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對物品物件的描寫般包括物品本身的內(nèi)容、功他、特點等基本信息，并且該物品住往和某個人或者某次經(jīng)歷有關(guān)，對作者有著特別的意義和重要性。學(xué)生需要在寫作中進行客觀的描述和主觀的評價。 <A hRef=http://www.zequeka.cn/MiNifoRm.html>蘇州中小學(xué)生作文培訓(xùn)班</a>
實踐案例1
題目
Write a short passage in at least 60 words about the topic The best gift I’ve received
審題
這是一篇全命題的說明文，要求學(xué)生對“收到的最好禮物”進行描述說明。寫作時可以圍繞what is the gift，what is it like" ，"why do you like it"和"what make it special"這幾個問題展開。首先寫明最好的禮物是什么，該禮物來自誰等基術(shù)信息。其次，可以對禮物的特點進行簡要描寫。特別需要注意的是，本文非常重要的內(nèi)容應(yīng)該是點明為什么這是最好的禮物，即說明該禮物的特殊意義和重要性。
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
本文的結(jié)構(gòu)相對靈活，建議采用三段式，即“總一分總” 的寫作結(jié)構(gòu):
●第一段(開頭):引出話題，寫明收到最好的禮物是什么。
.第二段(中心段):文章的中心部分。依次說明禮物的特點、對“我“的意義等?！竦谌?結(jié)尼):文章的結(jié)尾段，對全文進行總結(jié)，對禮物的意義進行適當?shù)纳A。
mean a lot to sb.對某人很有意義
give me sth. as a birthday present給我...作為生日禮物
.encourage sb. to do鼓勵某人做......
the symbol of friendship友誼的象征
remind sb. of sth.使......想起......
keep and cherish sth. forever永遠保存珍惜.....
參考句型
I have never received a better gift before.我從未收到過更好的禮物。
It has accompanied me for almost ... years.它已經(jīng)陪伴我.....年.
.Whenever look at he it, I will think of the old happy days.
每當我看到這個禮物，我就會想起過去的快樂日子。
Wherever I go, I always take it with me無論我走到哪里，我都帶著它。
習(xí)作1
Among all the gifts I have received, the one I like best is a hand made calendar.
It was made by my best friend Jane. She was my my best friend in the junior high school. She gave it to me when we graduated. On each page of the calendar，there is a picture of lane and me with some words written by her.
She tells me how she feels about our friendship and encourages me to try my bet and live a happy life. Whenever I’ll look at the calendar. I am touched by something warm, and my heart is filled with love.
The calendar is a memory of the wonderful time we spent together in junior high school. I will keep this special gift forever.
點評:
這篇習(xí)作行文流暢，感情真摯動人。對于禮物“日歷”的描寫比較詳細具體，使更得讀者能夠體會作者的情感。同時，這篇習(xí)作結(jié)構(gòu)完整，句式較為豐富，作者使用了定語從人句、賓語從句、時間狀語從句、被動語態(tài)、非謂語等，使全文讀來流暢生動。
習(xí)作2
People give gifts to each other to show their love and friendship. For many years, I've always kept a little puppet which was from one of my old friends, Jane.
She was my next door neighbor and we became best friends soon. On the day when my family moved to a new apartment, she gave me a lovely glove puppet. The puppet is made of cloth and wears red clothes. She is a cute girl, so I name her 'Cutie'. She has accompanied me ever since. So Cutie is just like my little sister. When I have some secrets, I just talk to Cutie and she is like an old friend who understands me. I always share happiness with her.When I feel unhappy, It's a comfort to tell her my trouble.
Wherever I go, I often take Cutie with me. This is my favorite gift, a common puppet,but she means so much to me that I will cherish her forever.
點評:
該生的這篇習(xí)作行文連貫，過度自然。結(jié)構(gòu)完整，安排合理。寫作思路清晰，內(nèi)內(nèi)容緊扣主題，有真情實感。語言流暢生動，用詞準確，句式豐富，多處使用定語從句、狀語語從句、賓語從句等。
實踐案例2
題目
Write a short passage in at least 60 words about the topic "My favorite book”.
審題
本文的標題“我最喜愛的本書二自了然，要求清晰明確。在寫作時，首先需要說明這本書是什么，并可對其內(nèi)容、作者信息等進行簡要介紹。其次，必須寫明喜歡這本書的原因，比如書的精彩之處，從中的收獲等。
段落結(jié)構(gòu)
本文可采用三段式，即“總一分一總”的寫作結(jié)構(gòu):
.第一段(開頭): 引出話題，寫明我最愛的書是什么。
第二段(中心段):文章的中心部分。在這里需要重點閘達為什么喜愛這本書，比如這本書的獨特精彩之處，我從書中學(xué)到了些什么。
第三段結(jié)用: 文章的結(jié)尾段，對全文進行總結(jié)，成是對書的意義進行適當?shù)纳A.
核心語匯
be full of/ be fled with..充滿.....
learn sth. from ...從......中.......學(xué)到......
be worth reading值得一讀
make me laugh and feel moved讓我歡笑和感動
參考句型
It is the most interesting book that I have ever read.這是我看過的最有 趣的書。
I like it because it is full of .我喜歡它因為它充滿....
The reason why I like it best is that I can learn .. from it.我最喜歡它的原因是，我能從中學(xué)到....
The book consists of .. and is about the story of ...這本書包括...是關(guān)于....的故事。
習(xí)作1
My favorite book is Harry Potter. I think it is the most interesting and exciting book I have ever read.
I'm sure most people are familiar with the story, which is about Harry and his friends who study at a magic school. I like reading it because it is full of adventures and magic.have learned a lot from it. First, I've learned that we should be confident and brave enough to overcome any trouble and difficulty just like Harry. Besides, we should love and protect our friends, We all need friends and we need to get along well with our friends and give them a hand when they are in need.
Flying and doing some magical tricks are always children's dream. When I'm reading the book, I feel as if my dream came true. That's why I like the book so much. I'm pretty sure you will like it as well.
點評
這篇習(xí)作結(jié)構(gòu)完整，首尾呼應(yīng)，所舉的例子也較為詳細。文章的正文兩部分說明作者喜歡《哈利.波特》的原因，以及通過閱讀該書學(xué)到的道理，但對小說相關(guān)內(nèi)容的介紹偏少了一些。文章的結(jié)尾不落俗套，引入了魔法這一主題， 也十分符合學(xué)生的年齡特點。
習(xí)作2
So far, I have read numerous books. Yet the book that I like best is My Life Story.
It was written by an American writer, Helen Keller, a blind and deaf person. In the book, she wrote that she h?d not been able to see, hear or speak since she was a baby, which made her desperately sad. When she was seven years old, she met Miss Sullivan, her private tutor. Then, Miss Sullivan helped her learn how to write English words. Helen tried as much as possible to remember words and her efforts paid off. She was getting happier every day.After that, she wrote and published many famous works, among which is My Life Story. My Life Story describes her hard struggle to become an outstanding writer across the world.
The book shows us a universal truth: Nothing is difficult if you put your heart into it!This is why I like it best.
點評:
這篇習(xí)作結(jié)構(gòu)清晰明了，首尾呼應(yīng)。正文部分主要圍繞海倫.凱勒的生平故事和她的著作《我的生活》- -書，展開了詳盡生動的描寫，并在文章最后引出了喜歡該書的原因，但對作者和作品的介紹著墨過少，可以適當聯(lián)系自身實際情況加以說明。
相關(guān)話題滿分作文解析
（一）
Chinese Food
China is very famous for its food all over the world. There are all kinds of cuisines in Chin, such as Cantonese cuisine, Sichuan cuisine, Shanghai cuisine and so on.
Cantonese cuisine is a bit light, but it is very delicious.Sichuan cuisine is very hot and spicy while Shanghai cuisine is rather oil. In the north of China, people are accustomed to eating noodles and dumpling. in the south of China, people are used to eating nice and seafood.
Chinese food is good in color, smell and taste. So 1 like it very much.
參考譯文
中國菜
中國菜在全世界都很出名。中國有各種各樣的菜系，比如說廣東菜、四川菜、上海來，等等。
廣東菜味道較清淡，但是非常美味。四川菜非常燙和辣，而上海菜卻較油膩。在中國的北方，人們習(xí)慣于吃面條和餃子。在中國的南方，人們習(xí)慣于吃來飯和海鮮。中國菜色、香、味俱全。所以我非常喜歡它。
亮點詞匯
all over the world全世界
cuisine 菜式;萊肴
delicious美味的;可口
spicy 辛辣的
oily 多油的;含油的
be accustomed to doing...習(xí)慣于做.....
seafood 海產(chǎn)食品
出彩句型
China is very famous for..中....著名。
There are all kinds of..有各種各樣的...
People are accustomed to ding..人們習(xí)慣于做...
People are used to doing..人們習(xí)慣于做...
Chinese food is good in color, smell and taste.中國菜色、香、味俱全。
高分點評
中國菜博大精深，種類繁多。作者在介紹時能很好地抓住中國菜最主要的特點進行展開，展示了中國菜的多樣性以及誘人的一面。文章詞句均較為新穎，是一大出彩之處， 如短語"be accustomed to" "be used to"等，可供讀者借鑒學(xué)習(xí)。
（二）
Mini Cars
The mini car is designed mainly for Chinese families.
The car is in a popular and fashionable style with four seats, and it can travel for a long distance. In addition, the proper size of the car makes it easy to drive. Usually, its highest speed is 160 kilometers per hour. The price, RMB 100.000, is lower than that of the same kind both at home and abroad.
It is certainly a wise choice to buy a mini car. Anyone who owns a mini car will enjoy it very much.
參考譯文
迷你汽車
迷你汽車主要是為中國的家庭設(shè)計的。
這種車有四個座位，集流行、時尚的風格。它可以用于長途旅行(駕駛很長的時間)。除此以外，合適的大小讓它很容易駕駛。通常，它最高的速度為每小時160干米。價格為100 000人民幣，比國內(nèi)外同類的汽車價格要低。
買一輛迷你汽車確實是明智的選擇。任何擁有迷你汽車的人都會很喜歡它。
亮點詞匯
design 設(shè)計
distance /距離
in addition除此以外
proper適宜的;適合的
speed .速度
at home and abroad國內(nèi)外;中外
speed .度
wise / 明智的
出彩句型
The mini car is designed mainly for... 迷你汽車主要是為...設(shè)計的。
The cars... is in style. 這種車是.....風格。
It can travel fora long distance. 它可以用于長途旅行。
The price is lower than that of the same kind both at home and abroad.價格比國內(nèi)外同類的汽車價格要低。
It is certainly a wise choice t.... ....確實是一個明智的選擇。
高分點評
本文作者對迷你汽車作了細致入微的介紹，讓我們對它的風格、形狀、速度、價格等有了直觀的認識，顯示出作者豐富的汽車知識。除此以外，作者的語言能力也較為出色，遣詞造句皆是拈手就來，如"be designed mainly for. "It is certainly a wise choice to.."等，均大大增加了文章的魅力。
相關(guān)話題滿分作文必背
Write a short passage about the topic“I want to invent ”
I want to invent a language machine
Learning a new language takes lots of time and energy, so I want to invent a language machine to help us understand different languages.
The language machine looks like a wrist watch. It contains thousands of digital dictionaries and a special Bluetooth which is connected with our brain. When we wear it, it can translate to our native language and then send signals directly to our brain.
With this machine, we won't be afraid of causing misunderstanding anymore, especially when we are abroad. Using different languages to communicate with foreigners will be apiece of cake.
I am looking forward to the day when I will be able to invent my language machine and I'm determined to study even harder and acquire more knowledge.
點評:
這篇習(xí)作展現(xiàn)了小作者豐富的想象力，同時又能基于現(xiàn)有的科技水平，如:數(shù)字詞典、藍牙技術(shù)等。作者通過對比和效果展示的方法，為我們呈現(xiàn)了擁有此項發(fā)明的美好前景。
《中考英語作文指導(dǎo)：如何寫物品介紹》添加時間：2025-01-09；更新時間：2025-03-15
