University Entrance Examination. She has pursued her dream with overspread rumor and doubts for 9 years till now. She ever cried, she ever tried to explain,but she never stopped. Now she has the best attitude to those rumors: I will prove myself with my music.
As far as I am concerned, it is very amazing to achieve such great success in music at such a young age. Moreover, her attitude to face all the misunderstandings from others is what I can learn from. We are growing day by day, all of us, and we must try to face all kinds of things, including the misunderstandings. What should we do then? Maybe we should learn from G.E.M and do what we should do to prove ourselves.
（二）
My favourite star
There are many excellent stars in various fields at home and abroad, for example, ZhouXun in film industry, Mo Yan in literature, and Bolt in the sports circles. My favorite star is Zhou Xun. who is an outstanding actress.
Zhou Xun liked watching movies since she was a little girl. Her father worked in a cinema, which offered her the opportunity to have aces to movies. Maybe her talent has been developed since then Over the two decades Zhou Xun has performed in TV and movies Her acting is mature day after day. bringing her lots of awards. Now she has become one of the iconic actresses in China. Besides, she devotes herself in philanthropy and environmental protection. Zhou Xun calls on everyone to live a low-carbon life to keep a green and beautiful planet.
I like her because of her excellent performing as well as her personality.
