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2011同等學力申碩英語作文批改
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　　The Robot Is a Machine After All
　　With development of modern science and technology, Robots could help people in more fields than ever. As far as some people are concerned who believe technology as god, they claim that robots will be as members of human in shorter future. In my opinion,this just is a fantacy illusion,for many things confine the trend, inlcuding technologies and the basic relationships between human and robots etc. The pictures shown in the composition gives us an example.
　　One man wants to play poker with a robot. He could not only set up rules of the game, but even also controll his opponent either. At the beginning of the game,the robot easily win the game.Once the man can not bear the result of the game, he would change the robot in the software of playing game. And then, the man will enjoy the victory of the game.
　　This example say that human is creator, conroller of robots in our worlds. No matter how powerful robots are, they are only serving for our human beings.It is the basic principle for the relationship between human and robot.As it is, robots are machines after all.
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　　你的論據(jù)很不錯，只是文章的結(jié)構(gòu)不是很好，首先在第一段就應該把漫畫中的內(nèi)容表達清楚，說明題目的觀點。第二段就是分析原因，也就是找論據(jù)支持題目觀點，第三段總結(jié)就可以了。另外要注意語法錯誤。只要你把結(jié)構(gòu)稍作改動，再用上你的論據(jù)，文章就會出彩，加油啊。
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