Target text（文章正文）:
In thelistening, the professor argues that the statements which in the readingpassage are have problems, after that, she gives several reasons to demonstrateher opinion.
First, she mentions that the view in the paragraph seems possible but it's highly unlikelybecause the orca whales often live near the surface of the water. However, thesubmarines typically under the deep ocean so that people is unable to hear thesounds from the surface water. Also the Russian sonar will detect the orcawhales if they are nearby the submarines.
Second, the reading passage's statement shows that the sounds might cause by giant squid.The professor is against this statement by given the reason. She says giantsquid may be a great candidate but the periodic which they have detectedquacker sound has some problems. Russian submarines found the first sound ofquacker was in the 1960s and reports it about 20 years. Nevertheless, thesounds were disappeared in the 1980s. If these sounds were made by the squid,they might impossible appears one decade and stop hearing them two decade. 蘇州吳中區(qū)小學(xué)生作文培訓(xùn)，就來(lái)易優(yōu)悅讀
Third, the professor state that the quackers might cause by the other country's submarinewhich is in the reading passage is unstable. Those sounds move around andchange direction very quickly and submarines cannot move or change direction asfast as the sounds. What's more, all of submarines make engine noise but theydon't find any noise is relates to the quackers. And now, people don't have thehighly technology to build such a fast submarine and it has soundless engines.
Revised essay（批改后）:
In the（添加空格）listening, the professor argues that the statements which in the reading（添加空格）passage are（去掉are）have problems, after that, she gives several reasons to demonstrate（添加空格）her opinion.
First, she mentions that the view in the paragraph seems possible but it's highly unlikely（添加空格）because the orca whales often live near the surface of the water. However, the（添加空格）submarines（添加are）typically under the deep ocean so that people is unable to hear the（添加空格）sounds from the surface water. Also the Russian sonar will detect the orca（添加空格）whales if they are nearby the submarines.
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Second, the reading passage's statement shows that the sounds might cause by giant squid.（添加空格）The professor is against this statement by given [giving] the reason. She says giants（添加空格）quid may be a great candidate but the periodic which they have detected（添加空格）quacker sound has some problems. Russian submarines found the first sound of（添加空格）quacker was in the 1960s and reports （此處應(yīng)用過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)，reported）it about 20 years. Nevertheless, the[空格]sounds were disappeared in the 1980s. If these sounds were made by the squid, （添加空格）they might impossible appears （注意時(shí)態(tài)，應(yīng)用appear）one decade and stop hearing them two decade（需要用復(fù)數(shù)，decades）.
Third, the professor state（第三人稱(chēng)，應(yīng)用states）that the quackers might cause（be caused 被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)）by the other country's submarine（添加空格）which is in the reading passage is unstable. Those sounds move around and（添加空格）change direction very quickly and submarines cannot move or change direction as（添加空格）fast as the sounds. What's more, all of submarines make engine noise but they（添加空格）don't find any noise is relates （此處應(yīng)用related）to the quackers. And now, people don't have the（添加空格）highly technology to build such a fast submarine and it has soundless engines.
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