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同情是仁愛之心的具體體現(xiàn)，是一個(gè)人對(duì)他人不幸遭遇的感同身受，也是互助原則的具體行為。擁有了同情心，我們才能對(duì)他人伸出援助之手。通過同情去理解別人的痛苦，減輕別人的痛苦，自己的內(nèi)心也能更豐富。為他人送去溫暖，為自己帶來收獲。 中小學(xué)生語文題庫(kù)，中小學(xué)學(xué)生語文試卷，就來<A http://www.zequeka.cn/yuwentiku/>易優(yōu)語文題庫(kù)</a>。
如何把同情這一情感轉(zhuǎn)化為行動(dòng)， 是這一主題中主要會(huì)涉及到的寫作內(nèi)容。因此，該主題通常會(huì)和幫助、鼓勵(lì)他人等內(nèi)容相聯(lián)系，比如如何幫助災(zāi)區(qū)人民，如何為慈普活動(dòng)出一份力等。寫作時(shí)要注意，無論是記敘文還是說明文，在這一主題的寫作中，需要傳遞出正能量。
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實(shí)踐案例
題目
Write a composition in at least 60 words according to the given situation. (根據(jù)所給情最寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文。)
Suppose you are a member of the volunteer club in your school. You plan to go to are mote area this winter holiday for a few days to help and encourage the poor kids there.What will you do there and why do you want to do it?
審題
這是一篇材料作文。在落筆前，要認(rèn)真審閱所給的材料。材料作文的審題正確與否，將直接影響到文章的質(zhì)量。所以材料作文的寫作關(guān)鍵是仔細(xì)、全面地理解材料內(nèi)容，把握主題，從而組織材料。根據(jù)情境信息來闡述內(nèi)容。
題目所設(shè)定的情境為:寒假中你要去偏遠(yuǎn)地區(qū)，鼓勵(lì)幫助那里的孩子，為他們做些什么。根據(jù)材料信息，寫作的關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)在于對(duì)"what"和"why"這兩個(gè)問題的說明和闡述。那么學(xué)生寫作時(shí)。首先需要說明:打算為這些偏遠(yuǎn)地區(qū)的孩子做些什么?比如送孩子一些日用品、衣物等:然后，還需要對(duì)此進(jìn)行解釋說明，即為什么要這樣做。寫作時(shí)需要注意時(shí)態(tài)。大文應(yīng)體用一般將來時(shí)的動(dòng)作和狀態(tài)。
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
本文可采用三段式，即“總一分總" 的寫作結(jié)構(gòu):
第一段:文章的總起，拋出文章的主題和中心內(nèi)容，即打算利用假期去幫助貧苦的孩子。
第二段:分層敘述，對(duì)文章的主題展開說明，具體闡述要為孩子做些什么事，為什么打算做這些。
第三段:文章的收尾，對(duì)之前闡述的內(nèi)容做個(gè)總結(jié)和提升，也可以呼吁大家一起幫
助這些孩子。
“總一分總”的段落結(jié)構(gòu)能使文章的脈絡(luò)互相貫通，各部分各有特點(diǎn)又緊密聯(lián)系。
核心語匯
have pity on sb.同情、憐憫某人
feel sorry for sb.同情;惋惜;為....而難過
cheer sb. up鼓舞某人;使某人振作
provide sb. with sth.為某人提供某物
encouragement and support鼓勵(lì)和支持
help sb to do sth./with sth.幫助某人某事
prepare sth for sb. 為某人準(zhǔn)備某物
參考句型
It's urgent that........是緊急的。
Every time I think of ... I can't help doing sch.每當(dāng)我想到...我都忍不住....
I will .. in the following ways.我將用下列方法.....
We should make every effort to do sth.我們應(yīng)不遺余力地做某事。
It is obvious I clear that....是顯而易見的。
習(xí)作
In this coming winter holiday, I will go to the remote area to do something for the poor kids there.①As those kids are in poor condition, they may be short of clothes, shoes or books. Thus, I plan to provide them with some of my books and clothes. I believe they can learn more knowledge from the books, and the clothes can keep them warm. During my stay there, I will also play with them and talk to them to let them feel happier. ②What's more, I would like to take some photos for them so that I can call on more people to help them on the Internet I'm really looking forward to the trip.
注
① be in poor condition和be short of兩個(gè)短語用得好。
② 長(zhǎng)短句的交替使用，使得文章的句式較為豐富多變。
點(diǎn)評(píng):
本文思路清晰，內(nèi)容完整，句意連貫，語言規(guī)范。該生通過仔細(xì)審題，把握住了題目的重點(diǎn)內(nèi)容和關(guān)鍵信息，用較為扎實(shí)的語言功底，流暢地將習(xí)作內(nèi)容呈現(xiàn)出來。這篇習(xí)作的時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用得當(dāng)，且文中出現(xiàn)了定的好詞好句， 比如be short of, in poor condition等，值得借鑒。
相關(guān)話題滿分作文必背
（一）
題目
Write at least 60 words on the topic "When I see an old person fall down in the street,1... (以“當(dāng)我看到老人在街上摔倒，....為題，寫-篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）
Reference words (Use at least two of them):
a traditional virtue (美德); in favor of/ against; calm; get along with; care for
范文
Helping others is a traditional virtue. When I see an old person fall down in the street,I will run towards him at once to help him without hesitation. First of ll, I will keep calm and check whether he is injured or not. Then, if necessary, I will dial 120 so that he can betaken to the hospital immediately. Besides, I will also help him to call his family member to come and accompany him. I decide to help him, because I was taught to help others with my efforts since I was a little boy. When an old person falls down, he must be very scared and feel helpless. Therefore, helping him is something I must do.
（二）
題目
假設(shè)你參加了一個(gè)志愿者項(xiàng)目，暑假去偏遠(yuǎn)地區(qū)(a remote area)和小朋友們生活一段時(shí)間。出發(fā)之前，你希望得到更多關(guān)于項(xiàng)目的信息。你列了張表，請(qǐng)確定你最希望了解的1-2個(gè)關(guān)鍵問題，然后寫-封信給組織者M(jìn)r. Prince,請(qǐng)求他的幫助。信件格式已給，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格，至少60個(gè)字。
My list
Things I can do with the children Weather
Things I need to prepare Medical care
Basic information of the children there Food
范文
Dear Mr. Prince,
It is my great honor to be a member of the volunteer program. I will appreciate it a lot if you can provide me with more detailed information. First, I want to have a clear picture of the basic information of the children there, such as their hobbies, their age and their living conditions. The more I know about the children, the better I can do. Second,the information of the weather condition there is of great importance to me, as I want to prepare proper clothes to avoid getting ill. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon and I will try my best to help the children.
Yours Sincerely,
Allen
（三）
題目
Write a letter with at least 60 words according to the given situation. (根據(jù)所給情景，寫一封不少于60個(gè)詞的信，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。)
Situation:
Your friend Tom has broken his leg recently. He has to stay at home in bed for at least one month. He feels very upset and worries about his studies a lot. Please write a letter to him to express your sympathy and cheer him up.
范文
Dear Tom,
I'm really sorry to hear that you have broken your leg. It must be very painful. Now in order to get well soon, you have to stay in bed for some time. It must be very boring but you'd better take the doctor's advice. I know you are worried about your studies, but take it easy,I will help you with your studies as soon as you get well. So you don't have to worry too much.
The most important thing for you is to stay in bed and try to recover. I believe you will be better soon!
Yours Sincerely,
Allen
