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約塞米蒂國家公園之旅Trip to Yosemite
Kent H. A third illustration of the notion that plans can always go wrong is seen through my experiences in the Boy Scouts of America. Last summer, I led a thirty-mile backpack trip through the Yosemite Valley. For months prior to the trip, I planned out the schedules, meals, equipment, parent volunteers, and path that we would follow. As the trip approached, I was confident that it was going to be a great success as a result of all of the planning that I had done in advance. However, on the morning of the trip something went extremely wrong. One of the father chaperones didn't show up because he thought that the trip was a week later than it actually was. Consequently, the number of adult leaders on the trek was cut down by one and the number of drivers that would take us to our starting point was reduced. We made do with one less supervisor, but the miscommunication had resulted in serious setbacks.
點評：這個段落展現(xiàn)了句子結構的多樣性和過渡技巧的巧妙。Kent在幾乎所有句子的開頭都使用了介紹性短語或從句作為前奏。比如："For months prior to the trip, I planned out the schedules, meals, equipment, parent volunteers, and path that we would follow. As trip approached, I was confident that it was going to be a great success as a result of all the planning that I had done in advance."這些從句是一個優(yōu)秀作者的標志。另外，我很喜歡Kent結束文章的短語"resulted in serious setback"。比起俗氣的"shit happens"，這個短語優(yōu)美具有內(nèi)涵，把它收入囊中吧
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