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從下面兩個(gè)題目中任選一題，根據(jù)中文和英文提示，完成一篇不少于50詞的文段寫(xiě)作。文中已給出內(nèi)容不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。所給提示詞語(yǔ)僅供選用。請(qǐng)不要寫(xiě)出你的校名和姓名。
題目①
假如你是李華,你們學(xué)校正在開(kāi)展“安全月”宣傳活動(dòng)，倡議大家制作關(guān)于安全教育的主題海報(bào)，你們班交換生Peter給你發(fā)郵件詢問(wèn)相關(guān)事情。請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)回復(fù)一封郵件，告訴他海報(bào)上交的時(shí)間，并分享你設(shè)計(jì)海報(bào)的一些想法。
提示詞語(yǔ): design，safety rule，careful，protect，picture
提示問(wèn)題: When should you hand in the poster?
What would you like to share with Peter about designing the poster?
Dear Peter,
I’m glad to receive your email _________________________________________________________________
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If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.
Yours,
Li Hua
題目②
自律，即自我約束，是自我提升的一種途徑，有助于我們成長(zhǎng)，促使我們不斷前行。
某英文網(wǎng)站正在開(kāi)展以“自律”為主題的征文活動(dòng)。假如你是李華，請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文投稿，談?wù)劄榱嗽鰪?qiáng)自律意識(shí)，你做過(guò)什么，以及這樣做給你帶來(lái)的好處。
提示詞語(yǔ): self-disciplined(自律的)，plan，goal，habit，improve
提示問(wèn)題: What did you do to be self-disciplined?
What benefits have you got from doing so?
Self-discipline plays an important role in our life__________________________________________________
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書(shū)面表達(dá)題目三個(gè)特點(diǎn)：
一、注重教育性，突出育人價(jià)值
注重對(duì)學(xué)生情感價(jià)值觀的引導(dǎo)，堅(jiān)持立德樹(shù)人、育人為本。
題目1要求學(xué)生寫(xiě)一封關(guān)于“安全月”宣傳海報(bào)制作的電子郵件，引導(dǎo)學(xué)生增強(qiáng)安全意識(shí)。
題目2圍繞“自律”這一話題，要求學(xué)生談?wù)劄榱嗽鰪?qiáng)自律意識(shí)，做過(guò)什么，以及這樣做的意義，鼓勵(lì)學(xué)生從我做起，增強(qiáng)自律意識(shí)。任務(wù)要求符合學(xué)生能力水平，自然融入了社會(huì)主義新時(shí)期對(duì)學(xué)生能力和品格的要求。
二、注重選擇性，體現(xiàn)開(kāi)放性
題目1要求學(xué)生寫(xiě)一篇關(guān)于安全海報(bào)制作的電子郵件，突出“做事”，題目2要求學(xué)生就“自律”這一話題寫(xiě)一篇短文投稿，突出“說(shuō)事”。兩道題目話題不同、形式不同，學(xué)生任選一道題目作答，充分尊重學(xué)生的個(gè)性化學(xué)習(xí)特點(diǎn)和不同思維需求，給學(xué)生更多的選擇空間。同時(shí)，題目關(guān)注了學(xué)生的個(gè)體學(xué)習(xí)特點(diǎn)和生活體驗(yàn)，設(shè)置了開(kāi)放的情景，鼓勵(lì)不同語(yǔ)言水平和思維層次的學(xué)生結(jié)合自身的實(shí)際，展示自己多年的語(yǔ)言積累，呈現(xiàn)出多樣化、個(gè)性化的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)和多角度的思維方法，為各層次的學(xué)生搭建了一個(gè)展示自我的平臺(tái)。
三、注重實(shí)踐性，凸顯學(xué)以致用
題目1要求學(xué)生通過(guò)郵件分享設(shè)計(jì)海報(bào)的想法，題目2要求學(xué)生為網(wǎng)站投稿，談?wù)撟约旱淖龇ê拖敕?。任?wù)設(shè)置貼近時(shí)代、貼近生活、貼近學(xué)生，體現(xiàn)了對(duì)寫(xiě)郵件、制作海報(bào)、投稿等實(shí)踐活動(dòng)的考查，鼓勵(lì)學(xué)生學(xué)以致用，以用促學(xué)，更好地促進(jìn)了學(xué)生語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力的發(fā)展。
題目①
Dear Peter,
I’m glad to receive your email. As it is required，you are supposed to hand in the poster before next Friday.
Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you. First and foremost，the basic safety rules are of great importance，which should be included in your poster. In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school. Last but by no means least，if I were you，I would add a few suggestions about safety awareness，considering that better safe than sorry. In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.
If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.
Yours,
Li Hua
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這篇作文要求我們以李華的身份給Peter寫(xiě)一封郵件，告訴他關(guān)于制作關(guān)于安全教育的主題海報(bào)的相關(guān)事宜。由題目中給出的提示問(wèn)題可知，短文中應(yīng)包括以下內(nèi)容：首先告訴Peter海報(bào)上交的時(shí)間；然后和他分享一些設(shè)計(jì)海報(bào)的想法。第二個(gè)內(nèi)容應(yīng)該是短文的主體。題目中并沒(méi)有規(guī)定具體的寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容，學(xué)生們應(yīng)聯(lián)系自己的實(shí)際生活，展開(kāi)合理的想象，將這些內(nèi)容補(bǔ)充完整后，用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)，這是寫(xiě)作中的一個(gè)難點(diǎn)。短文應(yīng)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主、第一、二人稱來(lái)敘述。寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)注意：首先要合理安排短文內(nèi)容，敘述應(yīng)有層次、有條理。可以使用一些表示先后順序的詞或短語(yǔ)，如First, Second, Last but not least等等。題目中給出的提示詞應(yīng)該在短文中用上。其次應(yīng)注意文章的表達(dá)，英語(yǔ)句式的結(jié)構(gòu)與漢語(yǔ)是不同的，因此不能根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)思維逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)該從句式的整體考慮，先確定主干結(jié)構(gòu)，然后添加修飾成分。為提升作文檔次，應(yīng)注意使用一些高級(jí)詞匯、短語(yǔ)以及復(fù)合句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞等復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)。同時(shí)語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意上下連貫，表達(dá)流暢。
【寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)】
這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，給Peter寫(xiě)郵件，告訴他制作主題海報(bào)的一些事情。短文有以下幾個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)：首先文章內(nèi)容完整，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，符合題目要求。除題目中給出的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾，短文主要包括兩個(gè)內(nèi)容：第一段用一句話告訴Peter上交海報(bào)的時(shí)間；文章的中心和重點(diǎn)是放在了第二段上，這一段中作者和Peter分享了一些制作海報(bào)的想法。主要從四個(gè)方面進(jìn)行闡述，內(nèi)容非常詳實(shí)，并使用了First and foremost, In the second place, Last but by no means least, In addition等短語(yǔ)，分清了這一段的層次，敘述非常有條理。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，用詞準(zhǔn)確，并使用了較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)，表現(xiàn)了作者較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力。短文中較好的句型有：Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you.、In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school、In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.等等。
題目②
Self-discipline plays an important role in our life. To be honest, I am a person who is self-disciplined. I used to follow all kinds of rules and hand in the tasks appointed on time at school. And I could not only respected all my teachers but also get on well with my classmates. At home, I was able to balance housework and homework. I usually made a plan in advance to make it easier to achieve my goal. After finishing all the task, I developed the habit of going to bed early and going to bed early. In the society，I spared no effort to improve myself all the time.
In a word, I have benefited a lot from being self-discipline. First of all, I have had many good habits, which makes my life easier and more regular. Secondly, my life and my study have been to high efficiency so that a lot of time has been saved. Thirdly, being self-disciplined has prepared me for a better and brighter future. In the future, I will continue to be a self-disciplined person.
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這篇作文要求我們以李華的身份，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文給某網(wǎng)站投稿，談?wù)劄榱嗽鰪?qiáng)自律意識(shí)，你做過(guò)什么，以及這樣做給你帶來(lái)的好處。根據(jù)題目中給出的問(wèn)題可知，短文應(yīng)包括以下內(nèi)容：首先談一談為了增強(qiáng)自律意識(shí)，你做過(guò)什么？然后談?wù)勥@樣做給你帶來(lái)的好處。第一個(gè)內(nèi)容應(yīng)主要使用一般過(guò)去時(shí)；第二個(gè)內(nèi)容應(yīng)主要使用現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)。注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。題目中并沒(méi)有規(guī)定具體的寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容，學(xué)生們應(yīng)聯(lián)系自己的實(shí)際生活，展開(kāi)合理的想象，將這些內(nèi)容補(bǔ)充完整后，用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)，這是寫(xiě)作中的一個(gè)難點(diǎn)。寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)注意：首先注意內(nèi)容的完整、充實(shí)，學(xué)生們可以結(jié)合自己的實(shí)際生活，寫(xiě)一寫(xiě)自己平時(shí)的做法。注意敘述應(yīng)有層次、有條理。其次應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)問(wèn)題，英語(yǔ)句式的結(jié)構(gòu)與漢語(yǔ)是不同的，因此不能根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)思維逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)該從句式的整體考慮，先確定主干結(jié)構(gòu)，然后添加修飾成分。為提升作文檔次，應(yīng)注意使用一些高級(jí)詞匯、短語(yǔ)以及復(fù)合句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞等復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)。同時(shí)語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意上下連貫，表達(dá)流暢。
【寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)】
這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，介紹了自己第自律的認(rèn)識(shí)，結(jié)合自己的實(shí)際談?wù)摿俗月傻暮锰?。短文有以下幾個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)：首先文章內(nèi)容完整、充實(shí)，短文主要分兩段：第一段中作者介紹了自己在家里、在學(xué)校以及在社會(huì)上是如何遵守規(guī)則，進(jìn)行自我約束的。這一段的內(nèi)容敘述很有條理，從at school, At home, In the society三個(gè)方面進(jìn)行介紹。第二段中作者主要闡述了自律給自己帶來(lái)的好處，使用了Firstly, Secondly, Thirdly，從三個(gè)方面進(jìn)行介紹。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，句式結(jié)構(gòu)文章，且使用了較高級(jí)的詞匯和復(fù)雜句式，提升了作文檔次，展現(xiàn)了作者扎實(shí)的寫(xiě)作功底。文章中較好的句型有：I used to follow all kinds of rules and hand in the tasks appointed on time at school.、I usually made a plan in advance to make it easier to achieve my goal.、First of all，I have had many good habits，which makes my life easier and more regular.、Thirdly, being self-disciplined has prepared me for a better and brighter future.等等。
例題1
題目①
假如你是李華，你們學(xué)校將要舉辦一場(chǎng)關(guān)于京劇的講座，你打算邀請(qǐng)你們班交換生 Peter參加。請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，告訴他講座的時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)，以及需要做什么準(zhǔn)備。
提示詞語(yǔ)：lecture（講座）, invite, information, question, online
提示問(wèn)題：
●When and where will you have the lecture?
●What do you advise Peter to prepare for it?
Dear Peter,
How is it going? There’ll be a lecture on Peking Opera in our school. _________________________________
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If there is anything that I can do, please let me know.
Yours,
Li Hua
題目②
＂靜以修身，儉以養(yǎng)德＂，勤儉節(jié)約是中華民族的傳統(tǒng)美德。無(wú)論生活富足與否，我們都應(yīng)該提倡節(jié)約，杜絕浪費(fèi)。某英文網(wǎng)站正在開(kāi)展以＂節(jié)約是美德＂為主題的征文活動(dòng)。假如你是李華，請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文投稿，談?wù)勆钪心闶窃趺醋龅模约斑@樣做的意義。
提示詞語(yǔ)：thrifty（節(jié)約的）, save, turn off, food, money, virtue（美德）
提示問(wèn)題：
●What do you do in your daily life?
●Why do you do so?
It’s one of our traditional virtues to be thrifty._____________________________________________________
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根據(jù)題目提供的信息，提示詞和兩個(gè)問(wèn)句進(jìn)行內(nèi)容的寫(xiě)作。話題仍貼近學(xué)生的實(shí)際生活，讓學(xué)生學(xué)以致用。第一個(gè)題目主要考查學(xué)生的應(yīng)用能力；第二個(gè)話題相對(duì)較難，試題以日常生活中的小事為切入點(diǎn)，著眼于中華民族優(yōu)秀傳統(tǒng)文化＂儉以養(yǎng)德＂。引導(dǎo)學(xué)生從自身做起，增強(qiáng)勤儉節(jié)約意識(shí)，積極踐行社會(huì)主義核心價(jià)值觀，傳承中華民族傳統(tǒng)美德。
題目①
Dear Peter,
How is it going?
There’ll be a lecture on Peking opera in our school .The Peking opera will start at 10:00 this Friday morning in the school hall. I am writing to invite you to take part in the meaningful lecture.
In the lecture, we can not only get some useful information about the Peking opera ,but also get close to the traditional Chinese culture, which can benefit us a lot.
There are some suggestions for you to prepare for it. First of all, remember to be there on time, what’s more, don’t forget to bring a camera with you ,which can record the precious moment, last but not least, it’s a golden chance for you to come up with some questions that you are willing to learn about.
If there is anything that I can do please let me know.
Yours,
Li Hua
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這是一篇提綱作文，因?yàn)橐?qǐng)交換生Peter參加京劇講座。所以要根據(jù)提綱中的相關(guān)信息向Peter介紹一下京劇講座的時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)以及需要做什么準(zhǔn)備。時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱為第一人稱。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，在解答寫(xiě)作這類試題時(shí)，要根據(jù)短文的中心思想考慮如何開(kāi)頭、展開(kāi)和結(jié)尾，設(shè)想幾個(gè)承上啟下的連詞，將主要句型、關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)記下，形成提綱，寫(xiě)時(shí)切忌結(jié)構(gòu)分散，廢話連篇，嚴(yán)重跑題。語(yǔ)法要正確，表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，注意時(shí)態(tài)、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系，表達(dá)具有條理性。
【高分句型一】
I am writing to invite you to take part in the meaningful lecture. 我寫(xiě)信是想邀請(qǐng)你參加這個(gè)有意義的演講。這里invite sb. to do sth. 表示邀請(qǐng)某人做某事。
【高分句型二】
If there is anything that I can do, please let me know. 如果有什么我能做的，請(qǐng)告訴我。這里let sb. do sth. 表示讓某人做某事。
題目②
It’s one of our traditional virtues to be thrifty. Being thrifty is a good virtue which has been passed down from generation to generation. It’s a good idea to start on in our daily life.
First of all, I constantly check the lights and the taps to make sure that they are off when leaving the house. Besides, never have I wasted any food. What’s more, I don’t spend too much money on unnecessary things and save money regularly.
The reason why I do so is that I want to make a difference to my life. As the old saying goes, ＂ Waste not, want not.＂ I make up my mind to be thrifty as much as possible. I think everyone should take actions to stick to this virtue.
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
本文體裁屬于議論文，話題是＂節(jié)約是美德＂，難度等級(jí)屬于中上，是常見(jiàn)的中考作文話題之一。本文需要考生寫(xiě)出生活中是如何提倡節(jié)約，杜絕浪費(fèi)的。具體應(yīng)從兩個(gè)方面去寫(xiě)：一、在日常生活中你都做了什么？二、你為什么要這樣做？仔細(xì)閱讀文中所給提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點(diǎn)。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定本文應(yīng)以第一人稱去寫(xiě)，描述的是日常生活中如何節(jié)約的，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)注意上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，層次清楚。
本文是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，圍繞主題展開(kāi)論述且包含所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)；上下文意思連貫，層次清楚，用詞準(zhǔn)確、句子通順、行文連貫。首先第一段直奔主題，提出＂節(jié)約是美德＂，運(yùn)用定語(yǔ)從句闡述了節(jié)約是中華民族的傳統(tǒng)美德，以此說(shuō)明節(jié)約的重要性，Being thrifty is a good virtue which has been passed down from generation to generation. 接著號(hào)召大家在日常生活中要從自身做起。 It’s a good idea to start on in our daily life. 接著，在第二段中介紹了平常是如何做的，采用三個(gè)連詞First of all, Besides，What’s more，清楚地舉例介紹了自己生活中節(jié)約的三件小事，＂檢查是否關(guān)燈和水龍頭，不浪費(fèi)食物，不亂花錢(qián)。＂最后一段，說(shuō)明這樣做的原因，用句型＂The reason why I do so is that I want to make a difference to my life.＂總述原因，觀點(diǎn)明確。還能引用諺語(yǔ)As the old saying goes, ＂ Waste not, want not.＂ 為文章添彩。
例題2
題目①
假如你是李華，正在美國(guó)參加一個(gè)交換生項(xiàng)目。今天下午你應(yīng)邀和朋友Jim 一家外出，請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)給接待家庭的媽媽Mrs. Smith 寫(xiě)一個(gè)留言條，告訴她你們要去哪里，去做什么，以及你回家的時(shí)間和方式。
提示詞語(yǔ)：park, movie theater, go boating, watch a movie
提示問(wèn)題：Where are you going?
What are you going to do?
When and how will you get home?
Dear Mrs. Smith,
My friend Jim asks me to go out with his family this afternoon.______________________________________
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Yours,
Li Hua
題目②
寬容是一種美德。人與人之間難免會(huì)有磕磕絆絆。面對(duì)矛盾，多一份包容和諒解，生活就會(huì)多一縷陽(yáng)光。
某英文網(wǎng)站正在開(kāi)展以＂包容、諒解＂為主題的征文活動(dòng)。假如你是李華，請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文投稿，談?wù)勆钪心阍徦说囊淮谓?jīng)歷，主要內(nèi)容包括：你們之間發(fā)生了什么，你為什么原諒對(duì)方，以及原諒對(duì)方之后的感受。
提示詞語(yǔ)：hurt, realize, forgive（原諒）, happy
提示問(wèn)題：What happened between you and him/her?
Why did you decide to forgive him/her?
How did you feel after forgiving him/her?
I still remember what happened between________________________________________________________
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根據(jù)題目提供的信息，提示詞和兩個(gè)問(wèn)句進(jìn)行內(nèi)容的寫(xiě)作。話題仍貼近學(xué)生的實(shí)際生活，讓學(xué)生有話可說(shuō)。第一個(gè)題目更強(qiáng)調(diào)對(duì)語(yǔ)言的實(shí)際應(yīng)用能力；第二個(gè)話題相對(duì)較難，考查學(xué)生的思想深度和語(yǔ)言能力，突出社會(huì)主義核心價(jià)值觀。
題目①
Dear Mrs. Smith,
My friend Jim asks me to go out with his family this afternoon. I am writing to tell you that we will meet in the park. Then we will go to the movie theater to watch a movie. Finally, we are going to go boating in the lake. Don’t worry about me. We will be back at 6:00 p.m. Jim’s father will send me home by taxi. I am sure to have a lot of fun. Waiting for my back.
Yours,
Li Hua
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這是一篇應(yīng)用文，寫(xiě)一篇留言條。也是一篇材料作文，給出了一些材料，并給出了一些提示單詞和提示問(wèn)題。我們要根據(jù)提示材料和問(wèn)題（Where are you going? What are you going to do? When and how will you get home?）用正確的英語(yǔ)把要點(diǎn)表達(dá)出來(lái)，用上所給單詞，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮想象。動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料，不要遺漏要點(diǎn)。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是用一般將來(lái)時(shí)來(lái)寫(xiě)。首先，回答 “Where are you going?” 要明確寫(xiě)出外出的地點(diǎn)。然后回答“What are you going to do?”具體寫(xiě)出我們到達(dá)外出地之后所進(jìn)行的活動(dòng)。接著回答“When and how will you get home?”需要寫(xiě)出回家的方式和到家的時(shí)間。最后，寫(xiě)希望家里的媽媽不要為我擔(dān)心。寫(xiě)作中要適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意敘述的順序，要符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)】
這篇短文語(yǔ)句通順，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確。學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),特別適用了表示先后順序的詞Then，Finally,使表達(dá)具有條里性，句式Don’t worry about me. .I am sure to等的使用，更增加了文章的色彩，此文表達(dá)具有邏輯性,，有條理。
題目②
I still remember what happened between me and Tom. Yesterday, I had a fight with my friend Tom. He took away my pen without my agreement. My father bought it for me last year, and I like it very much. His behavior hurt me. I was very angry. For his sorry, he wrote a card:＂Sorry, please forgive me＂. He felt ashamed for what he did. At last I realized that I was too stingy. I choose to forgive him. He was very happy for my forgiveness. I was very happy, too. Through this matter, we became good friends.
As the Chinese old saying goes＂To err is human＂. In our whole long life, I believe, nobody can make no mistakes. Children may broke bowls, students may cheat or do something against the teacher, and grown-ups may do something wrong on their work or even something against the law. Keeping something unpleasant in mind does no good to us. Letting the unhappy matters go brings happiness and pleasure back to our life.
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
本文屬于話題類作文，話題是“包容、諒解”。主要關(guān)于個(gè)人經(jīng)歷的，需要考生寫(xiě)出諒解他人的經(jīng)歷，具體內(nèi)容圍繞以下三個(gè)方面：1.你們之間發(fā)生了什么事？2.你為什么決定原諒他（她）？3.談?wù)勀阍徦ㄋ┲蟮母惺?。仔?xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點(diǎn)?？忌枰獜娜齻€(gè)方面作答，指出原諒對(duì)方的一件事情，原諒的原因以及原諒之后的感受。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)；語(yǔ)言表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣。寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】
這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的作文，本文很好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。覆蓋所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)；語(yǔ)言表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確、句子通順、行文連貫。首先指出原諒的對(duì)象，“I still remember what happened between me and Tom.”
接著詳細(xì)描述發(fā)生的事情，先指出矛盾點(diǎn)，“Yesterday ,I had a fight with my friend Tom. He took away my pen without my agreement…” 然后，描述轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)，是他認(rèn)識(shí)了錯(cuò)誤，給我道歉For his sorry, he wrote a card:” Sorry, please forgive me”. He felt ashamed for what he do. 事情發(fā)展的最后，我原諒了朋友并擁抱和好，“I choose to forgive him. He was very happy for my forgiveness. I was very happy, too. Through this matter, we became good friends..”最后描述自己的感悟As the Chinese old saying … Letting the unhappy matters go brings happiness and pleasure back to our life.
《中考英語(yǔ)滿分作文解析（1）》添加時(shí)間：2025-01-13；更新時(shí)間：2025-03-15
