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人物描寫篇章里的前3類:家庭成員、親朋好友及著名人物，都是寫作者比較熟悉的人物， 但偶透相識(shí)，顧名思又是要寫與作者有一面之像的人， 首先要確立這是過去發(fā)生的事情，所以時(shí)態(tài)用最過去時(shí)，然后寫在這次偶遇相識(shí)中，主人公的某個(gè)行為給作者的感情，切記以寫“我”為主，寫成“An unforgettable experience”
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The I will never forget (奉賢二模)
審題
看題目，這是一篇半命題作文。 生活中總有一些令人難忘的東西，或是一個(gè)給你幫助的人，或是一個(gè)意義非凡的日子，或是一部令人深思的電影，或是段令人難忘的片段。
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
以The person I will never forget為例，這個(gè)人可以是非常熟悉的人一家人、 朋友、師長(zhǎng);也可以是有一一面之緣的人，此人的舉動(dòng)給小作者留下了深刻的印象，難以忘懷。以一面之緣的人為例，先寫出見到此人時(shí)的背景，然后具體寫發(fā)生了什么事，給作者留下了深刻的印象，作者可以是參與在這件事情中的，也可以是旁觀者。全文以般過去時(shí)為主， 最后表達(dá)感想時(shí)可以用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)或者其他時(shí)態(tài)。這篇作文也可以寫難以忘記的場(chǎng)景: The sceneI will never forget,描述給作者留下深刻印象的場(chǎng)景。
核心語(yǔ)匯
a middle school student一個(gè)中學(xué)生
a hard-working student一個(gè)用功的學(xué)生
have a big dinner together一起吃豐盛的晚餐
encourage sb. to do sth.鼓勵(lì)某人做某事
be ready to help others準(zhǔn)備好幫助他人
be healthy and full of energy健康的，充滿活力的
consider sb. to be認(rèn)為某人.....
stay up late熬夜
be proud of....感到自豪
live abroad住在國(guó)外
do sth. by oneself親自做...
take an active part in積極參與
參考句型
1.sb. influences me a lot某人對(duì)我影響很大
e.g. The policeman influences me a lot because of his kindness.
這名警察的仁慈對(duì)我的影響很大。
2.I will never forget his ..我不會(huì)忘記.....
e.g. I will never forget his generosity.
我不會(huì)忘記他的大方。
3.I still remember the day when ...我仍然記得這一.....
e.g. I still remember the day when I watched the opening ceremony with my parents.我仍然記得我和父母-起觀看開幕式的那一天。
4.Every .. of my life will bring back the memory of that night. 每....會(huì)把我?guī)Щ啬峭淼挠洃浿?。
e.g. Every New Year's Eve of my life will bring back the memory of that night.每一個(gè)除夕夜都會(huì)把我?guī)Щ啬峭淼挠洃浿?。
5.I did think .. was the most beautiful .... I had ever seen.我們?yōu)檎J(rèn)..是我曾經(jīng)看到過的最美麗的....
e.g. I did think it was the most beautiful face I had ever seen.
我認(rèn)為那是我曾經(jīng)看到過的最美麗的臉。
作文參考答案
（一）
The person I will never forget
Honey 1am forgetful and quite unconcerned about surroundings. but 1 will never forget the scene in which a boy stood in the rain,holding up an umbrella for a homeless dog.
Several years ago,when I was struggling in the crowd on a bus on my way to school, I noticed someone got totally wet on the side of the road .I was sure he was holding an umbrella, but it was for someone else. As the bus moved forward, a small figure appeared below the umbrella It turned out to be a dirty dog The muddy water covered its body and its hair was tangled badly.The boy just stood by the poor dog, trying to protect it from the
rain. The bus continued to drive ahead and the boy and the dog disappeared from my sight. They were like the sunshine of that dull and boring rainy day.
I appreciated the boy for spreading the warmth to the world and hopefully we will someday pass it along.
注：
①Honey 1am forgetful and quite unconcerned about surroundings. but 1 will never forget the scene in which a boy stood in the rain,holding up an umbrella for a homeless dog.定語(yǔ)從句和非謂語(yǔ)的運(yùn)用
②Several years ago,when I was struggling in the crowd on a bus on my way to school, I noticed someone got totally wet on the side of the road 時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句
點(diǎn)評(píng):
小作者寫道，給他留下深刻印象的是個(gè) 在雨天照顧小狗的男孩， 雖然寥寥數(shù)語(yǔ)，但把這個(gè)陌生人的愛心表達(dá)得很到位。全文布局很好:下雨天，天氣惡劣，心情糟糕，但因?yàn)榭吹搅诉@樣溫馨的畫面，像是看到了陽(yáng)光: They were like the sunshine of that dull and boring rainy day.最后表達(dá)了對(duì)男孩的感謝，以及要把愛心傳遞的信心，并進(jìn)行了升華:I appreciated the boy for spreading the warmth to the world and hopefully we will someday pass it along全文句式多變，語(yǔ)言地道，讀起來一氣呵成， 是篇不可多得的佳作。
（二）
The scene I will never forget
Once I was traveling in America, I had an experience that left me a deep impression.
Every morning, I would go to the cafe to get a cup of coffee near my hotel. I saw a beggar sitting near the cafe when I got there for the first time. As an ordinary person,I went to the cafe directly and attempted to neglect the beggar. However, to my surprise, when I got coffee and left, I saw several consumers sitting around him and talking about the daily life of him. He chatted with them with a smile just like the old friends' common conversation.
If I were him, I wouldn't talk to any stranger not only because of the different social levels but also the different experiences. These differences will result in different topics.It is hard to communicate if we belong to different social levels.However, they could chat in such a relaxing atmosphere. Then
they went to work and said goodbye to him.
No matter how different the social levels are and no matter what differences we have, friends and mates will always be there. It's the comfort zone you have in life.
注：
1. I saw a beggar sitting near the cafe when I got there for the first time. 時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句；see.....doing sth 看到某人正在做某事
2. If I were him, I wouldn't talk to any stranger not only because of the different social levels but also the different experiences.虛擬語(yǔ)氣
3.It is hard to communicate if we belong to different social levels.However, If條件句
點(diǎn)評(píng):
給作者留下深刻印象的是:一群過路人和乞丐像朋友般地聊天，而自已覺得由于社會(huì)地位不同，不會(huì)做那樣的事。應(yīng)該說作者作為一名在校學(xué)生、思考的問題還是比較深刻的:有著不同社會(huì)地位、不同經(jīng)歷的人，是否可以成為朋友?答案在文章最后一部分出現(xiàn)。
相關(guān)話題范文解析
（一）
假如你有機(jī)會(huì)和任何一個(gè)名人共進(jìn)午餐。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)和要求用英語(yǔ)寫一篇短文。
1. 要點(diǎn)：
1）這個(gè)名人是誰(shuí)；
2）你為什么想和他或她共進(jìn)午餐；
3）你想和他或她談?wù)撌裁?。
2.要求：
1）文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
2）詞數(shù)80左右。
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【寫作思路】
這是一篇材料作文，根據(jù)材料中的相關(guān)信息介紹一下你想和哪位名人共進(jìn)午餐。主要從1）這個(gè)名人是誰(shuí)；2）你為什么想和他或她共進(jìn)午餐；3）你想和他或她談?wù)撌裁?。這三個(gè)方面去介紹。注意時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)或一般將來時(shí)。人稱為第一人稱。注意作文中必須包含材料上的所有信息，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫作時(shí)，避免使用漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)，盡量使用我們熟悉的句子或短語(yǔ)。語(yǔ)法要正確，表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，注意時(shí)態(tài)、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問題。寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系，表達(dá)具有條理性。
【參考范文】
I’d like to have lunch with Ren Zhengfei, the founder of the well-known Chinese tech company Huawei.
Mr. Ren is considered as a great man who always has everything mapped out ahead. And under his leadership, Huawei has become a high-tech giant worldwide. Over the lunch, I will listen to his success story. Then I will ask him what is important to make it happen. If time permits, I’ll ask for his advice for us teenagers today.
I’m expecting this lunch already.
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
【高分句型一】
Mr. Ren is considered as a great man who always has everything mapped out ahead. 任先生被認(rèn)為是一個(gè)偉大的人，他總是把一切都安排在前面。
句子who always has everything mapped out ahead.是由who引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句。
【高分句型二】
If time permits, I'll ask for his advice for us teenagers today. 如果時(shí)間允許的話，我今天就為我們青少年征求他的意見。
句子If time permits是由if 引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句。
（二）
假如你是晨光中學(xué)的學(xué)生李華，平時(shí)堅(jiān)持用英語(yǔ)寫日記．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)，描述你星期三放學(xué)乘地鐵回家路上看到的事情，并表達(dá)自己的想法．
（l）一個(gè)男孩不舒服，開始嘔吐，一位穿著漂亮的女士幫著擦拭地面，男孩表達(dá)感謝．
（2）地鐵到站，有人擠向座位，有人下不去車，有人因此爭(zhēng)吵．
（3）你認(rèn)為……
參考詞匯： 開始嘔吐 begin to vomit；擠向座位 push towards the seat；爭(zhēng)吵 have a quarrel
要求：
（1）詞數(shù)：80～100個(gè)；
（2）日記格式和開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
（3）要點(diǎn)齊全，行文連貫，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。
Wednesday
When I took the underground back home from school, I noticed ____________________________________
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【寫作思路】
在解答寫作這類試題時(shí)，要根據(jù)短文的中心思想考慮如何開頭、展開和結(jié)尾，設(shè)想幾個(gè)承上啟下的連詞，將主要句型、關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)草草記下，形成提綱，寫時(shí)切忌結(jié)構(gòu)分散，廢話連篇，嚴(yán)重跑題．
【參考范文】
Wednesday
When I took the underground back home from school, I noticed two things around me．（開篇點(diǎn)明題意）
The first thing I met is about a boy．The boy didn't feel well．He began to vomit．A beautiful girl saw the boy．She helped him clean the floor【高分句型一】．Then the boy thanked her for helping．The second thing is about the underground．When the underground got to the station．a lot of people pushed towards the seat．So some people couldn't get off the underground．Some had a quarreel because of this．（介紹碰到的兩件事情）
In my opinion，The girl did a good thing and we appreciated her action in this society．As for the underground．It shows your quality there．If you wait in a line，others will get off the underground easily．If all of us can do in this way，our world will be more beautiful【高分句型二】．（表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)結(jié)尾）
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
（1）高分句型一：
She helped him clean the floor.
help sb do sth 幫助某人做某事。這句話意為：她幫助他打掃干凈地面。
（2）高分句型二：
If all of us can do in this way，our world will be more beautiful.
If引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句，遵循"主將從現(xiàn)"原則，即主句用一般將來時(shí)，從句用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。這句話意為：如果我們所有人都這樣做，我們的世界將會(huì)變得更加美好。
相關(guān)話題作文滿分必背
（一）
A policeman
It was already 2:50 when I got up this afternoon. Classes would begin in ten minutes, so I quickly ran out of my house and got on my bike.
On my way to school, I rode very fast. Luckily, every time I got to a crossing, the traffic lights were green. I soon reached the last crossing. This time, the lights were red, but I didn't stop my bike. To my surprise, a policeman appeared and stopped me. "Why didn't you stop when the traffic light was red?" he asked. Classes will begin in no time," I answered.Hearing this, he criticized me for not having obeyed the traffic rules. I dropped my head and said, "I'm sorry." I was afraid that he wouldn't let me go. I was about to cry when he told me to obey the traffic rules next time and let me go. I thanked him and rode away.Though I was late for school this afternoon, I had learned something: one must obey the rules at any time.
（二）
The experience I will never forget
We met millions of people during our entire life: some of them we just met once. We learn from them and are also inspired by them.
I remember the experience that I went to a high school to take part in the enrollment activity. During one part, every student was asked to give a speech with only 3 minutes' preparation. The 9th speaker was a girl, and she was trembling throughout her speech because of nervousness, but her voice was powerful and her eyes were steadily looking to the judges. Although she was very nervous, she sill tried her best to finish her speech. And when I was giving my speech, I saw her listening carefully and smiling to me even though my speech was not as good as hers. What a kind girl she was! leaned humility and bravery from her.
Most of the time, it is the person who we just met once that taught us the most important thing about virtues in human nature.
（三）
An unusual person
Nothing special happened, but I saw a person that I could never understand. In the subway station, there was an aged man with a striped colored stick in his hand. He was,unfortunately, visually -disabled with a pair of sunglasses. However, he looked surprisingly good in suit and tie with a pair of dustless leather shoes. Carrying a novel called how the steal was tempered" tightly in the left hand, he carefully held a blue bookmark which was located in the novel with his right hand. I know I was stereotyping him, but I couldn't imagine the way he used to read the novel. Maybe he had friends or families who gave him a hand and read him the novel.
