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Not all lectures serve as utilitarian tools. You have to turn to the perfect series of lectures on quantum mechanics presented by Professor Su Rukeng to see a case in which the class plays an exclusively and purely academic role, providing you with motivation, inspiration and philosophy.
With medium stature, thick spectacles and insightful eyes,not only does Professor Su possess the typical characteristics of a learned man, but he is also a genuine scholar, which is reflected in his classes distinctly.
It is generally assumed that lectures on pure science delivered by a conventional scientist, usually indifferent and emotionless, are boring and extremely difficult in that the expression of such topics, if not sheerly descriptive, is inevitably and completely mathematical and analytical without lively pictures.However, that is not Mr. Su's style.
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On the contrary, ranked among the most enjoyable and comprehensible lecturers, Mr. Su is characterized by the encyclope dic knowledge, the appreciable and vivid physical picture visual
ization, the intuitive and profound philosophical ideas and the exceptionally attractive burnout.
As a scientist engaged in the study of nature and the explanation of the universe, Mr. Su seriously believes in the harmony and simplicity, as the fundamental essences, of the natural world, which compose the central motives of his ideology and are the real significance that we learn from him.
As a consequence, Professor Su, together with his extraor dinary creativeness and imaginativeness, exerts a strong influence upon us and greatly encourages us to ponder on the essence of the universe and our lives.
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本文描寫了作者的一個老師Professor Su。他的與眾不同之處在于能把枯燥的純理論課程講得生動而有趣。作者首先描寫了教授的外貌：medium stature，thick spectacles and insightful eyes，儼然是一個學(xué)者的形象；然后作者指出，與傳統(tǒng)觀念相反，Professor Su的課程能激發(fā)學(xué)生的靈感和求知欲。作者有一段這樣的描寫：Mr．Su is characterized by the encyclopedic knowledge，the appreciable and vivid physical picture visualization，the intuitive and profound philosophical ideas and the exceptionally attractive humour，幾個并列的詞組勾勒出教授的博學(xué)和風(fēng)格。最后，作者提到了教授對自己的影響：激勵自己思索宇宙和人生的真諦。 易優(yōu)作文批改系統(tǒng)，易優(yōu)作文批改、易優(yōu)作文點評 <a href=http://www.zequeka.cn/jiaoshoulanmu/>易優(yōu)作文批改</A>
文章詞匯豐富、用詞準(zhǔn)確，但不足之處是作者過分依賴長句。全文只有一個短句：However，that is not Mr．Su's style．一般來說，短句鏗鏘有力，適合用來突出或強(qiáng)調(diào)所表達(dá)的觀點；長句適合表達(dá)較為復(fù)雜的觀點或內(nèi)容，描述性或理論性的內(nèi)容。如果一個
段落或一篇文章全是簡單句，會使所表達(dá)的內(nèi)容缺乏連貫性和完整性；而長句過多則顯得重點不突出，拖沓冗長，也增加了理解上的難度。因此要合理地交替使用長短句：如在使用一系列長句以表達(dá)復(fù)雜的思想和畫面之后，用一個短句收尾，能產(chǎn)生一種新鮮和扣人心弦的效果；或在一系列短句之后使用一個長句，能讓讀者有一種圓滿的感覺。
此外，作者還用了很多插入成分，使句子不夠流暢。插入成分太多，容易出現(xiàn)主謂不一致的情況。 作文能力提升，就來易優(yōu)作文,https://www.euw.net
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