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【要點領悟】
在英語書面表達的提示信息中,常有這樣的語句“可適當增加細節(jié)”或“可適當發(fā)揮”,但所增加的內容應該與文章相關。如果所“發(fā)揮”的內容與文章無關,就是“畫蛇添足”了。
【信息提示】
根據下面的4幅圖畫用英語寫一篇短文,要求故事包括所有圖畫的主要內容,可以適當增加細節(jié),使意思連貫。詞數在100以上。 蘇州小學生語文培訓，（TEl:181-1815-9898）蘇州易優(yōu)閱讀寫作同步提升
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One day, an old woman was crossing the street with a basket in her hand. She went to do some shopping. Just then a car came up and she was knocked down onto the ground. She was badly injured and couldn’t move. But to everyone’s anger, the car ran away as quickly as it could. The old woman had to lie on the ground and cried (1). Luckily, a man, who was sweeping the street nearby, saw this. He ran quickly up to her and helped her stand up. He was angry with the driver (2). Then he took her to the nearest hospital. There a doctor examined her carefully and gave her some medical care. After that, the dustman took her home. When the old woman’s daughter knew what had happened to her mother, she was moved deeply and thanked him very much. After a while the dustman left and went to do his work. The daughter thanked him again (3).
【精講點撥】
(1)此句與圖中提示不相符,應刪去。
(2)此處加寫這句屬多余,也與圖畫內容不符。
(3)文章寫到“...very much.”處已經很完整了,加上這一句使行文顯得重復、累贅。 蘇州易優(yōu)吳老師初中語文高效提分（Tel:181-1815-9898）
蘇州易優(yōu)吳老師初中語文高效提分（Tel:181-1815-9898）
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One day, an old woman was crossing the street with a basket in her hand. She went to do some shopping. Just then a car came up and she was knocked down onto the ground. She was badly injured and couldn’t move a little. Luckily, a man, who was sweeping the street nearby, saw this. He ran quickly up to her and helped her stand up. Then he took her to the nearest hospital. There a doctor examined her carefully and gave her some medical care. After that, the dustman took her home. When the old woman’s daughter knew what had happened to her mother, she was moved deeply and thanked him very much.
