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Children who grow up in families which are short
of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some feel that the children of low income families are better equipped to deal with difficulties posed by the“real world”when they grow up and they also believe the privileged children of wealthy families are less fit to deal with these difficulties . The implications and veracity of this argument seem self-evident, but in fact require closer examination.
點(diǎn)評(píng):1+ 1 ”模式,即最后 1 句為主題句。此段的主題句稍微有點(diǎn)特殊,它的確否定了前面所提到的觀點(diǎn),從而表達(dá)出了自己的觀點(diǎn),此外還引出了下文。特別是最后半句,感覺是在拋磚引玉。 蘇州語文閱讀寫作培訓(xùn)課程推薦,<a http://www.zequeka.cn/miniform/type_1.html>蘇州中小學(xué)語文閱讀寫作培訓(xùn)</a>
The popular wisdom is that children of poorer families learn early on the value of a buck, and are thus naturally better suited to stretching money when times get tough in adulthood. Inversely, the children of wealthy families, thoseborn with a silver spoon in their mouths, are believed to be completely ignorant of the value of money, having had everything provided for them in their youth and oftentimes erroneously expecting the same situation in adulthood. They are believed to be prone to overspending and financial irresponsibility. This belief, though logical, overlooks one key point which is , of course, education.
點(diǎn)評(píng): 1 ”+3 模式,第 1 句是主題句。從此段的內(nèi)容來看,這是個(gè)讓步段(即分析自己并不贊成的觀點(diǎn))。雖然 4 段論的作文的主體段是兩面討論,但是本人還是喜歡這樣的寫作,即主體段的觀點(diǎn)還是有側(cè)重的,把讓步段放在前面,最后一句話引出下一段,這樣過渡很自然,而且自己的觀點(diǎn)也比較明確。 作文培訓(xùn),就來蘇州易優(yōu)作文 http://www.zequeka.cn/miniForm.html
The basis of this argument is, of course, knowing the value of money, and the idea that children of the poor know this, and those of the wealthy do not . Who though, is in a better position to teach their children the value of money; someone skilled in earning and keeping it, the wealthy parent, or someone who can not seem to acquire it, the poor parent? Both wealthy and poor children are equally likely to acquire an education in money, whether it is formal, or in the school of hard knocks. Conversely, both children are as likely to ignore this education. (101words)
點(diǎn)評(píng):這段的內(nèi)容感覺寫得不夠直接,還是在分析對(duì)方觀點(diǎn)的漏洞。前面讓步段已經(jīng)這么寫過了,那么這一段最好是正面地論證自己的觀點(diǎn)。此外,需要說明的是,作者的內(nèi)容還是有一定深度,但是這是要有一定的英語功底才行的。如果英語功底不行的話,建議內(nèi)容不要寫太深,因?yàn)槟菢尤菀自斐煽脊倏床欢阍谡f什么。 中小學(xué)生學(xué)語文閱讀寫作的好幫手,優(yōu)秀作文網(wǎng)推薦,<A http://www.zequeka.cn>易優(yōu)作文網(wǎng)</a>。
A poor child may believe that one can get along, if not as easily, without wealth. A wealthy child may be well trained by a parent steeped in the knowledge of money management; the key to developing this skill is education.
點(diǎn)評(píng):最后一段有點(diǎn)像是提出解決這個(gè)問題的辦法,即 education. 它沒有像傳統(tǒng)的結(jié)尾段那樣簡單的重申自己的觀點(diǎn)。
總結(jié):作者很明顯是不贊成題目的說法,但是作者自己是更偏向窮人家的孩子呢,還是富人家的孩子呢?根據(jù)文章來看,作者是中立,他所看重的是他們所接受的教育。整篇文章是一個(gè)中立的寫法。在雅思考試中,這種寫法經(jīng)常使用,還是非常實(shí)用的,大家可以學(xué)習(xí)一下。此外,文章中有很多好詞好句,特別是長句,值得模仿一下。
重點(diǎn)單詞 查看全部解釋
extent [iks'tent] 想一想再看
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n. 廣度,寬度,長度,大小,范圍,范圍,程度
聯(lián)想記憶 X 單詞extent 聯(lián)想記憶:
ex出+tent伸展→伸出去的[范圍]→范圍;程度
veracity [və'ræsiti] 想一想再看
n. 真實(shí)性,真實(shí),誠實(shí)
聯(lián)想記憶 X 單詞veracity 聯(lián)想記憶:
ver真+acity表名詞,“有…傾向”→真實(shí)
acquire [ə'kwaiə] 想一想再看
vt. 獲得,取得,學(xué)到
聯(lián)想記憶 X 單詞acquire 聯(lián)想記憶:
ac加強(qiáng)動(dòng)作+quire尋求得到→獲取
prone [prəun] 想一想再看
adj. 俯臥的,易于 ... 的,有 ... 傾向的
聯(lián)想記憶 X 單詞prone 聯(lián)想記憶:
pro前,ne:向前頃的
logical ['lɔdʒikəl] 想一想再看
adj. 符合邏輯的,邏輯上的,有推理能力的 作文能力提升,就來易優(yōu)作文,http://www.zequeka.cn
聯(lián)想記憶 X 單詞logical 聯(lián)想記憶:
logic說話+al→符合邏輯的
popular ['pɔpjulə] 想一想再看
adj. 流行的,大眾的,通俗的,受歡迎的
聯(lián)想記憶 X 單詞popular 聯(lián)想記憶:
popul人民+ar…的→流行的
ignore [ig'nɔ:] 想一想再看
vt. 不顧,不理,忽視
聯(lián)想記憶 X 單詞ignore 聯(lián)想記憶:
I不+geore知道→不知道→不理睬;疏忽
disagree [.disə'gri:] 想一想再看
v. 不一致,有分歧,不適應(yīng),不適宜
聯(lián)想記憶 X 單詞disagree 聯(lián)想記憶:
dis不+agree同意→不一致,爭執(zhí)
ignorant ['ignərənt] 想一想再看
adj. 不知道的,無知的,愚昧的
buck [bʌk] 想一想再看
n. (美元)塊錢 n. 錢,鹿皮,(鹿皮等)制物,小伙
聯(lián)想記憶 X 單詞buck 聯(lián)想記憶:
讀:罷課。一種竭力反對(duì)上課的行為