中考英語(yǔ)書面表達(dá)高分作文攻略
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每年的 6 月 6 日是我國(guó)的“愛眼日”，可見保護(hù)中小學(xué)生的視力非常重要，為此，學(xué)校將在英語(yǔ)文化節(jié)期間舉行一場(chǎng)“愛眼日”英語(yǔ)演講比賽。請(qǐng)你寫一篇英語(yǔ)演講稿，談?wù)勀銓?duì)保護(hù)視力重要性的認(rèn)識(shí)和建議。
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內(nèi)容如下：
1. 保護(hù)視力的重要性（請(qǐng)寫 1 點(diǎn)）；
2. 對(duì)保護(hù)視力的建議：（1）閱讀時(shí)注意用眼衛(wèi)生；（2）少用電子產(chǎn)品；（3）?？淳G色植物；（4）做眼保健操；（5）多做戶外運(yùn)動(dòng)。
要求如下：
1. 結(jié)構(gòu)完整，表達(dá)通順，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，書寫清晰；
2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)任何真實(shí)的人名，學(xué)校名等信息；
3. 詞數(shù) 80 左右。開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
參考詞匯：
Sight Day 愛眼日；electronic products 電子產(chǎn)品；eye-protecting exercises 眼保健操
Dear friends,
June 6 is our country’s Sight Day. ____________________________________________________________
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Thank you!
【寫作思路】
本文屬于話題作文，談?wù)勀銓?duì)保護(hù)視力重要性的認(rèn)識(shí)和建議。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。
【參考范文】
Dear friends,
June 6 is our country’s Sight Day. As we all know, eyes are windows of the soul. Everyone understands the importance of the eyes. But now more and more students are getting near sighted. So how to protect eyes still remains a question. Here is some advice on how to protect your eyesight.
You should not keep your eyes working for two long when reading, you should keep the book about a foot away from you. After reading for an hour or two, you’d better have a rest by working in the distance or looking at the green plants to make your eye relax. You ought to remember not to read in dim light or in the sun. Don’t read in a moving bus or in bed. Besides, try to use less electric products. What’s more, doing eye-protecting exercises will help you keep good eye sight. Last but not least, we can also try to do more exercise in our spare time.
Only by doing these simple things can we keep good eyesight.
【點(diǎn)睛】
寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：
認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。
構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān) 寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。
初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。
修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。
（二）
“人生沒有彩排，生命沒有重來”，你平安、健康、快樂地成長(zhǎng)是父母最大的心愿。今年6月下旬學(xué)校將舉辦一場(chǎng)以“Keep away from the danger!” 為主題的英文演講比賽。假如你是王雷同學(xué)，大家推選你參加這次比賽。請(qǐng)跟進(jìn)以下思維導(dǎo)圖提示，寫一篇英文演講稿。
寫作提示：
寫作要求：
1. 不得使用真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名；
2. 所有的提示詞都須用上，包含以上所有要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使內(nèi)容充實(shí)，行文連貫：
3. 字跡工整，語(yǔ)言精練，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，條理清楚：
4. 詞數(shù)100詞左右。(演講稿的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。)
Keep away from the danger!
Hello! Everyone, I’m Wang Lei. The danger is around us. So we must learn how to keep away from the danger, First, we mustn’t go swimming without our parents’ or teachers’ permission.
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In a word, we must try our best to keep away from the danger!
That’s all. Thank you for listening!
【寫作思路】
這篇作文要求我們以Keep away from the danger為題，寫一篇演講稿。審題可知，題目中利用思維導(dǎo)圖的形式，列舉了這篇文章中應(yīng)該包括的幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)。觀察這個(gè)思維導(dǎo)圖可知，短文應(yīng)該從游泳、交通、交友、飲食、學(xué)校安全以及毒品等六個(gè)方面進(jìn)行敘述，每個(gè)方面都給出了一些提示詞，學(xué)生們可以利用這些提示詞來組織語(yǔ)言，用完整的句子表達(dá)出來。文章應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)、第一人稱為主來敘述。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)注意：首先題目中給出的所有提示詞以及要點(diǎn)都應(yīng)包括在內(nèi)，不要有所遺漏?？梢愿鶕?jù)表達(dá)需要進(jìn)行拓展，使文章內(nèi)容更加充實(shí)。但應(yīng)注意拓展內(nèi)容應(yīng)與文章主題緊密相連，不要寫沒有用的東西。其次應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的，不要根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)思維逐詞翻譯，寫漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)。應(yīng)從句式的正確結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，選擇適當(dāng)?shù)膯卧~、短語(yǔ)和句型。句式結(jié)構(gòu)可以簡(jiǎn)單句為基礎(chǔ)，穿插并列句、復(fù)合句以及其他復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)，提升文章檔次。同時(shí)語(yǔ)句之間應(yīng)使用一些銜接成分，注意敘述的層次性，條理清楚，行為連貫。
【參考范文】
Keep away from the danger!
Hello! Everyone, I’m Wang Lei. The danger is around us. So we must learn how to keep away from the danger. First, we mustn’t go swimming without our parents’ or teachers’ permission. When we go swimming, we must wear life jackets. Second, we must obey the traffic rules. We should walk on the pavement. When we cross the street, we mustn’t look at the mobile phones. Third, we may have some friends on line, but we mustn’t believe whatever they say. Besides, don’t meet online friends alone. Fourth, we must wash our hands before having meals. Don’t eat food that goes bad because it is bad for our health. Fifth, when we are in school, we can’t run on the hallways. You should get on well with your classmates and don’t fight with them. If someone threatens you, call for help. Last but not the least, never try drugs. If you see someone selling drugs, call 110 at once.
In a word, we must try our best to keep away from the danger!
That’s all. Thank you for listening!
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，給我們介紹了生活中應(yīng)如何遠(yuǎn)離危險(xiǎn)，保證我們的安全。短文有以下幾個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)：首先文章內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有內(nèi)容，提示詞都使用上了。文章中從六個(gè)方面進(jìn)行了具體的介紹，每個(gè)方面前都有表示順序的詞First, Second… Last but not least等，使文章的結(jié)構(gòu)非常清晰，敘述有條理。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范。句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整，符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。文章中使用了簡(jiǎn)單句、賓語(yǔ)從句、狀語(yǔ)從句、定語(yǔ)從句、祈使句等結(jié)構(gòu)，句式多變，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確、清楚。文章中使用了一些較好的短語(yǔ)和句型，如When we cross the street, we mustn't look at the mobile phones、Third, we may have some friends on line, but we mustn't believe whatever they say、Fourth, we must wash our hands before having meals.、You should get on well with your classmates and don't fight with them.、If someone threatens you, call for help.、Last but not the least, never try drugs. If you see someone selling drugs, call 110 at once.等。
（三）
初中生活，精彩紛呈?；厥走^去你是否感到充實(shí)和快樂，展望未來你是否對(duì)高中生活充滿期待，請(qǐng)結(jié)合以下提示談?wù)勀愕母形颉?/span>
提示：1. 初中階段你有哪些收獲；
2. 初中階段你有哪些遺憾或未實(shí)現(xiàn)的愿望；
3. 你對(duì)未來的高中生活有哪些計(jì)劃或打算。
要求：1. 80-100詞，首句已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2. 字跡工整，語(yǔ)言流暢，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，邏輯清晰。
The life of my junior high school is coming to an end. ____________________________________________
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【寫作思路】
這是一篇提綱類作文，初中生活，精彩紛呈?；厥走^去你是否感到充實(shí)和快樂，展望未來你是否對(duì)高中生活充滿期待，請(qǐng)結(jié)合以下提示談?wù)勀愕母形颍瑒?dòng)筆前應(yīng)先認(rèn)真閱讀材料，圍繞所給材料組織內(nèi)容，確定主要短語(yǔ)，句式等問題。通過閱讀材料可知這篇短文主要使用的人稱就是第一人稱，時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，這方面需要注意的問題比較少。動(dòng)筆前可以按照材料內(nèi)容列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，寫出關(guān)鍵單詞。寫作中注意語(yǔ)義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系。上下文之間可以適當(dāng)使用連接詞
【參考范文】
The life of my junior high school is coming to an end. Since I came to the junior high school, I’ve gained confidence and happiness. With the help of our teachers, I’ve learned how to be a good person as well as plenty of knowledge. I’ve also made some good friends.
However, there is still something that I feel sorry about. Because I was busy with my schoolwork, I couldn’t keep on reading. Once in a while, I felt so upset and anxious that I quarreled with my parents.
In the future, I’ll try to make good use of time and spend more free time reading books. Meanwhile, I’ll get on well with my parents. I believe I’ll have a happy and colorful life.
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這篇短文不使用了大量的短語(yǔ)，可見該生英語(yǔ)功底扎實(shí)。.如With the help of our teachers, I’ve learned how to be a good person as well as plenty of knowledge. I’ve also made some good friends.等使文章的表達(dá)更豐富，更有邏輯性，更富有條理。
（四）
習(xí)近平總書記在全國(guó)教育大會(huì)上提出了“立德樹人”的人才培養(yǎng)根本任務(wù)，作為初中畢業(yè)生，你有什么人生規(guī)劃？請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，寫一篇英語(yǔ)演講稿。
提示：
1. 作為中國(guó)人而自豪：過去，我國(guó)優(yōu)秀的傳統(tǒng)文化影響了世界：今天，祖國(guó)在全國(guó)人民的努力下越來越強(qiáng)大，許多科技世界領(lǐng)先；…
2. 為實(shí)現(xiàn)“中國(guó)夢(mèng)”而奮斗：學(xué)會(huì)做一個(gè)懂感恩、守規(guī)矩、善良誠(chéng)信的人；不畏難，努力學(xué)習(xí)知識(shí)、提高能力，將來成為一名…
要求：語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫，可根據(jù)提示適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要逐句翻譯；演講中不得提及生個(gè)人身份的相關(guān)信息，如人名、校名或地名等；詞數(shù)80—100，開頭結(jié)尾已給出（不計(jì)入詞數(shù)）。
Hello, everyone! __________________________________________________________________________
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That's all. Thank you!
【寫作思路】
本文屬于材料作文，談?wù)撟鎳?guó)的偉大強(qiáng)盛以及為實(shí)現(xiàn)中國(guó)夢(mèng)我們應(yīng)該做的努力。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。
【參考范文】
Hello, everyone! As a Chinese, I am so proud of it. In the past, our great traditional culture made a difference to the world, such as sailing, communicating and so on. Nowadays, our country is becoming stronger and stronger by working hard of all Chinese. A lot of science and technology lead the world, such as high speed, Chang’e 4 and Hong Kong-Zhuhai-Macau Bridge and so on.
As a teenager, we should do as follows to achieve our Chinese dream. First of all, we are supposed to thank all the people who devote themselves to making our country wonderful. What’s more, we need follow the rules. In school we should obey the school rules. Only by doing these dimple things can we become a person that the country needs. In addition, we’d better not lie and be a honest man in order that all people can trust us. Last but not least, we should try our best to work hard and when face difficulties, we never give up. I am going to be a scientists. If I am a scientist, I will do more researches and let other countries admire us.
That's all. Thank you!
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be proud of, make a difference to, such as, and so on, 比較級(jí)and比較級(jí), devote oneself to doing, in order that, try one’s best以及first of all, what’s more, in addition和last but not least等，增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。
（五）
湘西自治州正在進(jìn)行“美麗湘西”建設(shè)，我們要積極參與“美麗湘西”建設(shè)活動(dòng)，從小事做起，讓我們家鄉(xiāng)變得更美。作為學(xué)生，請(qǐng)以“Start out small”為題，用英語(yǔ)寫一篇倡議書。
要點(diǎn)提示：1.多種植樹木和花草，不亂砍伐樹木。
2.購(gòu)物時(shí)重復(fù)使用袋子。
3.不亂扔垃圾，保持河流等干凈。
4.遵守公共秩序，做文明學(xué)生。
要求：1.80詞以上。文章的開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2.文章須包括所有要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使短文意思通順、語(yǔ)氣連貫、過渡自然。不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校真實(shí)的名稱和學(xué)生的真實(shí)姓名。
參考詞匯：protect the environment；reuse bags；plant；cut down；throw；wait in line；be wise；obey public rules
Start out small
Hello, everyone. We should try our best to make our hometown Xiangxi more beautiful and comfortable. What can we do for our hometown? ___________________________________________________________________
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【寫作思路】
這是一篇話題作文，根據(jù)材料中的相關(guān)信息介紹一下如何才能為“美麗湘西”建設(shè)做出貢獻(xiàn)。所提供的材料中列舉了我們要積極參與“美麗湘西”建設(shè)活動(dòng)，從小事做起，讓我們的家鄉(xiāng)變得更美。主要從1. 多種植樹木和花草，不亂砍伐樹木。2. 購(gòu)物時(shí)重復(fù)使用袋子。3. 不亂扔垃圾，保持河流等干凈。4. 遵守公共秩序，做文明學(xué)生。這四個(gè)方面去介紹。時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱為第一人稱。注意作文中必須包含材料上的所有信息，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫作時(shí)，避免使用漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)，盡量使用我們熟悉的句子或短語(yǔ)。語(yǔ)法要正確，表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，注意時(shí)態(tài)、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問題。寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系，表達(dá)具有條理性。
【參考范文】
Start out small
Hello, everyone. We should try our best to make our hometown Xiangxi more beautiful and comfortable. What can we do for our hometown？In order to make our hometown more beautiful， as students, I think we should start from small things. First of all, we should know the importance of protecting the environment. We should plant more trees and flowers and not cut down trees randomly. Second, we had better reuse the bag when shopping. We can't throw rubbish about, and we should keep the rivers clean and so on. In addition, we must obey public rules and be civilized students. When we got on the bus, we should wait in line.
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
【高分句型一】
I think we should start from small things. 我認(rèn)為我們應(yīng)該從小事做起。we should start from small things.做think的賓語(yǔ)。
【高分句型二】
When we got on the bus, we should wait in line. 我們應(yīng)該排隊(duì)等候上車。
句子When we got on the bus是由when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句。
《中考英語(yǔ)書面表達(dá)高分作文攻略》添加時(shí)間：2025-01-13；更新時(shí)間：2025-03-15
