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假如你是陽光中學的李華，每周五下午你校開設校本必修課(required course)與選修課(elective course),請介紹必修課Travel of Science, 根據(jù)個人情況選擇一門選修課并說明理由；同時，對你的選擇的課程提出建議。 作文批改系統(tǒng)，易優(yōu)作文批改、作文點評、作文打分系統(tǒng)，<a href=http://www.zequeka.cn/jiaoshoulanmu/>易優(yōu)作文批改</A>
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Subject | Travel of science l introducing scientists and inventions | Subject | Photography l taking photos | Gardening l growing flowers |
Teacher | a professor | Teacher | a young reporter | 4:00 p.m.-4:45 p.m. School’s garden |
Time & Place | l 2:30 p .m.- 3:15 p.m. l school hall | Time & Place | l 4:00 p.m.-4:45 p.m. l City Park | An old gardener |
Tip | take notebooks and pens | Tip | Take cameras | tools offered by school |
要求：
1. 所寫內(nèi)容必須包括必修課及一門選修課的所有信息；
2. 對你所選擇的一門選修課說明理由，并對其提出建議；
3. 文章不少于90詞，開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
4. 語意通順，意思連貫，條理清楚，書寫規(guī)范；
5. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的姓名、校名等信息。
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【寫作思路】
這篇作文要求我們對學校周五下午安排的必修課和選修課程進行介紹。審題可知，短文應使用一般現(xiàn)在時，第一人稱為主來敘述。內(nèi)容應包括以下幾個方面：首先介紹必修課程Travel of science，題目中利用表格的形式展示了這個課程的主要內(nèi)容、老師、上課的時間、地點以及小提示，學生們根據(jù)表格用正確的英語表達出來即可；接下來應根據(jù)個人情況，從表格中提供的兩門選修課中選擇一個，闡述自己的理由，并對該課程提出一些建議。這一部分需要學生們展開想象，結(jié)合自己的實際生活，補充具體的內(nèi)容，再用英語表達出來。寫作時應注意：首先短文應包括題目中要求的所有內(nèi)容，不能遺漏要點，而且注意分清層次和結(jié)構(gòu)，使敘述清晰、完整、有條理。合理安排各部分內(nèi)容，主次分明。其次應注意英語表達習慣和漢語的不同，不能根據(jù)漢語思維逐詞翻譯，應從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，寫完整的句子?？梢院唵尉浣Y(jié)構(gòu)為基礎，穿插并列句、復合句以及其他復雜句式和結(jié)構(gòu)，提升作文檔次。同時語句之間使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫、表達自然。
【參考范文】
Every Friday afternoon, our school offers required and elective courses. Travel of science is a required course. We can learn about some scientists and their inventions. I think it will be interesting. The course is given by a professor, who is well-known for his lecture. So you mustn't miss it. The course is from 2:30 p.m. to 3:15 p.m. in the school hall. You'd better take notebooks and pens so that you can write down the main points. There are two elective courses, Photography and Gardening. I would like to choose the former because I like taking photos. I think I can learn more skills in the class. The teacher who gives this course is a young reporter. So I think we may have similar thoughts and easy to get along with each other. I want the course to add more chances for us to take photos outdoors.
【名師點評】
這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，介紹了學校開設的校本必修課程，并從兩個選修課中選擇了自己喜歡的一個，介紹了自己選擇這門課程的原因，并對該課程提出了自己的建議。短文有以下幾個優(yōu)點：首先文章內(nèi)容完整，符合題目要求，沒有遺漏要點。敘述清晰、有條理，理由充分、合情理。提出的建議也比較中肯，符合該情景。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，語法規(guī)范，用詞準確，句式結(jié)構(gòu)符合英語的表達習慣，短文中用到了簡單句、賓語從句、狀語從句、定語從句、非謂語動詞、被動語態(tài)等多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)，增強了文章的表現(xiàn)力。文中較好的短語和句式有We can learn about some scientists and their inventions.、The course is given by a professor, who is well-known for his lecture.、You'd better take notebooks and pens so that you can write down the main points、The teacher who gives this course is a young reporter.、 So I think we may have similar thoughts and easy to get along with each other.、 I want the course to add more chances for us to take photos outdoors.等等。
（二）
"你養(yǎng)我長大，我陪你變老．"父母親一直在為我們的成長默默付出，成長要學會感受愛、回報愛．今天你即將畢業(yè)是向父母表達感激的好機會．請根據(jù)以下所給要點，寫一篇英語短文．
要點：
（1）給我生命，一直照顧我成長；
（2）努力工作，為我提供良好的生活和教育條件；
（3）擁有愛心，教我學會……；
（4）今天，我要為你們……（自主發(fā)揮，至少兩點）．
注意事項：
（1）詞數(shù)80左右，開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
（2）文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的地名、校名、人名等信息．
You bring me up. I will be with you in your life. You are important persons in the process of my growth. __
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【寫作思路】
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You bring me up. I will be with you in your life. You are important persons in the process of my growth．You give me life and take care of me all the time．（給我生命，一直照顧我成長） When I have problems with my study and life，you are always patient enough to help me and encourage me． 【高分句型一】 In order to let me live a pleasant life and receive good education，you always work hard from morning till night． （努力工作，為我提供良好的生活和教育條件）Everyone knows you are the persons full of love．You are ready to help people in need．It is you who teach me to be a kind person．【高分句型二】（擁有愛心，教我做慈愛的人）
Dad and mum，today I'll cook dinner for you．I'll go for a walk with you after dinner．（今天要為父母做的兩件事）I hope you will be happy and healthy forever!
【名師點評】
【高分句型一】
When I have problems with my study and life，you are always patient enough to help me and encourage me．當我的學習和生活有問題時，你總是耐心地幫助我，鼓勵我．
when當……時候，引導時間狀語從句，adj +enough +to do sth 足夠地……可以做某事，
【高分句型二】
It is you who teach me to be a kind person．是你教會我做一個善良的人．
本句使用了強調(diào)句It is +被強調(diào)部分+that/who …
（三）
哈佛大學的一項研究表明，愛做家務的孩子更容易體驗到幸福感，更有前途．請你以"Help with Some Housework"為題寫一篇8o詞左右的英語短文，描述你平時所做的家務以及你對做家務的看法．
參考詞匯：
Chores | take out the rubbish sweep the floor wash the clothes do the dishes water the flowers cook breakfast/lunch … … |
Opinions | Pros：develop our independence take care of ourselves … Cons：a waste of time no need to … … |
注意：文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的校名和人名．
Help with Some Housework
It is reported that children who love doing chores have a better future and are easy to feel happy． As for me， I ___________________________________________________________________________________________
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【參考范文】
Help with Some Housework
It is reported that children who love doing chores have a better future and are easy to feel happy． As for me， I often help them do housework． I take out the rubbish away and sweep the floor in the morning． I help my mother cook the lunch．I always wash clothes and do the dishes
for my family． My parents are very happy． Besides， Watering the flowers is also my duty． I like them very much and take good care of them． After supper， I always wash dishes．（平時所作家務）
I think it can develop our independence and take good care of ourselves．【高分句型一】 In a word， the more housework I do， the happier my parents will be．（家務的看法）【高分句型二】
（四）
每年十月份，越來越多的游客來本溪賞楓葉．請你根據(jù)以下提示，說說如何給游客可留下"景美人更美"的好印象，從自身做起，做文明本溪人！
提示詞：beautiful views美麗的景色
要求：
1．語意連貫，層次清晰，書寫規(guī)范．
2．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名與校名．
3． 短文開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
How to be a polite citizen
Benxi is a good place to watch maple leaves （楓葉） in October．________________________________
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【參考范文】
How to be a polite citizen
Benxi is a good place to watch maple leaves （楓葉） in October．Let's leave the visitors a good impression not only for the beautiful views ，but also as a Benxi citizen．How to be a polite citizen？（開篇點明題意）
First， We must be friendly．Use"please，OK，welcome" with smile when you talk with visitors． Besides， we should be ready to help others（高分句型一）．Try to be a helpful person． If visitors need us，we should help them．What's more， we should follow the rules． For example，we mustn't step on the grass or pick flowers． We mustn't drop litter carelessly．At last ，we also need to behave well in public．We stand for our city Benxi in public．So it needs our good manners．（從四個方面展開對成為文明市民的論述）
Why not do as above points？Let's try our best to be a polite citizen（高分句型二）．（結(jié)尾倡議大家成為文明市民）
（五）
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假定你是李華，收到英國筆友 Harry 的郵件，獲悉他在機器人制作比賽中獲獎。請根據(jù)郵件內(nèi)容給他回復。詞數(shù) 80 左右。
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參考詞匯：congratulation
祝賀注意事項：
1. 回復郵件時可適當發(fā)揮，郵件格式已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
2. 意思清楚，表達通順，行文連貫，書寫規(guī)范；
3. 請勿在文中使用真實的姓名、校名及地名。
Dear Harry,
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Yours,
Li Hua
【寫作思路】
此類觀點表達和原因說明類的作文，在我們?nèi)喌闹锌紡土曋羞M行過系統(tǒng)的訓練。 學生可根據(jù)日常所授的寫作模板，對全文內(nèi)容及結(jié)構(gòu)進行合理安排。
（1）結(jié)構(gòu)：開頭表示祝賀，使用所給提示詞；
（2）正文要點：表達興趣并說明原因，至少兩點（如熱點科技，對科技創(chuàng)新的興趣，對生活的改變，對醫(yī)療、救援 的幫助等）；
寫作時從單詞拼寫到句子結(jié)構(gòu)，從時態(tài)到語態(tài)，都應該注意統(tǒng)一。在打草稿時把需要用到的關(guān)鍵詞、高級句式、關(guān)鍵結(jié)構(gòu)甚至注意事項等簡單地寫在題目旁邊，以盡量規(guī)避錯誤。
【參考范文】
Dear Harry,
Congratulations！How glad I am to share your good news!
I think robots are helpful in many ways. And in the future, they will play more important roles in our daily life. Plus, I am dying to have a robot of my own. I can have it take care of my grandparents when we are not at home. You see, my grandparents are old and cannot move easily. It can help them do some housework such as cooking, cleaning the house and so on.
Hoping you will make greater progress.
Yours,
Li Hua
