Beauty on the Campus 英語作文 網(wǎng)整理收集 英語作文 網(wǎng) 345543.com
It is believed in common that beauty exists everywhere on the campus as long as you have an eye for it. Some people hold that natural scenes, especially at dawn, are the most beautiful on the campus while others believe that it is in the afternoon when the playgrounds are flooded with students taking part in sports.In my opinion, the best scene on the campus is during the rush hour when thousands of students rush towards the canteen.
At precisely the same time as the bell rings, some students dash from the chairs, rushing to the canteen. They set the prelude to the most attractive scene of the whole day.
Within a few minutes, all the classrooms become empty and everyone starts their journey for lunch, on foot or by bike. It gives people the impression that lunch is the most important thing in the world. Most of the students move at the same speed,with the exception of several excellent cyclists. They shuttle smoothly in the crowds just like fish swimming freely in the sea.
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On the way to the canteen, everyone looks anxious. But once inside, a look of pride and triumph takes over. Sometimes,it bubbles up in my mind that the rush hour hustle and bustle is the epitome of the intense competition in real life. If you want to realize your expectations, you must be armed with skills and knowledge, use time and resources efficiently and the most importantly, have a healthy body.
簡 評
本文描寫了校園中的一景：中午時分，學生或騎車或步行，爭先恐后趕去食堂用餐的場景。值得一提的是幾個動詞把學生的動作描寫得非常生動，如dash from the chairs，rushing to the canteen;shuttle smoothly In the crowds just like fish swimmmg freely in the sea等。除了動作，還有神態(tài)的描寫：在去食堂的路上，人人面露焦慮之色，而一旦走進食堂，取而代之的是a look of pride and triumph，栩栩如生地刻畫出學生當時的心情。
由此，作者聯(lián)想到激烈的競爭在生活中無所不在。要實現(xiàn)自己的理想，必須用技術和知識武裝自己，有效地運用時間和資源，而且，最重要的是，要有一個健康的體魄。使文章的立意更為深刻。
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Beauty on the Campus 英語作文網(wǎng)整理收集 英語作文網(wǎng) 345543.com
