中考英語作文：如何寫校園生活
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校園生活是比較好寫、有東西可寫的話題，因為作為學(xué)生，大部分的時間都是在學(xué)校這個大環(huán)境中度過的。就考試題目而言，要選取校園生活中豐富多彩、受益匪淺、意義非凡的些話題， 如:最喜歡的校園活動、 最成功的競賽經(jīng)歷、 最難忘的師生情誼、 最不舍的好友陪伴、最受益的一次課堂等。只要內(nèi)容是積極向上的，都可以進行取材。同樣的，語言上一定要注意用多樣的句型和生動的詞匯來使記敘更流暢、更吸引人。 作文批改系統(tǒng)，易優(yōu)作文批改、作文點評、作文打分系統(tǒng)，<a href=http://www.zequeka.cn/jiaoshoulanmu/>易優(yōu)作文批改</A>
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題目
Write a short passage of at least 60 words on the topic "The most / est
activity I took part in at school". (以“我在校參加的-次最 的活動”為題，寫一篇
不少于60個詞的作文。)
為了豐富學(xué)生生活，給學(xué)生提供更多的學(xué)習(xí)和展示平臺，學(xué)校每年舉行各種活動，請選取其中一項活動，談?wù)勀愕慕?jīng)歷和對這項活動的評價。
審題
這篇全命題文章在審題過程中要注查的核心詞有“活動”、“經(jīng)歷”、“評價”，這些是作的重要得分點。
(1)“活動”要求前面補充定語，即某形容詞最高級，井且該形容詞應(yīng)是有積極向上意的，如interesting / exciting / unforgettable 1 meaningful等等。選材方面要選擇學(xué)生在校里參加的某一項具體活動，比如“機器人設(shè)計比賽”、“歌唱比賽”、“英語單詞拼寫活動”“跑步比賽”等。
(2)“經(jīng)歷”是文章的重點部分，要求闡述自己的經(jīng)歷，從自身出發(fā)，寫出自己的真情感。要注意該部分的時態(tài)應(yīng)該是過去時，交代清楚敘事的幾大要素。注意要用相對應(yīng)的語來突出所補充的形容詞，如補充詞是interesting,則語言就要生動活潑、突出如何有趣。(3)“評價”這部分是對補充題目中形容詞的一個呼應(yīng) 和拓展，學(xué)生要在這部分里把這活動的積極影響充分表達出來。
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
根據(jù)題目要求，可以參考以下結(jié)構(gòu)進行寫作:
第一部分The 1st part
點明你曾參加過的你認(rèn)為最 _的一次學(xué)?；顒?。
Our school holds a variety of activities to enrich our campus life. Or of the most interesting 1 exciting / meaningful 1 creative 1 successful unforgettable activities is ...
第二部分The 2nd part
闡述你參加這項活動的經(jīng)歷。
I took part in .... activity last year.
I was very excited to take part in .. activity when ...
第三部分The 3rd part
你為何認(rèn)為這項活動最 (補充題目的形容詞)，對你有什么積極影響，首尾呼應(yīng)。
... makes the activity so .... and I learn .... from it.
It has a great effect on my ... and I hope our school will provide more chances like that.
核心語匯
campus life校園生活
take part in/ join in參加
take an active part in積極參加
make full use of these activities to improve oneself充分 利用這些活動提升自.
provide us with more opportunities to study提供更多學(xué)習(xí)機會
enrich our life豐富我們的生活
a sense of fulfillment成就感
make an effort/ make efforts to do努力做某事
make a joint effort共同努力
make progress取得進步
參考句型
... activity takes place / is held in our school every year.我校每年都舉...活動。
The more activities we take part in, the more colorful life we will have.
參加的活動越多，生活就會越豐富多彩。
The reason why I like this activity is that .....我 喜歡這項活動的理由是.....
Taking part in the activity enables me to ...參加這些活動使我能夠......
Through this activity, I learn that ...通過這項活動我學(xué)到了.....
It is this activity that helps me ....正是這項活動幫助我....
習(xí)作一
The most exciting activity I took part in at school
I like English, and the English Debating Contest is the most exciting activity for me at school. I took part in the contest last month and our team won the first prize.
We were very excited but the result was not surprising because we practiced a lot together, which is one of the reasons why I love this activity cooperation. Without the teammates' joint efforts and encouragement, there is no way of achieving success. On the other hand, this activity teaches me to be confident. It is self- confidence that helps me express myself out loud. And I believe it makes me a better man in the future.
I’m looking forward to the next English Debating Contest.
點評：
這篇習(xí)作的整體結(jié)構(gòu)安排有失偏頗，開篇點題“最振奮人心的英語辯論賽”活動，然后只用一個句子表明自己參加過這次活動，接下來闡述這項活動的教育意義一。合作”和“自信”，最后結(jié)尾以表達愿望結(jié)束。這樣的安排重點談?wù)摿恕霸u價” 而忽略了描述“經(jīng)歷”，不符合題目要求中的結(jié)構(gòu)安排，也不能有效地從經(jīng)歷描述中看出“最振奮人心”這一主題。但語言方面該學(xué)生的水平還是較高的，用詞地道，表達流暢，surprising 1cooperation / express / joint efforts 1 look forward to 等為文章添彩；句型豐富，用到了強調(diào)句、定語從句等:句與句之間的邏輯關(guān)系詞如because 1 on the other hand等也使文章整體緊湊有力。因此，如果在審題上能夠再權(quán)衡一下“經(jīng)歷”和“評價”，將其在內(nèi)容上的比例再調(diào)整下，這篇文章將會提升一個檔次。
修改稿
The most exciting activity I took part in at school
I like English, and the English Debating Contest is the most exciting activity for me at school.
I took part in the contest last month. Our team got well prepared for it and rehearsed many times. Of course, difficulties and disagreement appeared sometimes but the teammates' goal was the same - to win the first prize. And finally we achieved our goal because we supported and encouraged each other until the end.
I learn cooperation from this activity. Teamwork is the key to our success. Besides, this activity also teaches me to be confident. It is self confidence that helps me express myself out loud. And I believe it makes me a better man in the future.
I'm looking forward to the next English Debating Contest.
習(xí)作2
The most meaningful activity I took part in at school
As a Grade Nine student, although I'm busy with my study, I take part in a variety of activities at school And the 1000-meter race is the most meaningful one.
I took part in this race last year. I tried my best and I believed I could hold on to the finishing line because I had practiced running very hard, To my great joy, I made it!Although I didn't get any prize, I broke my record in the game. I brought honor to not only myself, but also my class.
Therefore, the 1000 meter race is the most meaningful activity I took part in at school.
點評:
這篇文章內(nèi)容完整，表達流暢，通過對“參加千米賽跑”的描述，體會到這一-活動“意義非凡”一一“盡管沒有獲獎，但是因為自己的努力和堅持，打破了自己的最佳紀(jì)錄，并且為自己和班級都贏得了榮譽”。簡單的描述中卻透露著莫大的自豪，這就是緊扣主題“有意義”。語言方面，該生用詞簡潔，無浮夸之詞，表達流暢，朗朗上口，時態(tài)準(zhǔn)確無誤。因此，從這篇文章來看，“簡潔” 有時候也可以寫出優(yōu)秀作文。
相關(guān)話題優(yōu)秀范文解析
（一）
Getting on with Classmates
There is a lot of fun in my school life, because I have many lovely and friendly classmates there. We get on well with each other.
I often study in the classroom with my classmates. While meeting with difficult problems in our homework, we discuss them together.When classmates are in trouble, we try our best to help them. After school, we play sports on the playground. We play basketball, football, badminton and soon. Sometimes we have some class activities, such as singing songs together.We are in a harmonious class.
I am very glad to meet my classmates, who bring me so much fun. I hope that we could all get into a good senior high school.
參考譯文
和同學(xué)相處
我的校園生活充滿著很多樂趣，因為在那里我有很多可愛又友好的同學(xué)。我們相處得很好。我經(jīng)常和我的同學(xué)在教室里學(xué)習(xí)。當(dāng)做作業(yè)遇到難題時，我們會起討論。 當(dāng)同學(xué)有西難的時候。我們會盡最大的努力來帶助他們，課后，我們在操場上活動。我們年球陽足球，打羽毛球，等等。有時候我們有電班級活動， 比如起明取。 我們(生活)在一個和諧的班級里。
我非常高興遇到我的同學(xué)們，他們帶給我很多的快樂。我希望我們都能進入一個好的高中。
亮點詞匯
friendly友好的
difficult .困難的
discuss討論
in trouble在困難中
class activities班級活動
discuss討論
出彩句型
There is a lot of fun in my school life.我的校園生活充滿著很多樂趣。
We get on well with each other.我們相處得很好。
We try our best to do.... 我們盡最大的努力來....
We are in a harmonious class. 我們(生活)在一個和諧的班級里。
I am very gad to...我非常高......
高分點評
本文的主題明確，邏輯清晰，主要敘述了和同學(xué)相處的時光，表達了濃濃的同學(xué)之博。文章采取了三段式的寫法，開篇點題，中間詳細(xì)展開，最后再進行回應(yīng)，并表達自己的期里，脈絡(luò)清楚，文章的句式簡法而又富有變化，短語、 詞組的運用也恰到好處，如”a iot of fun”"get on well with" 等。
（二）
A Relay Race
The sports meeting in our school is very interesting, and many students participate in it every year.
This year, I took part in the relay race, in which I ran the last lap. It was the final event at the sports meeting. Everyone paid great attention to it. All the runners got ready at the starting line. As soon as the race began, everyone was too nervous to cheer. When it was my turn, I could feel that a runner was catching up with me, so I tried my best to run faster.Finally, our class won the first prize in this most exciting event.
1 was very happy that | won the prize for my class. This was the most unforgettable sports meeting that I had had.
參考譯文
一次接力賽
我們學(xué)校的運動會很有趣，每年很多學(xué)生都會參與到其中去。
今年，我參加了接力賽，在比賽中我跑最后一棒。 這是運動會的最后一個項目。每個人都很關(guān)注這個項目。所有的運動員在起跑線上做準(zhǔn)備。比賽一開始，所有人都緊張得停止了呼喊。當(dāng)輪到我時，我能感到有一名運動員正在追上我，所以我盡最大的努力讓自己跑得更快一些。最后，我們班在這項最激動人心的項目中贏得了第一名。
我非常高興自己為班級贏得了獎項。這是我最難忘的一次運動會。
亮點詞匯
participate in.參加...參.....
relay race接力賽
starting line起跑線
nervous 不安的;緊張的
win the first prize贏得一等獎
出彩句型
Everyone paid great attention to...每個人都很關(guān)注.....
nervous不安的，掌來的
as soon as... .一......就......
everyone was .....每個人都.....以至.....
It was one's turn.輪到某人。
This is the most unforgettable.. that I had.這是我最難忘的.....
高分點評
本文將接力賽的"interesting" 描寫得淋漓盡致，使讀者產(chǎn)生身臨其境的感覺，感受著運動場.上的緊張與激動。本文的開頭、過程、結(jié)尾交代得清清楚楚，讓讀者一覽便明。作者在文中還運用了大量的精彩句式，如0.... t.." "It was one' s turn."等。
相關(guān)話題滿分作文必背
（一）
書面表達：
Write a passe of at less 60 words about the topic “A ten minute break'.(以“十分鐘的休息時間”為題寫篇不少于 60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點符號不占格。)
提示:進入初三以來，同學(xué)們信感學(xué)習(xí)任務(wù)重，壓力大。許多同學(xué)爭分奪秒，甚至連課間十分鐘的休息時間也在看書做題。請以“A ten minute break"為題，描寫這一現(xiàn)象(包括你自己的做法)，并針對這一現(xiàn)象談?wù)勀愕目捶?。
A ten-minute break
Graduation is around the corner, so we are under a lot of pressure and spend most time going over lessons. Some of my classmates even make use of their ten-minute break to do their homework. But for me, I just want to take a good rest during this period of time in order to learn more efficiently in my next class. The reason is that we are not supermen, and we need rest, which can ensure us a fresh mind to learn better. If we keep working hard during the ten minute break, there is no doubt that some students will be s0 tired that they will even fall asleep in class Therefore, when a class is over, I advise all of us to walk out of the classroom and take a dep breath to have a good rest.
（二）
Write a passage on “A letter to my headmaster/headmistress”in at least 60 words about the according to the given situation (以“給校長的一 封信” 為題，寫筒不少于60個詞的文章。提示:初中學(xué)習(xí)階投肯定給你留下許多回憶，有甜美， 有苦濕，這些都是寶貴的人生經(jīng)話在即將告別你的初中生活時，請你以Susan的名義給校長寫封信，分享件讓你最難忘的校園活動，并提出一”個你最希望學(xué)校改進的方面。
Dear Headmaster,
My graduation is approaching and I am writing to share an unforgettable activity with you and discuss one problem about our school.
Our school holds various activities for us every year and they bring us lots of wonderful memories. Thank you and all of our teachers. One of my favorite activities is our last sports meeting. It was special because most of the teachers, including you, joined us, which made the sports events far more exciting and meaningful than before.
I also want to tell you one problem that I want our school to solve. Our cafeteria provides us with delicious lunch but there are too few seats. Some students have to stand by the table for food. Therefore, I hope you will help improve the situation in our cafeteria.
Sincerely yours,
Susan
