中考英語(yǔ)作文：鄉(xiāng)村振興篇-建設(shè)美麗鄉(xiāng)村我的家
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【背景介紹】
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新世紀(jì)以來(lái)，中央加大了對(duì)農(nóng)村的扶持力度，從2003年開(kāi)始連續(xù)15年的中央一號(hào)文件都聚焦于農(nóng)業(yè)、農(nóng)村、農(nóng)民（即“三農(nóng)”）問(wèn)題，十七大和十八大也分別提出了城鄉(xiāng)統(tǒng)籌和城鄉(xiāng)一體化的發(fā)展思路，對(duì)推動(dòng)農(nóng)村發(fā)展、增加農(nóng)民收入起到了重要的作用。 蘇州易優(yōu)中考語(yǔ)文培訓(xùn),吳老師語(yǔ)文課（Tel:181-1815-9898）
但是從發(fā)展動(dòng)力來(lái)看，政策重點(diǎn)側(cè)重于城市，使用的政策手段是城市和工業(yè)對(duì)農(nóng)村的反哺和扶持，把農(nóng)村放在了城市的從屬地位。
“易優(yōu)閱讀寶”，中小學(xué)生語(yǔ)文題庫(kù)，語(yǔ)文成績(jī)提升就是快。
鄉(xiāng)村振興戰(zhàn)略的提出，是把鄉(xiāng)村放在了與城市平等的地位上，立足于鄉(xiāng)村的產(chǎn)業(yè)、生態(tài)、文化等資源，注重發(fā)揮鄉(xiāng)村的主動(dòng)性，來(lái)激發(fā)鄉(xiāng)村發(fā)展活力，建立更加可持續(xù)的內(nèi)生增長(zhǎng)機(jī)制。這是一種思路的根本轉(zhuǎn)變，確立了全新的城鄉(xiāng)關(guān)系。
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【佳作賞析】
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A
蘇州易優(yōu)閱讀寫(xiě)作精華課，（tel:181-1815-9898）有趣、有用、提分快
改革開(kāi)放以來(lái)，中國(guó)發(fā)生了翻天覆地的變化。尤其是黨的十九大提出鄉(xiāng)村振興戰(zhàn)略后，美麗鄉(xiāng)村建設(shè)就步入了快車(chē)道。某英文網(wǎng)站正在開(kāi)展以“家鄉(xiāng)的巨變”為主題的征文活動(dòng)。假如你是李洪，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格提示用英文寫(xiě)一篇短文投稿，談?wù)勀慵亦l(xiāng)的變化，至少要有一條自己的觀點(diǎn)。
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Great Changes in My Hometown | ||
過(guò)去 | 現(xiàn)在 | |
住房 | 房子很小、破舊不堪 | 單元套房、樓房 |
交通 | 步行、騎自行車(chē) | 地鐵、高鐵、飛機(jī) |
通訊 | 寫(xiě)信 | 英特網(wǎng)、手機(jī)、微信、QQ |
學(xué)校 | 自己帶桌椅、窗戶無(wú)玻璃 | 寬敞明亮的教室、家鄉(xiāng)最美的地方 |
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寫(xiě)作要求：
1.文章必須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮以使行文連貫；
2.詞數(shù)：80詞左右；（文章的開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）
3.文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名及校名。
Great Changes in My Hometown
Ever since the Reform and Opening-up, great changes have taken place in my hometown.________________
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【答案】
Great Changes in My Hometown
Ever since the Reform and Opening-up, great changes have taken place in my home town. In the old days, people used to live in small and broken houses. But now most people live in apartments in tall buildings. People used to go to work or school on foot or by bike in the past, but now subways, high-speed trains and planes are very convenient to take you anywhere. People used to write letters to keep in touch with each other in the past, but now mobile phones, WeChat and QQ are so popular as well as the Internet. My grandparents told me that they had to take desks and chairs from their homes to school and the classroom windows were broken with no glass, but now the most beautiful places are schools, and the classrooms are wide and bright. There didn’t use to be any hospitals in the countryside, and people had to go a long way to see a doctor. Now doctors come to every family to give physical examinations. There is no doubt that our hometown will become more and more beautiful.
【詳解】
1.題干解讀：該題目是寫(xiě)一篇記敘文，要求根據(jù)表格內(nèi)容提示來(lái)寫(xiě)一篇征文稿，介紹自己家鄉(xiāng)的變化，文章必須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，并且至少要有一條自己的觀點(diǎn)。
2.寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)：本文主要采用第三人稱來(lái)敘述；時(shí)態(tài)上描述過(guò)去用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，描述現(xiàn)在用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。寫(xiě)作時(shí)可適當(dāng)使用一些副詞和連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，表達(dá)具有條理性。
B
為大力推進(jìn)生態(tài)文明建設(shè)，我市開(kāi)展以“生態(tài)鄂州，美麗鄉(xiāng)村”為主題宣傳月活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示，以“共建綠色城市”或“共建美麗鄉(xiāng)村”為主題，寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文，呼吁廣大市民愛(ài)護(hù)環(huán)境、保護(hù)生態(tài), 建設(shè)美麗鄂州。
提示：
主題 | Build a green city / a beautiful village together | |
具體做法 | 方 式 | 益 處 |
1. 騎車(chē)、徒步出行 | 避免交通擁堵，減少空氣污染 | |
2. 不亂扔垃圾，不隨地吐痰 | 讓城市、鄉(xiāng)村變得干凈舒適 | |
3. 植樹(shù)造林 | 美化城市、鄉(xiāng)村，保護(hù)環(huán)境 | |
你的建議 | 聯(lián)系自己的生活實(shí)際提出幾條具體的合理的建議。（至少2條） | |
要求：
1. 80詞左右（開(kāi)頭的首句已給出，不計(jì)算在總詞數(shù)內(nèi).)
2. 文中不能出現(xiàn)自己的姓名和所在學(xué)校的名稱及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分。
參考詞匯：吐痰：spit 垃圾箱：dustbin 交通擁堵：traffic jams 環(huán)境：environment
As a middle school student of Ezhou, it’s our duty to help build a green city / a beautiful village.
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【答案】
As a middle school student of Ezhou,it’s our duty to help build a green city / a beautiful village.We can avoid the traffic jams and reduce the air pollution by riding bikes or walking. We mustn’t throw rubbish or spit anywhere. In This way,we can keep our city/village clean and tidy so that we can live a comfortable life. And we’d better plant more trees to protect the environment and make our city / village beautiful.
In my daily life, I can pick up rubbish and put it into the dustbin wherever I go. I can also save the energy by turning off the lights when leaving the room. In a word,everyone can play a part in building our city /village.
【詳解】
本文屬于材料作文，呼吁廣大市民愛(ài)護(hù)環(huán)境、保護(hù)生態(tài)、建設(shè)美麗鄂州。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。
亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如in this way, keep adj, so that, had better, turn off, in a word, play a part以及by譯為“通過(guò)”，后接doing……增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。
【點(diǎn)睛】
寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：
認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。
構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話題是開(kāi)放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。
初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了，在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。
修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。
C
學(xué)校校報(bào)舉辦“鄉(xiāng)村的變化”主題征文活動(dòng)。在黨中央國(guó)務(wù)院的宏偉藍(lán)圖指引下，農(nóng)村建設(shè)變化日新月異，人們的生活更是蒸蒸日上。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下表提示，以“The Changes in the Countryside”為題，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇80字左右的短文。
注意：
1．文中不得出現(xiàn)具體的地名，否則扣分。
2．字?jǐn)?shù)80字左右，標(biāo)題和開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
3．要點(diǎn)完整，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，意思連貫. 語(yǔ)句通順. 書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范。
過(guò) 去 | 1．生活貧困，房屋破舊。 2．污染嚴(yán)重，垃圾遍地。 |
現(xiàn) 在 | 1．生活：住房寬敞、明亮；馬路更多了，許多人有自己的汽車(chē)。 2．環(huán)境：山更綠，水更清，天更藍(lán)…… |
將 來(lái) | 請(qǐng)你展望鄉(xiāng)村的未來(lái)。 |
The Changes in the Countryside
My grandparents live in the countryside. I often go to visit them and I find the countryside changes day by day. In the past,____________________________________________________________________________________
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【答案】
The Changes in the Countryside
My grandparents live in the countryside. I often go to visit them and I find the countryside changes day by day. In the past, people lived a poor life . The houses were old and small .Pollution was very serious,and there was rubbish everywhere. The traffic was not convenient, so few visitors came here . Now things have changed a lot over the years in the countryside. The environment has become more beautiful . The mountains have turned greener , the rivers cleaner and the sky bluer . There are trees , flowers and grass everywhere .People live a better life . Their houses are large and bright .There are more roads. Many people have their own cars . Every year , thousands of people from all over the world come to visit the countryside. I’m sure the countryside will become better and better in the future .
【解析】
本文內(nèi)容應(yīng)包含表格中所提供的所有信息。靈活運(yùn)用各種時(shí)態(tài)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各個(gè)要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確，簡(jiǎn)潔。最后必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。
點(diǎn)睛：這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少，如：day by day. ； thousands of ；all over the world； better and better；in the future;；There be句型等；運(yùn)用對(duì)比的寫(xiě)法，運(yùn)用了大量的形容詞，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理；同時(shí)語(yǔ)言流暢，內(nèi)容完整，是一篇不錯(cuò)的范文。
D
為慶祝黨的生日，某英文報(bào)刊環(huán)保專欄近期正在舉辦英語(yǔ)征文競(jìng)賽，其主題是贊美家鄉(xiāng)。假設(shè)你是李明，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下面的圖片及要點(diǎn)提示，寫(xiě)一篇以My Beautiful Hometown為題的英語(yǔ)短文投稿。
要點(diǎn)提示：
1. 過(guò)去的家鄉(xiāng)：山、河流、垃圾……；
2. 現(xiàn)在的家鄉(xiāng)：青山、綠水、空氣、花鳥(niǎo)……；
3. 你的感想。
寫(xiě)作要求：
1. 文中必須包含所有提示要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2. 條理清晰，字跡工整，詞數(shù)不少于80；
3. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)人名和地名等相關(guān)信息。
My Beautiful Hometown
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【答案】
My Beautiful Hometown
My home town is a beautiful place. It stands beside a wide river and is rich in fish and rice. There have been a lot of changes in my hometown.
There were several barren mountains and a dirty river in my hometown. There was much rubbish and people lived a hard life. It was a poor and backward little town.
But now, there are green mountains, clean water, fresh air and lots of birds and flowers. The streets have been widened. Factories, schools, hospitals, cinemas and theatres have sprung up one after another. The life of the people has greatly improved.
I love my hometown and its people. We are working hard so as to make it still richer and more beautiful.
【詳解】
1.題干解讀：本文是一篇材料作文。要求以My Beautiful Hometown為題，結(jié)合圖片和提示內(nèi)容進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作，注意要點(diǎn)齊全，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。
2.寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)：寫(xiě)作時(shí)要以第一和第三人稱來(lái)介紹，時(shí)態(tài)綜合使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)。作文可分為四段，第一段引出話題；第二段介紹家鄉(xiāng)的過(guò)去；第三段介紹家鄉(xiāng)的現(xiàn)在；第四段收尾。要保證語(yǔ)言連貫，無(wú)語(yǔ)法和拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤。
E
假如你的家鄉(xiāng)是中國(guó)北部一座美麗的村莊，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下面的要點(diǎn)提示，以“ My hometown”為 題，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇 80-100 詞的短文介紹你的家鄉(xiāng)。開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
提示：
1. 有 80 多年的歷史，以優(yōu)質(zhì)的蘋(píng)果而聞名;
2. 現(xiàn)在村子里有了許多變化(房子變得更大、道路變得更寬、河水變得更清等)
3. 村子?xùn)|邊有幾家俱樂(lè)部，人們工作之余可以鍛煉身體，放松心情。
4…….
My hometown
My hometown is beautiful village in the north of China. ___________________________________________
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【答案】
My hometown is a beautiful village in the north of China. A road runs through it, leading to the nearest market. You can see houses behind green trees along both sides of the road.
It has a long history of 80 years. There are about 300 people in the village. All of them are very friendly. In busy seasons, most of them do farm work in the fields. The village is famous for its fruits. It is famous for the apples. When summer comes, many businessmen drive here to buy them. There are some clubs in the east of the village, which provides some places for people to relax themselves. My hometown is becoming more and more beautiful. I love my hometown very much.
Welcome to my hometown.
【詳解】
1.題干解讀：該題目屬于提綱類(lèi)寫(xiě)作，按題目要求和內(nèi)容介紹自己的家鄉(xiāng)。在寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)承接短文開(kāi)頭簡(jiǎn)介一下家鄉(xiāng)的地理位置；第二段按照內(nèi)容提示，描述家鄉(xiāng)的變化以及現(xiàn)狀。
2.例文點(diǎn)評(píng)：例文采用三段式；中心內(nèi)容以第一人稱分別對(duì)題目的要求短文所包含的信息做了闡述；時(shí)態(tài)采用一般將來(lái)時(shí)為主，內(nèi)容完整且條理清晰。
3.高分亮點(diǎn)：
短語(yǔ)：be famous for；more and more beautiful。
句型：leading to the nearest market非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞表伴隨；which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。
F
某英文報(bào)舉辦“家鄉(xiāng)的變化”主題征文活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)提示，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，以“The Changes in My Hometown”為題，寫(xiě)一篇80詞左右的英文短文。
說(shuō)明：
1、提示僅供參考，不必逐句翻譯。
2、參考詞匯：狹窄的narrow
過(guò)去 | 1. 房屋破舊，街道狹窄。 |
現(xiàn)在 | 1. 住房寬敞明亮，每家都擁有自己的汽車(chē)。 |
將來(lái) | 請(qǐng)你展望家鄉(xiāng)的未來(lái) |
【答案】
The Changes in My Hometown In the past, my hometown was very small. People lived a poor life. The houses were old and small. Pollution was very serious, there was rubbish everywhere. The traffic was not convenient, so few visitors came here. Now great changes have taken place in my hometown. The environment has become more beautiful. The mountain have turned greener, the rivers clearer and the sky bluer. There are trees, flowers and grass everywhere. People live a better life. Their houses are large and bright. Many people have their own cars. Every year, thousands of people from all over the world come to visit our city.
【解析】
試題分析：本篇作文叫小作者介紹家鄉(xiāng)的變化，小作者首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示認(rèn)真審題，確定文章的中心。注意文章文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。要求介紹。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。小作者還必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)情況，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。
寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：這篇短文不僅使用了大量的的短語(yǔ)，可見(jiàn)該生英語(yǔ)功底扎實(shí)。如Now great changes have taken place in my hometown. The environmenthas become more beautiful. The mountain have turned greener, the rivers clearer and the sky bluer.等使文章的表達(dá)更豐富，更有邏輯性，更富有條理。
