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Yesterday morning, I woke up to a white world—it snowed! It was the first snowfall of this winter, and I jumped out of bed happily to watch the snow. “易優(yōu)閱讀寶”，中小學(xué)生語(yǔ)文題庫(kù)，語(yǔ)文成績(jī)提升就是快。

I ran to the window and looked outside. The snow was falling slowly from the sky, like small white feathers. The roof of the house next door was covered with snow, looking like a white hat. The trees in the yard were also white—their branches were covered with snow, like sugar-coated sticks. Even the road was white, and people walked slowly on it, leaving small footprints. 蘇州小學(xué)生語(yǔ)文培訓(xùn)，（TEl:181-1815-9898）蘇州易優(yōu)閱讀寫(xiě)作同步提升

After breakfast, I put on my warm coat, hat, gloves and boots, and went outside to play. My little brother went with me. First, we made a snowman. I rolled a big snowball for the body and a small one for the head. My brother found two black buttons for the eyes and a red carrot for the nose. We put my dad’s old scarf around the snowman’s neck—it looked so cute!

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Then we had a snowball fight. I made a small snowball and threw it at my brother—hit his arm! He laughed and threw one back at me, but I dodged it. We ran around the yard, throwing snowballs and laughing loudly. Our faces turned red from the cold, but we didn’t care.

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When we went home at noon, our clothes were a little wet, but we were very happy. The snowfall made the world beautiful, and playing with snow was so fun. I hope it snows again soon.

作文點(diǎn)評(píng)：
標(biāo)題 “Watching the Snowfall” 聚焦 “看雪” 場(chǎng)景，兼具寫(xiě)景與敘事。內(nèi)容按 “醒來(lái)見(jiàn)雪 — 窗邊賞雪 — 戶(hù)外玩雪（堆雪人、打雪仗）— 回家總結(jié)” 展開(kāi)，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，過(guò)渡自然。運(yùn)用比喻（雪像羽毛、屋頂像白帽子），讓雪景描寫(xiě)生動(dòng)形象；堆雪人、打雪仗的細(xì)節(jié)充滿(mǎn)童趣，體現(xiàn)冬日快樂(lè)。情感上，“happily”“fun” 等詞直接表達(dá)對(duì)雪的喜愛(ài)，感染力強(qiáng)。缺點(diǎn)是 “賞雪” 可加更多感官描寫(xiě)，如雪的觸感。改進(jìn)建議：在窗邊賞雪段落加 “我伸出手接了一片雪花，它很快融化在我手心，涼涼的”，豐富體驗(yàn)。（181 字）