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(3) 短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的真實(shí)姓名、校名等信息；
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How to Make Our Spare Time More Meaningful?
Nowadays, we students have much more spare time than ever before, but how to make our spare time more meaningful?
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【寫(xiě)作思路】
本文屬于材料作文，要表達(dá)如何讓課外生活更有意義。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。
【參考范文】
How to Make Our Spare Time More Meaningful?
Nowadays we students have much more spare time than ever before, but how to make our spare time more meaningful?
My schoolmates give the following suggestions. First it's good to help our parents do some housework to show our love for them. Second, we will know more about the world by reading. Third, it is a good chance for us to get close to nature and relax ourselves.
In my opinion, we can do some sports to make us stronger and healthier. What's more, we can take an active part in some social activities as volunteers to help those in need.
In a word, let's make full use of our spare time and promote our literacy.
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如a good chance to do, get close to, in my opinion, what’s more, take an active part in, in a word, make full use of, spare time以及“比較級(jí)and比較級(jí)”等，增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。
【點(diǎn)睛】
寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：
認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。
構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話題是開(kāi)放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。
初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了，在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。
修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。
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為了讓學(xué)生吃到更加營(yíng)養(yǎng)、安全的食品，政府出臺(tái)了陪餐制，要求從 4 月 1 日起，學(xué)校領(lǐng)導(dǎo)陪同學(xué)生用餐。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)，給校報(bào)英語(yǔ)專(zhuān)欄寫(xiě)一篇短文，談?wù)勛约旱目捶ā?/span>
1. 學(xué)生吃得健康、安全；
2. 及時(shí)發(fā)現(xiàn)就餐問(wèn)題；
3. 食堂提供食品多樣；
4. 父母更加放心。
注意：1.詞數(shù) 80 詞左右；開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3. 參考詞匯:規(guī)定 regulation (n.)；食堂 cafeteria (n.)；營(yíng)養(yǎng)的 nutritious (adj.)
A new food safety regulation was put into use on April 1 to improve nutrition and food safety in schools. It asks the school managers to eat with students in their cafeterias.
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【寫(xiě)作思路】
本文屬于材料作文，就政府出臺(tái)的“陪餐制度”談?wù)勀愕目捶?。根?jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。
亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如thanks to, take place, be able to, provide sth for sb, in other words, worry about, not...at all, carry on, first, second以及also，增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。
【參考范文】
A new food safety regulation was put into use on April 1 to improve nutrition and food safety in schools. It asks the school managers to eat with students in their cafeterias.
Thanks to the regulation, something great has taken place in our school. First, we eat healthier and safer than before. Second, if there is any problem about food safety or other, our school leaders are able to know and solve it quickly. Also, the cafeteria workers are trying to provide different kinds of food for us. In other words, our parents needn’t worry about our diet any more.
We teenagers are still young and need to grow healthy, so I think the new regulation is really good and necessary. I hope it will be carried on forever.
（三）
文章討論了許多年輕人很在意自己外貌的問(wèn)題，文章的最后指出：“We need to judge people by what they do, not what they look like.” 你同意文章最后提出的觀點(diǎn)嗎？對(duì)此觀點(diǎn)你有何看法？請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面提示寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文談?wù)勀愕目捶?，闡述理由，并舉例說(shuō)明。
寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
I. Your opinion (agree/ disagree /…)；
2. Reasons (looks, personality品性， ability...)；
3. An example (yourself/ a person around you/ a famous person/…).
要求：
1. 短文應(yīng)包括提示中所有的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)，條理清楚，行文連貫，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2. 如舉自己或身邊的人作為例子，不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和地名；
3. 詞數(shù)不少于80。
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【寫(xiě)作思路】
這是一篇要求根據(jù)文章中許多年輕人很在意自己外貌的問(wèn)題，文章最后提出判斷一個(gè)人應(yīng)該根據(jù)他做了什么，而不是根據(jù)一個(gè)人的外貌來(lái)判斷，對(duì)這一觀點(diǎn)提出自己的看法。動(dòng)筆前先要認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，圍繞要點(diǎn)組織材料，然后用正確的英語(yǔ)句子把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)，在此基礎(chǔ)上亦可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，注意不要遺漏材料中給出的要點(diǎn)。根據(jù)材料可知本文主要是應(yīng)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，注意標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)及大小寫(xiě)等問(wèn)題，不要犯語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。注意上下文之間的邏輯關(guān)系，語(yǔ)意連貫。
【參考范文】
范文1
I agree with the opinion. Compared with looks, personality and ability are more important. Because we can’t change our looks easily, but we can decide and control what we do. Thnaks to the kind and hard-working people, our society is becoming better and better.
For example, Ma Yun, a well-known businessman, doesn’t look handsome, but he created Alibaba which has changed our lifestyle and made our life more convenient. He has been doing so much for our society that we all admire him. Because of his contribution to our society, we even think he looks so cool.
So let’s try our best to do more useful things for our society and pay less attentionto our looks.
范文2
In my opinion, I think we need to judge people by both what they do and what they look like.
A person's personality and ability are very important, but for some jobs, looks are also important, such as an actor or an actress, a waiter or a waitress, or even a teacher. Because it's enjoyable to see a good-looking person.
For example, my teachers in my class all teach very well, and they are kind and helpful. All of us like them. But the most popular teacher is my English teacher, because she looks really beautiful. She dresses herself up every day and always has a smile on her face.
So let's try our best to improve our ability, personality and looks.
（四）
根據(jù)中文和英文提示，完成一篇不少于50詞的文段寫(xiě)作。文中已給出內(nèi)容不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。所給提示詞語(yǔ)僅供選用。請(qǐng)不要寫(xiě)出你的校名和姓名。
假如你是李華，你們學(xué)校正在開(kāi)展“安全月”宣傳活動(dòng)，倡議大家制作關(guān)于安全教育的主題海報(bào)，你們班交換生Peter給你發(fā)郵件詢問(wèn)相關(guān)事情。請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)回復(fù)一封郵件，告訴他海報(bào)上交的時(shí)間，并分享你設(shè)計(jì)海報(bào)的一些想法。
提示詞語(yǔ)：design，safety rule，careful，protect，picture
提示問(wèn)題：When should you hand in the poster?
What would you like to share with Peter about designing the poster?
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your email _______________________________________________________________
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If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.
Yours,
Li Hua
【寫(xiě)作思路】
這篇作文要求我們以李華的身份給Peter寫(xiě)一封郵件，告訴他關(guān)于制作關(guān)于安全教育的主題海報(bào)的相關(guān)事宜。由題目中給出的提示問(wèn)題可知，短文中應(yīng)包括以下內(nèi)容：首先告訴Peter海報(bào)上交的時(shí)間；然后和他分享一些設(shè)計(jì)海報(bào)的想法。第二個(gè)內(nèi)容應(yīng)該是短文的主體。題目中并沒(méi)有規(guī)定具體的寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容，學(xué)生們應(yīng)聯(lián)系自己的實(shí)際生活，展開(kāi)合理的想象，將這些內(nèi)容補(bǔ)充完整后，用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)，這是寫(xiě)作中的一個(gè)難點(diǎn)。短文應(yīng)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主、第一、二人稱來(lái)敘述。寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)注意：首先要合理安排短文內(nèi)容，敘述應(yīng)有層次、有條理?？梢允褂靡恍┍硎鞠群箜樞虻脑~或短語(yǔ)，如First, Second, Last but not least等等。題目中給出的提示詞應(yīng)該在短文中用上。其次應(yīng)注意文章的表達(dá)，英語(yǔ)句式的結(jié)構(gòu)與漢語(yǔ)是不同的，因此不能根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)思維逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)該從句式的整體考慮，先確定主干結(jié)構(gòu)，然后添加修飾成分。為提升作文檔次，應(yīng)注意使用一些高級(jí)詞匯、短語(yǔ)以及復(fù)合句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞等復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)。同時(shí)語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意上下連貫，表達(dá)流暢。
【參考范文】
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your email. As it is required，you are supposed to hand in the poster before next Friday.
Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you. First and foremost，the basic safety rules are of great importance，which should be included in your poster. In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school. Last but by no means least，if I were you，I would add a few suggestions about safety awareness，considering that better safe than sorry. In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.
If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.
Yours,
Li Hua
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，給Peter寫(xiě)郵件，告訴他制作主題海報(bào)的一些事情。短文有以下幾個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)：首先文章內(nèi)容完整，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，符合題目要求。除題目中給出的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾，短文主要包括兩個(gè)內(nèi)容：第一段用一句話告訴Peter上交海報(bào)的時(shí)間；文章的中心和重點(diǎn)是放在了第二段上，這一段中作者和Peter分享了一些制作海報(bào)的想法。主要從四個(gè)方面進(jìn)行闡述，內(nèi)容非常詳實(shí)，并使用了First and foremost, In the second place, Last but by no means least, In addition等短語(yǔ)，分清了這一段的層次，敘述非常有條理。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，用詞準(zhǔn)確，并使用了較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)，表現(xiàn)了作者較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力。短文中較好的句型有：Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you.、In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school、In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.等。
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假定你是李華，收到英國(guó)筆友 Harry 的郵件，獲悉他在機(jī)器人制作比賽中獲獎(jiǎng)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)郵件內(nèi)容給他回復(fù)。詞數(shù) 80 左右。
參考詞匯：congratulation 祝賀注意事項(xiàng)：
1. 回復(fù)郵件時(shí)可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，郵件格式已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2. 意思清楚，表達(dá)通順，行文連貫，書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范；
3. 請(qǐng)勿在文中使用真實(shí)的姓名、校名及地名。
Dear Harry,
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Yours,
Li Hua
【寫(xiě)作思路】
此類(lèi)觀點(diǎn)表達(dá)和原因說(shuō)明類(lèi)的作文，在我們?nèi)喌闹锌紡?fù)習(xí)中進(jìn)行過(guò)系統(tǒng)的訓(xùn)練。學(xué)生可根據(jù)日常所授的寫(xiě)作模板，對(duì)全文內(nèi)容及結(jié)構(gòu)進(jìn)行合理安排。
（1）結(jié)構(gòu)：開(kāi)頭表示祝賀，使用所給提示詞；
（2）正文要點(diǎn)：表達(dá)興趣并說(shuō)明原因，至少兩點(diǎn)（如熱點(diǎn)科技，對(duì)科技創(chuàng)新的興趣，對(duì)生活的改變，對(duì)醫(yī)療、救援的幫助等）；
寫(xiě)作時(shí)從單詞拼寫(xiě)到句子結(jié)構(gòu)，從時(shí)態(tài)到語(yǔ)態(tài)，都應(yīng)該注意統(tǒng)一。在打草稿時(shí)把需要用到的關(guān)鍵詞、高級(jí)句式、關(guān)鍵結(jié)構(gòu)甚至注意事項(xiàng)等簡(jiǎn)單地寫(xiě)在題目旁邊，以盡量規(guī)避錯(cuò)誤。
【參考范文】
Dear Harry,
Congratulations！How glad I am to share your good news!
I think robots are helpful in many ways. And in the future, they will play more important roles in our daily life. Plus, I am dying to have a robot of my own. I can have it take care of my grandparents when we are not at home. You see, my grandparents are old and cannot move easily. It can help them do some housework such as cooking, cleaning the house and so on.
Hoping you will make greater progress.
Yours,
Li Hua
