原文：
Dear Professor Jin:
I am writing to you about the possibility of studying and researching in your lab as a visiting scholar. The China Scholarship Council(CSC) has approved my request to study abroad. They will provide me with 1200 dollars per month along with a round-trip ticket as financial support for half an year. I plan to go to the U.S. this year in October or November.
Your researches are of particular interest to me, especially in sustainable supply chain theory, Your group's research is so outstanding that I believe that if given the opportunity to study and research under your guidance, the experience at your lab can improve my research capacity, learn technology that is more new, and enlarge my knowledge in this field, which will benefit me a lot in the future study and job.
I graduated from Anhui University of Science and Technology and got my bachelor degree. I am a graduate student of professor Liang at Nanjing University of Technology, China now. My current research focuses on the evaluation of credit system.
蘇州中考語(yǔ)文提分，就找易優(yōu)吳老師，針對(duì)性強(qiáng)，提分就是快（TEL:181-1815-9898）。
I am satisfied with my study. However, due to the condition of the experiments, finances, and personal experiments are restricted, I would like to find an opportunity to go abroad for further study and research.Could it is possible for you to write a invitation for me ? Thank you so much.
Your comments and consideration will be highly appreciated.
I am looking forward to hear from you.
Sincerely yours,
Ran Zhang.
Here is my resume:
1.education:
(1)2008.09-2012.06
Name of institution: Anhui University of Science and Technology
Major: automation
Academic Degree: bachelor of engineering
(2)2012.06-
Name of institution:Nanjing University of Technology
Major:systems engineering
2.honors:
(1)national encouragement scholarship 2009.5
(2)national encouragement scholarship 2010.5
3.Certificates
(1)College English Test 6
(2)National computer rank examination certificate grade 2:language C 蘇州易優(yōu)吳老師初中語(yǔ)文高效提分（Tel:181-1815-9898）
4.Foreign language:
Toefl exam :
Reading: 28 Listening :23 Speaking :20 Writing :28
批改后：
Dear Professor Jin:
(先介紹自己 類(lèi)似as a graudate from AUST...)I am writing to you about the possibility of studying and researching in your lab as a visiting scholar(student比較好吧.不過(guò)這句話，個(gè)人覺(jué)得，用一些比較婉轉(zhuǎn)的口氣比較好，類(lèi)似I would like to know if the vacancy/headcount of visiting student in your lab is still available...It will be my great honor to be considered as one of your lab members....句子你自己發(fā)揮，大致就是這樣的feel) The China Scholarship Council(CSC) has approved my request to study abroad. They will provide me with 1200 dollars per month along with a round-trip ticket as financial support for half an year. I plan to go to the U.S. this year in October or November.(這段個(gè)人建議放到后面寫(xiě))
Your researches are of particular interest to me, especially in sustainable supply chain theory,(這里直接接你目前研究的方向或者是目前感興趣的點(diǎn)比較好，介紹完了就可以講說(shuō)，你這邊的怎么怎么好契合了我的這個(gè)研究方向) Your group's research is so outstanding that I believe that if given the opportunity to study and research under your guidance, the experience at your lab can improve my research capacity, learn technology that is more new, and enlarge my knowledge in this field, which will benefit me a lot in the future study and job. 語(yǔ)文提分好幫手，易優(yōu)語(yǔ)文題庫(kù) https://cs.euzW.net
I graduated from Anhui University of Science and Technology and got my bachelor degree. I am a graduate student of professor Liang at Nanjing University of Technology, China now. My current research focuses on the evaluation of credit system.(所以這段話就可以直接融合到上兩段去)
I am satisfied with my study.(不要說(shuō)滿意，可以說(shuō)目前學(xué)到的東西不能滿足你的需求 ，你希望可以怎么樣怎么樣，說(shuō)點(diǎn)類(lèi)似future plan的東西，引出你的MOTIVATION) However, due to the condition of the experiments, finances, and personal experiments are restricted, I would like to find an opportunity to go abroad for further study and research.(所以這句話也要考慮改一下，重點(diǎn)是要給他一種你其實(shí)很優(yōu)秀的FEEL)Could it is possible for you to write a invitation for me ? Thank you so much.
(這里可以加上剛才開(kāi)頭那段說(shuō)你得到認(rèn)可，有financial support之類(lèi)的話，再引出it will be really appreciated if you could consider my application and give me a invitation letter ...blah blah之類(lèi)的，句子的話你可以再組織下)
蘇州易優(yōu)語(yǔ)文培訓(xùn)，閱讀寫(xiě)作同步提升 http://www.zequeka.cn/mIniform.html
Your comments and consideration will be highly appreciated.
I am looking forward to hear from you.
Sincerely yours,
Ran Zhang.
Here is my resume:
1.education:
(1)2008.09-2012.06
Name of institution: Anhui University of Science and Technology
Major: automation
Academic Degree: bachelor of engineering
(2)2012.06-
Name of institution:Nanjing University of Technology
Major:systems engineering
2.honors:
(1)national encouragement scholarship 2009.5
(2)national encouragement scholarship 2010.5
3.Certificates
(1)College English Test 6
(2)National computer rank examination certificate grade 2:language C
4.Foreign language:
Toefl exam :
Reading: 28 Listening :23 Speaking :20 Writing :28
