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成長(zhǎng)歷程的話題無外乎是有關(guān)學(xué)生成長(zhǎng)過程中所經(jīng)歷過的事件，以及從中學(xué)習(xí)到的經(jīng)驗(yàn)和教訓(xùn)，主要集中于學(xué)生走向成熟、擺脫稚嫩的過程。從學(xué)生的身份角度來講，話題可能會(huì)涉及家庭生活和學(xué)校學(xué)習(xí)方面所擁有的成長(zhǎng)經(jīng)歷，以及人生體驗(yàn)而引發(fā)的處事態(tài)度、人生觀、價(jià)值觀、人格品質(zhì)等方面的回顧和分析，并進(jìn)行領(lǐng)悟和自我完善。如，通過某個(gè)挫折學(xué)會(huì)了自我鼓舞;通過某次經(jīng)歷學(xué)到了自信獨(dú)立;通過某項(xiàng)活動(dòng)提高了自身能力等等。而這些題目既可以是全命題文章，也可以是半命題文章，話題多樣，要謹(jǐn)慎審題，安排好文章結(jié)構(gòu)。
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.題目
Write at least 60 words with the topic“I learn from this experience". (請(qǐng)你以“我從這次經(jīng)歷中學(xué)會(huì)”為題， 寫一篇不少于 60個(gè)詞的短文。).每個(gè)人在成長(zhǎng)歷程中，都有著各種各樣經(jīng)歷，這些經(jīng)歷對(duì)其成長(zhǎng)也起著不同的影響。請(qǐng)你選取一次經(jīng)歷進(jìn)行描述，并與大家分享你從中學(xué)會(huì)了些什么。
審題
這是一篇以成長(zhǎng)中的學(xué)習(xí)為主題的半命題記敘文。learn 后面可以補(bǔ)充to be ... 1 to dosomething / something這些形式，但具體選擇什么取決于后面的“this experience"。乍一看，應(yīng)該有很多話題可供選擇，或許會(huì)無從下手。但仔細(xì)思考，應(yīng)該選取那些對(duì)個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)起積極影響和作用的經(jīng)歷，比如“學(xué)會(huì)團(tuán)隊(duì)合作的一次活動(dòng)”、“學(xué) 會(huì)誠實(shí)守信的一次體驗(yàn)”“學(xué)會(huì)尊重他人的次經(jīng)歷”等，題目明確要求“就其中個(gè)進(jìn)行描述”，并且要交代 “你從中學(xué)會(huì)些什么”。因此，選取一個(gè)有意義的話題進(jìn)行描述，交代清楚幾大要素:人物、時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、發(fā)展經(jīng)過(即who 1 when 1 where 1 what)，并寫出它對(duì)自身成長(zhǎng)的重要性(即how).這些是文章的內(nèi)容精髓。所以，該題目的審題核心詞在于:“一次經(jīng)歷”和“學(xué)會(huì)些什么”。同時(shí)還需要注意的是，對(duì)于“經(jīng)歷”的描述應(yīng)使用過去時(shí)。
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
本文可采用三段式的寫作結(jié)構(gòu):
第一部分The 1st part
補(bǔ)充題目，引人文章的主題，為想要記敘的主題進(jìn)行鋪墊。如:
During my process of growing up, I learn a lot from the experience ....
I have had this experience that teaches me a lot about
I remember one experience clearly because it enables me to realize that ...
第二部分The 2nd part
文章的中心部分，對(duì)選取的話題展開描述。如:
It happened on ... /in ..
When I was at the age of....
第三部分The 3rd part
文章的結(jié)尾段，對(duì)全文進(jìn)行總結(jié)，情感升華，首尾呼應(yīng)，說明“學(xué)會(huì)些什么”。如:
From this ... experience, I realize / learn that ...
... was known / learnt from this experience, and I will / won't ... in the future.
核心語匯
■growth 成長(zhǎng)(名詞)
grow up 成長(zhǎng)
learn from sb.向某人學(xué)習(xí)
. learn about sth.了解某事
. learn the lesson of ...得到教訓(xùn)....
. learn .. by heart/ keep ... in mind牢牢記住
be fully aware of ...充分意識(shí)到.....
■... play an important role...起重要作用
. develop a good habit of ..養(yǎng)成....的好習(xí)慣
■overcome:/ solve / work out difficulties克服/解決困難
■experience the excitement of growing up體驗(yàn)成長(zhǎng)的快樂
manage to do 1 succeed in doing成功做某事
enable ... to do ...使....能夠做....
■team work (spirit)團(tuán)隊(duì)合作(精神)
. be responsible for.對(duì)....負(fù)責(zé)
參考句型
. Life is full of ups and downs.生活處處有苦也有樂。
. The reason why ... is that .......的原因是.....
This experience taught me a lot because ....這次經(jīng)歷教會(huì)我很多，因?yàn)?/span>....
Thanks to this experience, I finally realize that... 多虧了這次經(jīng)歷，我終于意識(shí)到......
Growing up means we should ...成長(zhǎng)意味著我們應(yīng)該.....
. I didn't realize how important ... is until ...直到....我才意識(shí)到....的重要性。.
I realize that .. is so important that I must ..我意識(shí)到....如此重要， 我一定.....
It is ... that makes me grow up more ..正.....使得我成長(zhǎng)得更.....
. I learn from the experience that ...我從這個(gè)經(jīng)歷中學(xué)到....
. Difficulties and frustrations are unavoidable.困難和挫折是不可避免的。
We should pull ourselves together.我們應(yīng)該振作起來。
習(xí)作1
I learn love from this experience
My mother teaches me a lot of things. But the most important is that she teaches me how to love others.
Last month, my mother took me to a charity organization where lots of people were waiting there to donate money to some poor children in the remote countryside. Besides money, we also bring a lot of used clothes. She told me she wished there wouldn't be poor children who suffered from hunger and cold. She also hoped me to be a person full of love.
I learn love from this experience. I hope there will be more love in the world.
點(diǎn)評(píng):這篇習(xí)作從結(jié)構(gòu)上看基本是完整的，但從整體內(nèi)容上看，與其說是從“this experience"中學(xué)會(huì)"love" ，倒不如說是“my mother"教會(huì)我的，所以主題上對(duì)于“this experience"的處理不是很恰當(dāng)，即沒有在審題的時(shí)候抓住核心詞“-次經(jīng)歷”，而是偏重于突出“母親”對(duì)“我”影響，而非具體描述這次經(jīng)歷。語言上問題不大，出現(xiàn)一處時(shí)態(tài) 上的錯(cuò)誤，we also bring應(yīng)為we also brought。除此以外，句型結(jié)構(gòu)比較單， 還可以通過變化句型來使文章再提高一個(gè)檔次。
修改稿
I learn love from this experience
I had an unforgettable experience that taught me to love others.
Last month,my mother took me to a charity organization where 1 had never been.When I saw so many people waiting there to make donation I felt shocked and moved. A volunteer told me here were lots of poor children who didn't have enough money to buy food or clothes Another one advised me to donate some books because it would be helpful for those children to gain more knowledge. So I returned home and brought lots of books immediately.
It is love that enables so many people to care for others who they even don't know. It is love that makes the world a happy place. After this experience, I decide to join in charity activities more often to spread my love to others.
習(xí)作2
I learn to be brave and independent from this experience
In the process of growing up, it is unavoidable to face some difficulties. But there is no need to be frightened because learning something from them is the most important.
Last year, I went abroad for sightseeing. I was so excited at the beautiful scenery that I failed to stay close with my parents. I lost my way. Tears and fear tuned out to be useless,so I had to calm down. I knew I must depend on myself.Finally, I managed to find the local police and the problem was solved.
From this experience, I learn to be brave and independent, because courage and independence can help me overcome difficulties and get prepared for other problems in the future.
點(diǎn)評(píng):成長(zhǎng)歷程有很多可以寫的東西，-次印象深刻且有教育意義的經(jīng)歷不失為一一個(gè)易寫的話題，可以輕松做到寫之有物兼顧語言精練，這篇習(xí)作便是如此。以“人生難題”為引人，“異國迷路”為主題，“勇 氣加獨(dú)立”為成長(zhǎng)教訓(xùn)，結(jié)構(gòu)安排上中規(guī)中矩，可以得到滿分。從unavoidable / there is no need to / be excited at / turn out等地道表達(dá)和多樣的句型結(jié)構(gòu)中，也可知該生語言修養(yǎng)上乘，思路清晰。本篇作文語句精簡(jiǎn)，無冗贅之辭，所以可以算是一篇A檔優(yōu)秀作文。
相關(guān)話題優(yōu)秀范文解析
（一）
Mountain Climbing
last summer, I went mountain climbing together with my father. I still remember the day until now.
We started climbing the mountain early in the morning.But when the sun came up, it became very hot. I got all
sweaty, feeling dizzy and tired, so 1 couldn't help complaining and wanted to quit. Hearing my complaint, my father encouraged me not to give up and helped me wipe away the sweat on the face. He said, "We won' t see the fantastic scenery unless we reach the top." | suddenly cheered up and continued to climb with full strength. We got to the top at last and enjoyed the beauty of the nature that I had never seen.
I could never forgot that experience and the lesson from that day. The beauty can only be seen after you make your efforts.
參考譯文
爬山
去年暑假，我和爸爸一起去爬了山。 直到現(xiàn)在我還記得那天。
一大早， 我們就開始爬山。但是當(dāng)太陽出來的時(shí)候，天氣變得很熱。我全身都是汗，又暈又累，所以我禁不住抱怨起來，并想要放棄。聽到了我的抱怨，爸爸鼓勵(lì)我不要放棄，并幫我擦掉了臉上的汗。他說:“除非我們到達(dá)山頂，否則無法看到美麗的景色?！蔽彝蝗皇艿搅斯奈?，繼續(xù)全力往上爬。我們最終到達(dá)了山頂，并欣賞到了我從未看過的大自然的美麗。
我永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)忘記那次經(jīng)歷，也不會(huì)忘記那天得到的啟示。美麗只有在你努力過后才能看到。
亮點(diǎn)詞匯
together wit.h.. ....一走
come up出來;出現(xiàn)
sweaty 出汗的
dizzy .眩暈的
complaint抱怨;怨言
wipe away擦掉;抹掉
出彩句型
I couldn’t help doing.....我禁不住
Hearing.....，my father.......聽到了....我爸爸.
We won't.. unless.我們不會(huì)... 除非.......
The beauty can only be seen after you make your efforts美麗只有在你努力過后才能看到，
高分點(diǎn)評(píng)
本文描述了作者和爸爸的一一次爬山經(jīng)歷，豐富的細(xì)節(jié)描寫，使人有身臨其境的感覺。作者在文中運(yùn)用了豐富的句型，如when引導(dǎo)的定語從句和unless引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句，為文章潤色不少。最后得出的啟發(fā)，更是點(diǎn)出了文章的主旨，將文章提升了一個(gè)高度。
（二）
Go Back Home Alone
There was an unforgettable experience in my childhood.When 1 was seven years old, my mother would pick me up from the school every day. But one day, my mother told me that she wouldn't do this any more. 1 was afraid of going back home alone, so 1 tried to persuade her. Although 1 told her my fear, she still insisted on her idea.She thought "It was good for me to learn to be independent.The next day after school ,I took a bus to go back home. I forgot to see the bus route when I get on..Therefore when the bus was more and more far away from my home, 1 felt very terrified.Finally, I go 1o the last stop, and then took the Same bus back home.
After that, 1 learned to go back home alone. And this experience made me know more about independence.
參考譯文
獨(dú)自回家
我的童年有過一次難以忘懷的經(jīng)歷。
在我7歲的時(shí)候，我的媽媽每天會(huì)接我放學(xué)。但是有一天，媽媽說，她不會(huì)再接我放學(xué)了。我害怕一個(gè)人回家，所以我試圖說服她。盡管我告訴了她我的恐懼，她仍堅(jiān)持她的想法。她認(rèn)為學(xué)會(huì)獨(dú)立對(duì)我來說是件好事。第二天下課后，我就坐了-輛公共汽車回家。當(dāng)我上車時(shí)，我忘記看路線了。因此，當(dāng)車離我家越來越遠(yuǎn)時(shí)，我感到非常害怕。最后，我到達(dá)了終點(diǎn)站，然后坐了同樣的公交車回家。
從那以后，我學(xué)會(huì)了獨(dú)自回家。這次經(jīng)歷讓我更了解了獨(dú)立的含義。
亮點(diǎn)詞匯
go back home回家
persuade勸說;說服
far away from.. 遠(yuǎn)......
alone 獨(dú)自地
independence 獨(dú)立
出彩句型
There was a().. experience in my childhood在我的童年，有一次..的經(jīng)歷。
Although . she still insisted on her idea.即.....她仍堅(jiān)持她的想法。
She thought it was good for me to..地她認(rèn)....對(duì)我好。
I forgot to... when I got on.當(dāng)我上車的時(shí)候我忘記..
高分點(diǎn)評(píng)
本文以頗具戲劇性的過程展現(xiàn)了作者學(xué)會(huì)獨(dú)立的一個(gè)過程一學(xué) 會(huì)自己放學(xué)回家，文章細(xì)節(jié)生動(dòng)，真實(shí)具體，并在其中呈現(xiàn)了“我” 和“媽媽”兩個(gè)人物鮮明的性格特點(diǎn)。作者對(duì)賓語從句的運(yùn)用非常嫻熟，如"my mother told me that."和"She though."，地加句式變化的同時(shí)，使文章的表達(dá)更為流利、順暢。
滿分作文必背
（一）
書面表達(dá)：
Write at least 60 words about the topic "I try, I grow!" (以“我努力，我成長(zhǎng)”為題，寫-篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。)
提示:在你的學(xué)習(xí)和生活中，一定 遇到過很多困難或挑戰(zhàn)，在應(yīng)對(duì)這些困難和挑戰(zhàn)的過中，你一定學(xué)習(xí)和體驗(yàn)過很多東西，請(qǐng)選其中-件，談?wù)勀愕慕?jīng)歷以及收獲和體會(huì)。
I try, I grow!
As a Grade Nine student, the time of graduation is approaching. Looking back on the
past three years study, there have been many difficulties for me not only in study but also in life. There is an unforgettable experience Id like to share with you.
It was the first time that 1 didn't pass an important exam At that time, 1 was 80depresed that 1 could hardly control myself After knowing that I was in bad mood, my best friend spent all her free time comforting me and never sopped encouraging me With her help and my own fores, 1 finally succeeded in making progress
After that, 1 will never lose confidence and will always keep working. because 1 firmly believe that if there is no sweat, there will be no sweet.
（二）
書面表達(dá)：
Write at least 60 words on the topic "Harvest". (以“收獲”為題，寫箱不少于 60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。)
The following is for reference only. (以下問題僅供參考。)
1. Which harvest impressed you most in your growth?
How did the harvest happen?
3. Why do you think it was a harvest?
4. Do you have any changes after the harvest?
Harvest
In my growth, giving an English speech in front of all the students was the greatest harvest.I had been afraid of English learning until it was my turn to give the class an English speech. With the help of my teacher, I, a rather shy person by nature who easily surfers from stage fright, had to plunk up great courage to take part in it. To my surprise, 1 did it successfully.
For me, it was a meaningful step forward, small as it was, in the long journey toward the final success in my life, because 1 had truly gained confidence by participating This harvest enables me to be more confident not only in English learning but also in many other aspects of my life.
（三）
書面表達(dá)：
Write at least 60 words with the topic "Growing up". (請(qǐng)你以“成長(zhǎng)”為題，寫筒不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。
提示:在每個(gè)人的成長(zhǎng)過程中，有些因素對(duì)人的成長(zhǎng)具有重要的作用。如，一樁事、一件物、一個(gè)人、一段經(jīng)歷、一次體....請(qǐng)你就其中的一個(gè)進(jìn)行描述， 與大家分享。
要求:內(nèi)容切題、語句通順、意思連貫、字跡清楚。
Growing up
Among so many people who love me in the process of growing up, my father gives me the most useful education. For example, when he taught me how to ride a bicycle, I learnt more than that.
When I was 10, my father told me I could try to ride a bicycle. After telling me some skills, he just let me practice by myself. I kept practicing though I fell down many times.Three days later, I could manage to ride the bicycle very well. And then my father said he wanted me to learn that some skills were helpful while some were not suitable for me. And the best way was to experience and practice by myself.
It is true, and it is very useful for my growth.
