The World Expo in 2010(世博會(huì))英文作文
The World Expo in 2010
Shanghai will host the 2010 World Expo. The World Expo has a long history but it has never been held in Asia. So the 2010 World Expo is an honor for all of the Asians. our government has promised that it will be the best one. And Shanghai, as a host city, will have more chances to develop quickly. As a student in Shanghai, I should learn English well so that I can be a volunteer in the Expo to help foreigners know more about Shanghai.
How To Be A Lovely Citizen(如何成為一個(gè)可愛(ài)的上海人)
Great changes have taken place in Shanghai and more and more people throughout the world are focusing their attention on Shanghai now. As a citizen of Shanghai, I feel I must spare no efforts to do my bit. First, I decide to help plant more trees to make our city more beautiful. Second, I should obey seven nos and be good at learning from others. Third, I should study hard so that I can do something better for my city in the future.
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Certificate Craze On Campus. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1)近幾年大學(xué) 校園內(nèi)出現(xiàn)“考證熱”
2)產(chǎn)生這一現(xiàn)象的原因
3)你的看法
Certificate Craze On Campus
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行文思路
本題屬于提綱式文字命題。提綱第1點(diǎn)指出一種現(xiàn)象，提綱第2點(diǎn)要求分析產(chǎn)生這種現(xiàn)象的原因，提綱第3點(diǎn)要求談?wù)劇拔摇睂?duì)該現(xiàn)象的看法，由此可判斷本文應(yīng)為現(xiàn)象解釋型作文。
根據(jù)所給提綱，本文應(yīng)包含如下內(nèi)容：描述近幾年大學(xué)校園內(nèi)的“考證熱”;分析越來(lái)越多的大學(xué)生熱衷考取各種證書(shū)的主要原因;闡述“我”對(duì)大學(xué)生“考證熱”的看法。
高分范文
Certificate Craze On Campus
In recent years, getting a certificate has become a new craze among college students. [1]Just randomly ask a student on campus what he or she is busy doing, [2]quite possibly, you may get the answer [3]that he or she is preparing for a certificate [2]of some kind. [4]Why does this craze appear?
[4]There are mainly two reasons behind this phenomenon. First, [5]it is the employment pressure that forces college students to get more certificates. With the admission expansion of colleges, a lot more graduates have to face the fierce competition in the job market. How can one make himself more competitive? More certificates at hand, maybe. Second, diploma and certificates are still important standards [6]by which many employers measure a person’s ability. In order to increase the qualifications for a job, the students compel themselves to run from one exam to another.
[7]From my point of view, we should be more rational [8]when it comes to certificates, [9]since certificates [2]do not necessarily prove one’s ability. Being crazy in getting certifications blindly is [10]nothing but wasting time. To conclude, we should focus on improving our ability [10]but not getting a certificate of no practical value.
【亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評(píng)】 http://www.hxen.com
[1]祈使句使用恰當(dāng)。randomly意為“隨意地，隨機(jī)地”。
[2]限定詞使用恰當(dāng)，使文章表達(dá)更嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，增強(qiáng)了說(shuō)服力。
[3]that引導(dǎo)同位語(yǔ)從句，修飾the idea。
[4]設(shè)問(wèn)句引出原因，容易引起注意。
[5]強(qiáng)調(diào)句型，此處是強(qiáng)調(diào)主語(yǔ)。
[6]which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，充當(dāng)介詞賓語(yǔ)。
[7]用于引出“我”的觀點(diǎn)。
[8]“當(dāng)談到或提及…時(shí)”。
[9]since引導(dǎo)原因狀語(yǔ)從句，表示既定的原因，常譯為“既然”。
[10]“只是，僅僅”?！岸皇恰?。
佳句臨摩
1.佳句：You may get the answer that he or she is preparing for a certificate of some kind.
臨摩：離婚率上升盡管令人難過(guò)，但卻是不爭(zhēng)的事實(shí)。
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2.佳句：Diploma and certificates are still important standards by which many employers measure a person’s ability.
臨摩： 在過(guò)去的三十年，發(fā)展中國(guó)家在許多方面都取得了很大的進(jìn)步，其中包括健康水平的提高。
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3.佳句：From my point of view, we should be more rational when it comes to certificates.
臨摩：我認(rèn)為，對(duì)于我們來(lái)說(shuō)，更重要的是盡可能提高自己的能力而不是獲得更多的證書(shū)。
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Students’ Pursuit for Famous Brands. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1)現(xiàn)在很多大學(xué)生都喜歡追求名牌
2)產(chǎn)生這種現(xiàn)象的原因是什么
3)你如何看待這一現(xiàn)象
Students’ Pursuit for Famous Brands
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行文思路
本題屬于提綱式文字命題。提綱第1點(diǎn)指出一種現(xiàn)象，提綱第2點(diǎn)要求分析產(chǎn)生這種現(xiàn)象的原因，提綱第3點(diǎn)要求談?wù)劇拔摇睂?duì)該現(xiàn)象的看法，由此可判斷本文應(yīng)為現(xiàn)象解釋型作文。
根據(jù)所給提綱，本文應(yīng)包含如下內(nèi)容：描述目前熱衷于大學(xué)生追求名牌的現(xiàn)象;分析大學(xué)生熱衷名牌的原因;闡述“我”對(duì)大學(xué)生追求名牌的看法并提出建議。
高分范文
Students’ Pursuit for Famous Brands
Nowadays many college students like to pursue famous brands. From clothes to mobile phones, even study articles like electronic dictionaries and pens, they [1]are inclined to buy famous brands. [2]Moreover, many students from poor families begin to [3]follow this consumption trend as well. This phenomenon has aroused wide attention.
[4]The following reasons can account for college students’ preference for famous brands. [2]Above all, in many college students’ eyes, a famous brand is a symbol of sophistication and taste. They expect others to admire their high class and good taste. [2]What’s more, in modern society, famous brands to some extent are equal to fashion, [5]which has a great attraction to young college students. [2]Besides, parents’ spoiling their children helps form their bad consumption habit.
[2]As far as I am concerned, [6]it is irrational for college students to pursue famous brands. [3]After all, most of famous brands are [7]far beyond their consumption ability. [3]Besides, [8]it is not famous brands but a person’s noble character that really makes him high class. [3]Therefore, college students should attach more importance to cultivating a good character [9]rather than pursuing famous brands.
【亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評(píng)】
[1]“有…傾向”。
[2]過(guò)渡銜接詞語(yǔ)，使文章條理清晰、意義連貫。
[3] follow表示“跟隨，追求(趨勢(shì)或時(shí)尚)”
[4]用于引出原因。
[5]which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。
[6] it為形式主語(yǔ)，不定式為真正主語(yǔ)。
[7]“遠(yuǎn)遠(yuǎn)超出他們的消費(fèi)能力”。beyond表示“超出…范圍”。
[8]強(qiáng)調(diào)句型，此處是強(qiáng)調(diào)主語(yǔ)。not…but連接并列成分。
[9]“而不是”
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