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看到關(guān)于良師益友的話題，首先要確立哪些人屬于這一范圍: 叔叔/舅舅/伯伯(uncle)、阿姨/姑姑(aunt)、表/堂兄弟/姐妹(cousin)、老師(teacher)、同學(xué)(classmate)、朋友(friend)。親朋好友的選擇范圍比較廣，但要寫出特色，一定是給作者 留下深刻印象的人。如果寫親戚，多以寫親情為主;如果寫師長，多以寫恩情為主;如果寫同學(xué)、朋友，多以寫友情為主。無論是寫哪-一種， 都圍繞著和作者之間發(fā)生的故事展開。其實這個話題和家人的話題很相似。在文章中可以敘述事例，來增加文章的真情實感。
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My favorite
審題
看題目是半命題作文，可寫內(nèi)容很多、可以寫人也可以寫物，重點在 favorite上，這里我們以寫人為例:My favorite teacher/friend就要寫出人物和我之間發(fā)生的事，用事例結(jié)合議論，說明為什么是favorite.
my favorite teacher / friend應(yīng)該是夾敘夾議的文章，文章可以分三段。第-段:點明主題，即誰是my favorite teacher/ friend。第二段:通過生動的語言寫出這個老師或者朋友對我的特別之處，可以寫2: -3個方面，個 方 面詳細寫(可以舉例)， 其他方面略寫。如果是描寫人物品質(zhì)，多用一般現(xiàn)在時，如果是記敘曾經(jīng)發(fā)生的事情，用一般過去時。第三段:總結(jié)段，抒發(fā)感情，可以表達對人物的喜愛、感謝、懷念等情感。
核心語匯
get along very well相處得很好
teach in an unusual way用一種不尋常的方式教書
. be knowledgeable知識淵博的
be strict with對...嚴(yán)格
be good at teaching擅長教書
. show great interest in...表現(xiàn)出強烈的興趣
an experienced teacher一位經(jīng)驗豐富的老師
show great love to.對....表現(xiàn)出強烈的愛
make great progress取得很大進步
spend the happy time with與....一起度過愉快的時光
.with one's help由于某人的幫助
in one's spare time在某人空閑時
improve rapidly快速提高
.try one's best to do sth.盡某人最大力量做某事
.a strong desire for knowledge強烈的求知欲
treat every student fairly公平對待每位學(xué)生
參考句型
1.. ... is my best friend, who grows up with me.和我一起長.....是我最好的朋友。e.g. Tom is my best friend, who grows up with me.
和我一起長大的湯姆是我最好的朋友。
2.最高級+名詞+ (that) + I+ have ever + seen / known / had / heard/read... 是我看到過的了解的/聽說過的/讀過的最........
e.g. She is the most hardworking classmate that I have ever seen.
她是我見過的最用功的同學(xué)。
3.There is no denying that ...不可否認.....
e.g. There is no denying that he is the most knowledgeable person I have ever heard.不可否認，他是我所聽說過的最有學(xué)識的人。
Of the many teachers I had in primary school, ... is the one I will never forget.在我小學(xué)的許多老師里面，...是我永遠不會忘記的。
e.g. Of the many teachers I had in primary school, Miss Fang is the one I will never forget.
在我小學(xué)的許多老師里面，方老師是我永遠不會忘記的。
■.. used discipline to make sure that we learned .. well. ..用練習(xí)確保我們把....學(xué)好。
e.g. Miss Fang used discipline to make sure that we learned our math well.
方老師用練習(xí)確保我們把數(shù)學(xué)學(xué)好。
■He is a man with .. and always friendly to us.他是一...的人， 總是對我們很友好。e.g. He is a man with a good sense of humor and always friendly to us.
他是一個很幽默的人，總是對我們很友好。
One of the most important reasons that I like her is ... 我喜歡她的重要原因之一是.....
e.g. One of the most important reasons that I like her is that she is very sincere.我喜歡她的重要原因之是她非常 真誠。
■A friend in need is a friend indeed. 患難見真情。
范文一
My favorite teacher
My favorite teacher is my English teacher Jane. Although I haven't seen her for several years, I have never forgotten her①charming
image.
②I was so deeply impressed by her devotion to teaching. Her lessons were always well prepared and clearly delivered, so I could benefit a lot from her class. Her lively way of teaching attracted me.
Through her sense of humor, every class became a relaxing one.She made learning more enjoyable and more entertaining. Besides,she is very kind to us.③Whenever I encountered difficulties, she encouraged me and cheered me up with her tender look.
④She is a respectable teacher as well as a warm-hearted friend who I will keep in my mind forever.
注：① charming迷人的
② be deeply impressed by對---印象深刻
③ 讓步狀語從句
④ 定語從句; as well as也
點評:段首即點明了主題favorite,隨后在第二段中順理成章地用了一般過去時， 來講述這位老師受小作者喜愛的地方。第二段中用besides表明作者寫了老師的兩個方面: her way of teaching和her kindness,在兩方面中又側(cè)重于第一點， 有詳有略。最后-段點題升華: I will keep her in my mind forever.
范文二
My favorite friend
As an old slang goes,“①Good coffee is a pleasure, good friends are treasures." There must be one who will always be in the first place in my heart, and her name is Annie.
②I met Annie when we first started our middle school journey.As she is a classmate and the sport partner of mine,③she not only helps me a lot with my study but also plays an important role in my life. Both of us are quite communicative, outgoing and sensitive.And we have a few mutual hobbies such as piano, opera and drama.Just like the things all common friends would like to do, we often share secrets and strange ideas with each other. We encourage each other and are always there for each other. I really like her and I will remember all the days we’ve walked through.
注：①諺語
②時間狀語從句
③ not only .. but also不僅....而且..
點評:小作者開頭用“好咖啡是樂趣，好朋友是財富”這句話來突出朋友的重要性，引人人勝。接著她寫了在她心目中第一位的朋友Annie:她們有相同的性格，相同的興趣愛好，她們彼此鼓勵，彼此支持。全文語言地道流暢，一氣呵成。
相關(guān)話題范文解析
一
My Good Friend
My good friend is Lisa. She comes from Canada. We are both studying in Dongfang Middle School.
She is tall and lovely with blond hair. She is a funny girl, who often tells jokes to make you laugh. She does well in English,so I often ask her questions about English. Lisa is good at dancing, too. She won many prizes in the dancing competition. We share many interesting things with each other.
This is my good friend. I am very lucky to have such a friend.
參考譯文
我的好朋友
我的好朋友叫麗薩。她來自加拿大。我們倆都在東方中學(xué)上學(xué)。
她很高，很可愛，還有一頭金色的頭發(fā)。她是一一個很有趣的女孩，經(jīng)常說笑話來逗別人笑。她英語學(xué)得很好，所以我經(jīng)常問她關(guān)于英語的問題。麗薩也很擅長跳舞。她在跳舞比賽中贏過很多獎。我們互相分享很多有趣的事情。
這就是我的好朋友。我非常幸運能交到這樣一一個朋友。
亮點詞匯
lovely 可愛的
blond /blond/ adj.金色的
funny 有趣的;搞笑的
tell jokes 講笑話
question .問題
competition 比賽
出彩句型
She does well in...她擅長......
I ask her questions about....我問她關(guān)于...的問題。
She won many prizes in.... competition. 她...比賽中贏過很多獎。
We share.. with each other.我們互相分享......
I am very lucky to....我非常幸運....
高分點評
本文采用“總一分-總”的結(jié)構(gòu)，首段先總述了Lisa的情況，第二段詳細描述Lisa的各方面特點，最后再總結(jié)，詳略得當(dāng)，條理清晰。作者對短語的運用非常嫻熟，如"tell jokes" "won many prizes"等，都恰如其分地表達出了人物的特點，人物形象生動。
二
My Favorite Teacher
Miss Ye is my favorite teacher, who is now 25 years old. She is from Guangdong Province. She is a beautiful lady, and she often has a smile on her face.
She does a great job in teaching. She can skillfully get the students involved in listening to her and doing exercises. Those topics that she introduces in the class can always catch the eye of students. Therefore, lots of students love to take her classes. Not only does she do well in classes, but also she is good at music. Between the classes, she sometimes plays a small piece of music, which is very helpful for us to relax our minds.
Isn't she wonderful? We all like her very much.
參考譯文
我最喜歡的老師
葉老師是我最喜歡的老師，她現(xiàn)在25歲。她來自廣東省。他是一位漂亮的女士，她的臉上經(jīng)常掛著笑容。
她教書教得很好。她能巧妙地讓學(xué)生專心聽講，認真做練習(xí)。她在課堂上介紹的那些話題總是能吸引學(xué)生的注意。因此，很多學(xué)生都喜歡上她的課。她不僅課上得好，也很擅長音樂。在課間的時候，她有時會彈一小段音樂，這對放松我們的頭腦很有幫助。
她是不是很棒?我們都非常喜歡她。
亮點詞匯
skilfully 巧妙地;精巧地
involved .參與其中的:涉及的
topic 主題;話題
introduce 介紹
catch the eye of ..吸..的注意
wonderful .精彩的;奇妙的
出彩句型
She has... on her face.她的臉上有....
She does a great job n...她....面做得很好。
She can get.. involved n...她能.....中去。
Those topics that she introduces in the class..那些她在課堂上介紹的話題.....
Not only... but also...不僅.....而且.....
... is very helpful for... to do.... ......很有幫助。
高分點評
本文的細節(jié)描寫是一大閃光點，例如對老師善于教書這一特點的描寫， 作者深入課的特點，將一個精彩的課堂完全展現(xiàn)出來，對細節(jié)的把非常準(zhǔn)確細致。其次，文章詞匯運用豐富多彩，如副詞skillfully" 的使用，非常貼切自然。
三
即將畢業(yè)，請以“My favorite teacher”為題，寫一篇英語短文，短文包括以下內(nèi)容：
1. 老師的外貌、性格、所教科目等；
2. 以事例描述喜愛的原因；
3. 表達對這位老師的感激和祝福。
要求：
1. 要點齊全，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實 姓名與校名；
3. 卷面整潔，書寫美觀，課適當(dāng)加2-3分；
4. 詞數(shù)：80詞左右，開頭部分已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
My favorite teacher
It’s time to graduate from junior high school. I’d like to write something about my favorite teacher. ________
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【參考范文】
My favorite teacher
It’s time to graduate from junior high school. I’d like to write something about my favorite teacher. Of all the teachers, I like my English teacher best. She is a lovely and outgoing girl who loves singing and reading. She is of medium height and has long straight hair.
When I was in Grade Seven, I was so shy that I was afraid to take part in the English competition. She encouraged me not to give up any chance to show myself to others. Thanks to her, I changed my attitude and won the first prize.
I will never forget the wonderful time we were together. Best wishes to her!
【名師點評】
這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語，為文章增色不少，如graduate from，of all the teachers，of medium height，so that，be afraid to do，take part in，give up，encourage sb. to do，at the weekends，thanks to sb.，the first prize等。而并列結(jié)構(gòu)She is of medium height and has long straight hair./ I changed my attitude and won the first prize.和She is a lovely and outgoing girl who loves singing and reading./ When I was in Grade Seven, I was so shy that I was afraid to take part in the English competition./ I will never forget the wonderful time we were together.等復(fù)雜從句結(jié)構(gòu)的運用，豐富了短文內(nèi)容，使表達多樣化，是本文的亮點。在學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié)牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章表達更有邏輯性，也更富有條理。
滿分作文必背
一
She and I
When I first met my roommate, I didn't expect her to become one of my best friends.She looked rather timid because she didn't talk much. People thought one of her parents was a foreigner for she had big and pretty eyes. She was slightly fat and she was very good-looking.
However, as soon as I get to know her, she becomes a completely different person. It turns out that she is very talkative, and she likes to laugh, just like me. She is a huge soccer fan, and she even named herself after one of her favorite soccer players, Andrea. Playing tricks on me is probably one of her favorite things to do, but I enjoy spending time with her because she always gets my jokes and she is always there to support me. She is the best roommate I could possibly ask for.
二
My good friend
Everybody has friends. Friends play an important role in our life. They can help us,inspire us and comfort us. The person that left me the deepest impression is a girl called Elizabeth.
Elizabeth is not my classmate in school. We first met in a speech class. We always discuss about our speeches together during recess and talk about many things. By taking with her.I knew that she was born in America.We always speak English to each other.I improved my spoken English through talking with her.
We also helped each other through learning Once we entered a speech competition together. We helped each other during the competition and we got good marks 1 won the second place and she won the third place.
This is my good friend - Elizabeth She always helps me and encourages me She never gets angry and is very humorous I will never forget her.
三
I never forget him /her
The person I’ll never forget is my English teacher Mr. Peterson. He is of medium height and has a thick beard He touches it whenever he is thinking.
It is for his knowledge that I admire him most. His eyes often shine with wisdom when he talks to me. He is a life mentor who gives me guidance and helps me grow both academically and personally. He often tells us that it's no use memorizing new words without understanding. My English has greatly improved with his help Unfortunately. He is leaving the school and moving to HongKong next year. but lm sure I will pay him a visit some time in the near future. I will remember him forever.
