中考英語書面表達高分作文攻略（全國通用版）
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減負之后，同學(xué)們有了更多的課余時間。某校英語角就“如何讓課余生活更有意義？”展開了討論，大家各抒己見。請你根據(jù)下圖提示，以“How To Make Our Spare Time More Meaningful?”為題，用英語寫一篇短文。 <A hRef=http://www.zequeka.cn/MiNifoRm.Html>蘇州中小學(xué)生作文培訓(xùn)班</a>
注意：(1) 短文應(yīng)包括所給內(nèi)容要點，可適當發(fā)揮，使文章連貫；
(2) 詞數(shù)90左右，短文開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
(3) 短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的真實姓名、校名等信息；
(4) 參考詞匯：提升素養(yǎng)promote literacy。
How to Make Our Spare Time More Meaningful?
Nowadays, we students have much more spare time than ever before, but how to make our spare time more meaningful?
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【寫作思路】
本文屬于材料作文，要表達如何讓課外生活更有意義。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當增加內(nèi)容。
【參考范文】
How to Make Our Spare Time More Meaningful?
Nowadays we students have much more spare time than ever before, but how to make our spare time more meaningful?
My schoolmates give the following suggestions. First it's good to help our parents do some housework to show our love for them. Second, we will know more about the world by reading. Third, it is a good chance for us to get close to nature and relax ourselves.
In my opinion, we can do some sports to make us stronger and healthier. What's more, we can take an active part in some social activities as volunteers to help those in need.
In a word, let's make full use of our spare time and promote our literacy.
【名師點評】
這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達符合英語習(xí)慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點詞句，如a good chance to do, get close to, in my opinion, what’s more, take an active part in, in a word, make full use of, spare time以及“比較級and比較級”等，增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫。
【點睛】
寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起：
認真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求，抓住要點，詞數(shù)符合要求。
構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。
初寫短文。一切都準備就緒，就可以動筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。
修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。
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為了讓學(xué)生吃到更加營養(yǎng)、安全的食品，政府出臺了陪餐制，要求從 4 月 1 日起，學(xué)校領(lǐng)導(dǎo)陪同學(xué)生用餐。請你根據(jù)以下要點，給校報英語專欄寫一篇短文，談?wù)勛约旱目捶ā?/span>
1. 學(xué)生吃得健康、安全；
2. 及時發(fā)現(xiàn)就餐問題；
3. 食堂提供食品多樣；
4. 父母更加放心。
注意：1.詞數(shù) 80 詞左右；開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
2. 可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3. 參考詞匯:規(guī)定 regulation (n.)；食堂 cafeteria (n.)；營養(yǎng)的 nutritious (adj.)
A new food safety regulation was put into use on April 1 to improve nutrition and food safety in schools. It asks the school managers to eat with students in their cafeterias.
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【寫作思路】
本文屬于材料作文，就政府出臺的“陪餐制度”談?wù)勀愕目捶ā８鶕?jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當增加內(nèi)容。
亮點說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達符合英語習(xí)慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點詞句，如thanks to, take place, be able to, provide sth for sb, in other words, worry about, not...at all, carry on, first, second以及also，增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫。
【參考范文】
A new food safety regulation was put into use on April 1 to improve nutrition and food safety in schools. It asks the school managers to eat with students in their cafeterias.
Thanks to the regulation, something great has taken place in our school. First, we eat healthier and safer than before. Second, if there is any problem about food safety or other, our school leaders are able to know and solve it quickly. Also, the cafeteria workers are trying to provide different kinds of food for us. In other words, our parents needn’t worry about our diet any more.
We teenagers are still young and need to grow healthy, so I think the new regulation is really good and necessary. I hope it will be carried on forever.
（三）
文章討論了許多年輕人很在意自己外貌的問題，文章的最后指出：“We need to judge people by what they do, not what they look like.” 你同意文章最后提出的觀點嗎？對此觀點你有何看法？請根據(jù)下面提示寫一篇英語短文談?wù)勀愕目捶?，闡述理由，并舉例說明。
寫作要點：
I. Your opinion (agree/ disagree /…)；
2. Reasons (looks, personality品性， ability...)；
3. An example (yourself/ a person around you/ a famous person/…).
要求：
1. 短文應(yīng)包括提示中所有的寫作要點，條理清楚，行文連貫，可適當發(fā)揮；
2. 如舉自己或身邊的人作為例子，不能出現(xiàn)真實的人名和地名；
3. 詞數(shù)不少于80。
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【寫作思路】
這是一篇要求根據(jù)文章中許多年輕人很在意自己外貌的問題，文章最后提出判斷一個人應(yīng)該根據(jù)他做了什么，而不是根據(jù)一個人的外貌來判斷，對這一觀點提出自己的看法。動筆前先要認真閱讀要點，圍繞要點組織材料，然后用正確的英語句子把這些內(nèi)容表達出來，在此基礎(chǔ)上亦可適當發(fā)揮，注意不要遺漏材料中給出的要點。根據(jù)材料可知本文主要是應(yīng)用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，注意標點符號及大小寫等問題，不要犯語法錯誤。注意上下文之間的邏輯關(guān)系，語意連貫。
【參考范文】
范文1
I agree with the opinion. Compared with looks, personality and ability are more important. Because we can’t change our looks easily, but we can decide and control what we do. Thnaks to the kind and hard-working people, our society is becoming better and better.
For example, Ma Yun, a well-known businessman, doesn’t look handsome, but he created Alibaba which has changed our lifestyle and made our life more convenient. He has been doing so much for our society that we all admire him. Because of his contribution to our society, we even think he looks so cool.
So let’s try our best to do more useful things for our society and pay less attentionto our looks.
范文2
In my opinion, I think we need to judge people by both what they do and what they look like.
A person's personality and ability are very important, but for some jobs, looks are also important, such as an actor or an actress, a waiter or a waitress, or even a teacher. Because it's enjoyable to see a good-looking person.
For example, my teachers in my class all teach very well, and they are kind and helpful. All of us like them. But the most popular teacher is my English teacher, because she looks really beautiful. She dresses herself up every day and always has a smile on her face.
So let's try our best to improve our ability, personality and looks.
（四）
根據(jù)中文和英文提示，完成一篇不少于50詞的文段寫作。文中已給出內(nèi)容不計入總詞數(shù)。所給提示詞語僅供選用。請不要寫出你的校名和姓名。
假如你是李華，你們學(xué)校正在開展“安全月”宣傳活動，倡議大家制作關(guān)于安全教育的主題海報，你們班交換生Peter給你發(fā)郵件詢問相關(guān)事情。請用英語回復(fù)一封郵件，告訴他海報上交的時間，并分享你設(shè)計海報的一些想法。
提示詞語：design，safety rule，careful，protect，picture
提示問題：When should you hand in the poster?
What would you like to share with Peter about designing the poster?
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your email _______________________________________________________________
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If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.
Yours,
Li Hua
【寫作思路】
這篇作文要求我們以李華的身份給Peter寫一封郵件，告訴他關(guān)于制作關(guān)于安全教育的主題海報的相關(guān)事宜。由題目中給出的提示問題可知，短文中應(yīng)包括以下內(nèi)容：首先告訴Peter海報上交的時間；然后和他分享一些設(shè)計海報的想法。第二個內(nèi)容應(yīng)該是短文的主體。題目中并沒有規(guī)定具體的寫作內(nèi)容，學(xué)生們應(yīng)聯(lián)系自己的實際生活，展開合理的想象，將這些內(nèi)容補充完整后，用正確的英語表達出來，這是寫作中的一個難點。短文應(yīng)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主、第一、二人稱來敘述。寫作時應(yīng)注意：首先要合理安排短文內(nèi)容，敘述應(yīng)有層次、有條理?？梢允褂靡恍┍硎鞠群箜樞虻脑~或短語，如First, Second, Last but not least等等。題目中給出的提示詞應(yīng)該在短文中用上。其次應(yīng)注意文章的表達，英語句式的結(jié)構(gòu)與漢語是不同的，因此不能根據(jù)漢語思維逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)該從句式的整體考慮，先確定主干結(jié)構(gòu)，然后添加修飾成分。為提升作文檔次，應(yīng)注意使用一些高級詞匯、短語以及復(fù)合句、非謂語動詞等復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)。同時語句之間使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分，使文意上下連貫，表達流暢。
【參考范文】
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your email. As it is required，you are supposed to hand in the poster before next Friday.
Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you. First and foremost，the basic safety rules are of great importance，which should be included in your poster. In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school. Last but by no means least，if I were you，I would add a few suggestions about safety awareness，considering that better safe than sorry. In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.
If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.
Yours,
Li Hua
【名師點評】
這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，給Peter寫郵件，告訴他制作主題海報的一些事情。短文有以下幾個優(yōu)點：首先文章內(nèi)容完整，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，符合題目要求。除題目中給出的開頭和結(jié)尾，短文主要包括兩個內(nèi)容：第一段用一句話告訴Peter上交海報的時間；文章的中心和重點是放在了第二段上，這一段中作者和Peter分享了一些制作海報的想法。主要從四個方面進行闡述，內(nèi)容非常詳實，并使用了First and foremost, In the second place, Last but by no means least, In addition等短語，分清了這一段的層次，敘述非常有條理。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，語法規(guī)范，用詞準確，并使用了較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)，表現(xiàn)了作者較強的語言運用能力。短文中較好的句型有：Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you.、In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school、In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.等。
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假定你是李華，收到英國筆友 Harry 的郵件，獲悉他在機器人制作比賽中獲獎。請根據(jù)郵件內(nèi)容給他回復(fù)。詞數(shù) 80 左右。
參考詞匯：congratulation 祝賀注意事項：
1. 回復(fù)郵件時可適當發(fā)揮，郵件格式已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
2. 意思清楚，表達通順，行文連貫，書寫規(guī)范；
3. 請勿在文中使用真實的姓名、校名及地名。
Dear Harry,
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Yours,
Li Hua
【寫作思路】
此類觀點表達和原因說明類的作文，在我們?nèi)喌闹锌紡?fù)習(xí)中進行過系統(tǒng)的訓(xùn)練。學(xué)生可根據(jù)日常所授的寫作模板，對全文內(nèi)容及結(jié)構(gòu)進行合理安排。
（1）結(jié)構(gòu)：開頭表示祝賀，使用所給提示詞；
（2）正文要點：表達興趣并說明原因，至少兩點（如熱點科技，對科技創(chuàng)新的興趣，對生活的改變，對醫(yī)療、救援的幫助等）；
寫作時從單詞拼寫到句子結(jié)構(gòu)，從時態(tài)到語態(tài)，都應(yīng)該注意統(tǒng)一。在打草稿時把需要用到的關(guān)鍵詞、高級句式、關(guān)鍵結(jié)構(gòu)甚至注意事項等簡單地寫在題目旁邊，以盡量規(guī)避錯誤。
【參考范文】
Dear Harry,
Congratulations！How glad I am to share your good news!
I think robots are helpful in many ways. And in the future, they will play more important roles in our daily life. Plus, I am dying to have a robot of my own. I can have it take care of my grandparents when we are not at home. You see, my grandparents are old and cannot move easily. It can help them do some housework such as cooking, cleaning the house and so on.
Hoping you will make greater progress.
Yours,
Li Hua
《中考英語書面表達高分作文攻略（5）》添加時間：2025-01-13；更新時間：2025-03-15
