中考英語作文指導：如何寫人物介紹
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以人物介紹為主要內(nèi)容的文章，在初中階段的寫作訓練中出現(xiàn)較多。該主題源于實際，貼近學生生活。每個人都有自己的情況，可以和學習有關，也可以和娛樂、體育運動等有關。學生在寫作中容易做到言之有物，有感而發(fā)。 <a hReF=http://www.zequeka.cn/miNiform.html>家長推薦的蘇州吳中作文輔導班</a>
實踐案例1
題目
Write a composition in at least 60 words on the topic "Something that I like doing most at home". (以“我在家最喜歡做的事”為題，寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文。)
審題
這是篇以“我在家最喜歡做的事”為題的全命題說明文，但具體內(nèi)容沒有限制。題目的要求和指示也非常明確，即圍繞“what do 1 like doing most"，why do I like doing it"和"how does it help me"這三個問題進行寫作。在寫作時，首先需闡明文章的主題，即我在家最喜歡做的事，例如:閱讀、繪畫、唱歌、演奏樂器、運動、養(yǎng)花種草、烹飪等;其次，可以說明之所以喜歡的原因，以及它帶給我的幫助和好處。為了使行文更連貫，可以適當使用一些過渡詞和連接詞，比如what's more, in addition, as a matter of fact, above all, all in all等，從而使文章更有層次感和邏輯性。同時，也要注意文章的時態(tài)，本文的寫作應使用一般現(xiàn)在時，盡量避免過于詳細地敘述過去的某個事件或經(jīng)歷。
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
本文可采用三段式，即“總一分一總”的寫作結(jié)構(gòu):
●第一段(開頭):提出文章的主題，明確闡述說明的主要內(nèi)容，即在家最喜歡做的事情?！竦诙?中心段):文章的中心部分，對主題進行展開說明，可圍繞“為什么”及“怎么樣”展開?？梢赃m當使用一些承接過渡詞，使文章層次分明，要點銜接自然。
●第三段(結(jié)尾):文章的結(jié)尾段，對全文進行總結(jié)，概括事理和觀點，起到首尾呼應的效果。
核心語匯
take up (doing) sth.開始從事....
be keen on / be fond of / be interested in (dong) sth.喜歡、熱衷于做....
spend ... (in) doing sth.花時間做.....
enjoy I practise doing sth.喜歡/練習做....
make sb. relaxed / excited讓...放松/興奮的
improve one's skill 提高技能
enrich one's mind豐富頭腦
broaden one's horizon拓寬視野
cultivate one's interest培養(yǎng)興趣
gain knowledge from....中獲得知識
do good to ......有好處
參考句型
V-ing is a great way to relax myself and gain pleasure....是放松自我獲得樂趣的方式。
It is interesting/ relaxing / helpful for sb. to do sth. 對某人來說做某事是有趣/放松/有幫助的
... plays an important role in my daily life....在我的 日常生活中發(fā)揮重要作用。
In order to ... we can/ should/ need to ..為了...我們可以/應該/需....
初稿
I like reading most at home.
First, reading can relax myself after doing homework. Second, reading can help me gain more knowledge and understand our life better. Third, reading books can create a silent atmosphere and make me more patient. In addition, it is very interesting and exciting to read some novels or detective stories.
All in all, reading is the thing that I like doing most at home.
點評:
該生的這篇習作內(nèi)容切題，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，是三段式的總分總結(jié)構(gòu)。語言表達比較流暢，正確使用了動名詞做主語的結(jié)構(gòu)、形式主語it的句式以及定語從句。但是，這篇作文的正文部分，作者在闡述閱讀的好處時，沒有進行詳細說明，闡述得不夠充分;開頭和結(jié)尾也顯得較為單調(diào)和乏味，沒有亮點:全文使用的連接過渡詞過多。此外，文中還有一些語法和句式錯誤，比如: reading can relax myself after doing homework,應該改為I can relax myself by reading after doing homework,以確保主、從句邏輯主語一致。
修改稿
I like reading most at home because it plays an important role in my daily life. It has also helped me in many different ways.
First of all, reading makes me more knowledgeable. For example, I can learn more idiomatic expressions by reading English novels. What's more, reading turns out to be a good way to relax and entertain myself. After a long day at school, reading books can bring me a lot of happiness and pleasure.
To sum up, I can gain not only knowledge but pleasure as well through reading. That's why I like reading most at home.
點評:
從結(jié)構(gòu)來看，這篇習作結(jié)構(gòu)完整，是典型的三段式作文，首尾呼應。從內(nèi)容來看，開頭開門見山地說明了閱讀對作者的重要性和帶來的幫助:文章中心段落分兩個層次較為詳盡具體地闡明了閱讀對作者的幫助，有理有據(jù)， 內(nèi)容詳實; 結(jié)尾總結(jié)了全文的觀點，收尾自然。通篇文章用詞準確，語言地道，句式豐富?？偟膩碚f，是一篇比較好的作文。
習作
Listening to music is my favorite thing to do at home. I always listen to some music and songs in my spare time for various reasons. First and foremost, it is a desirable relaxation when I feel tired after a day's hard work. Besides, listening to music is a perfect way to reduce my pressure and sorrow. Whenever I listen to my favorite songs, I will feel much relaxed. To sum up, listening to music is beneficial to me and it makes my life more colorful
實踐案例2
題目
Write at least 60 words on the topic“ has helped me learn a lot” (以“ 幫助我學到了很多”為題，寫-篇不少于60個詞的短文。)
提示:日常學習和生活中有很多事情可以在各個方面幫助我們。請舉一個例子加以說明，并談談你的體會。
審題
這是篇半命題說明文，寫作時應該圍繞“what has helped you learn a lot"，“when did you first take it up"和"how did it help you"這三個問題展開。在寫作時，首先闡明文章的主題，即帶給我?guī)椭氖?，其次，可以闡述它在哪些方面幫助了你，并舉例說明。但應避免在文章中講述具體的故事，不要寫成記敘文。
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
本文可采用三段式，即“總一分一總”的寫作結(jié)構(gòu)。
核心語匯
spare no efforts to do sth.不遺余力地做某事
sb. get/ be familiar with ...某人熟悉......
sth. be familiar to sb.......對某人來說是熟悉的
set out to do sth.開始做....
devote oneself to (doing) sth.專心做，致力.....
lead to/ result in sth.引起，導致....
contribute to (doing) sth.促成，有助于...
make up one's mind to do sth.下定決心做....
be determined to do sth.堅決地做.....
have difficulty 1 trouble (in) doing sth.....有困難
overcome difficulty to achieve success克服困難獲得成功
參考句型
■I first learned to play the piano at the age of7.
我七歲第一次學習彈鋼琴。
■The first time I took up ... I was deeply attracted by it/I fell in love with it.第一次開始做....我就被深深吸引/我就愛上了它。
■Every time I practise playing the piano, I feel relaxed and delighted.
每一次我練習彈鋼琴的時候，我都感到放松和愉快。
The more I learned about ... the more interested I became in it.
.....了解得越多，我就越感興趣。
■It has helped me to face the difficulties with courage, instead of running away.它幫助我勇敢地面對困難，而不是退縮逃跑。
范文
I've learned to play badminton since I was ten years old. When I play badminton, I not only feel relaxed but also learn a lot. To begin with, I have learned not to give up easily.
Even if I fail in several competitions, I will work even harder to improve my skill because I know if I give up, I will never win. What's more, I have learned to set up a goal before I practise. With a goal in my mind, I will be more determined to overcome any difficulties and to achieve success. Besides, I will be more confident after I win a match. In conclusion,I do enjoy playing badminton for the reason that it has benefited me a lot.
點評:
這篇習作以體育運動為主要內(nèi)容，開頭即簡明闡述了打羽毛球帶給作者的好處，結(jié)尾也恰到好處地對全文進行了總結(jié)，并起到了點題的作用。而在正文部分，作者分三個層次依次進行具體說明。針對每個觀點，作者都不忘給出實例和細節(jié)來進行支撐。
相關話題優(yōu)秀作文解析
（一）
Miss Black
Miss Black is an excellent teacher. She is a good-looking woman, with gentle manners and a kind smile.
Miss Black likes her work very much. She works very hard and tries her best to make every class perfect. Listening to her lessons is an artistic entertainment. Indeed, she treats her students as her own children. She is very strict with their study, but in the daily lives, she is kind to them. She always shows deep concern for them and makes great efforts to make them more independent.
She is so nice that all the students respect her very much.
參考譯文
布萊克老師
布萊克老師是一-位出色的老師。她是一位長得很好看的女士，有著溫柔的行為舉止和和藹的微笑。
布萊克老師非常喜歡她的工作。她工作非常努力，力求使每節(jié)課都完美。聽她講課就是一種藝術的享受。實際上，她對待學生就像對待她自己的孩子。她對他們學習的要求非常嚴格，但是在日常生活中，她對他們非常友好。她總是很關心他們，努力使他們更獨立。
她是這樣的友好，所有的學生都非常尊重她。
亮點詞匯
0good-looking 好看的
manner行為舉止
artistic藝術的
independent獨立的
respect 尊重
出彩句型
She is a good-looking woman, with.她是一位長得很好看的女士，有著...
.... is an artistic entertainment.是藝術的享受。
She treats...as..她將.....當......對待。
She is kind t...她對...很和藹。
She always shows dep concern for她總是很關心....
高分點評
在作者形象生動的介紹之下，一一個和藹可親的布萊克的老師形象躍然紙上。 文章主要對布萊克老師的外貌、教學、育人等方面展開了介紹，詳略得當，說明過程有條有理。 文章運用的短語多姿多彩，如"try one's best' "be kind to"等。
（二）
Charlie Chaplin
Charlie Chaplin was born in 1889 in London. He came from a family of artists.His mother was an actress and his father was an actor.
He started dancing and singing for money in 1894. At that time, he lived a poor life. In 1904, he went to America and he became a film director in 1914. He made many funny films from 1914 to 1966. And he also starred in many silent comedies, like Modern Times. He died in 1977. Hearing the news, lots of people were very sad. People all over the world will remember him forever.
Until now, people are still attracted by him and his movies.
參考譯文
查理.卓別林
查理.卓別林于1889年出生于倫敦。他來自一個藝術家家庭。他的父母親都是演員。1894年，他開始通過跳舞、唱歌賺錢。那時，他過著貧窮的生活。1904年， 他去了美國，1914年， 他成為了一名電影導演。1914 年到1966年間，他制作了很多搞笑的電影。他也主演了很多無聲喜則，如(摩登時代)。他近于1977年。聽到這個消息，很多人都非常傷心。全世界的人們將永遠記住他。
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亮點詞匯
come from a family ....來....的家庭
artist 藝術家
actress 女演員
film director電影導演
Place of interest名勝古邊
star in...主演....
silent 沉默的
出彩句型
He came from a family of artists.他來自一個藝術家家庭。
He started doing他開始做.....
He lived a poor life. 他過著貧窮的生活。
He made many funny film.他制作了很多有趣的電影。
people are still attracted by.. 人們....吸引著
desert沙漠
高分點評
本文以時間為軸線，截取了查理.卓別林人生中的幾個片段進行描述，體現(xiàn)了他偉大的藝術成就和對人們的影響。從結(jié)構(gòu)上看，文章分成了三個部分，詳略得當，敘述具體。從詞句上看，表達非常地道，如"star in° "live a poor life" "People all over the word will remember him forever"等。
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