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Among the four seasons, autumn is my favorite. It’s not as hot as summer or as cold as winter; it’s always cool and comfortable. Every time autumn comes, I feel like the world puts on a golden coat.

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First, the scenery in autumn is beautiful. The maple trees by my school turn red, like burning flames. The ginkgo leaves become yellow; when the wind blows, they fall down like little golden butterflies. I love collecting these leaves after school—now I have a book full of different autumn leaves. 找中小學(xué)生語文題庫，就搜微信“易優(yōu)閱讀寶”

Besides, autumn has many delicious fruits. My grandma has an orchard; every October, we go there to pick apples and pears. The apples are red and sweet—biting into one makes juice run down my chin. My mom also makes pumpkin pie in autumn; it’s warm and tastes like happiness.

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What’s more, autumn has my favorite festival—Mid-Autumn Festival. On that day, my family sits in the yard, eats mooncakes and watches the full moon. Dad tells stories about Chang’e, and I always imagine her living on the moon with the jade rabbit.

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Autumn is a season of beauty, delicious food and happy moments. I wish every season could be autumn, but even so, I look forward to autumn every year.

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標(biāo)題直接點(diǎn)出 “最喜歡的季節(jié)是秋天”，主題明確。內(nèi)容從 “景色 — 美食 — 節(jié)日” 三個角度展開，層次分明，“First”“Besides” 等過渡詞讓結(jié)構(gòu)更清晰。運(yùn)用比喻（楓葉像火焰、銀杏葉像蝴蝶），增強(qiáng)文采，符合小學(xué)高年級水平。情感真摯，字里行間滿是對秋天的喜愛。缺點(diǎn)是美食部分可加具體場景，如 “和奶奶一起摘蘋果時，她教我選紅透的”。改進(jìn)建議：在描述賞月時，補(bǔ)充 “我們還會玩猜燈謎的游戲”，讓節(jié)日場景更豐富。（185 字）