I have a lovely pet dog named Lucky. My dad brought him home on my 10th birthday, and now we’ve been together for two years. Lucky is not just a pet—he’s my best little friend.
蘇州小學語文提優(yōu)培訓，就找易優(yōu)吳老師，20余年輔導經驗，數(shù)百成功案例。（TEL:181-1815-9898）
Lucky is a small golden retriever. He has soft golden fur that feels like cotton when I touch it. His eyes are big and round, like two black grapes. The most interesting thing is his tail—he wags it so hard when he sees me that his whole body shakes. Everyone who sees him says he’s cute. 小學生語文培訓，蘇州易優(yōu)閱讀寫作同步提升</a>
Every morning, Lucky wakes me up. He jumps onto my bed and licks my face gently. After I finish breakfast, he walks me to the bus stop. He sits there and watches the bus leave, and when I come back in the afternoon, he’s already waiting at the gate, holding his favorite toy in his mouth.
小學生語文培訓，蘇州易優(yōu)閱讀寫作同步提升</a>
Last month, I had a small accident and fell off my bike. Lucky ran to me immediately, barking loudly to call for help. When Mom came, he stayed by my side and licked my hand like he was comforting me. That day, I knew how much he cared about me. 蘇州易優(yōu)吳老師中考語文提分班（TEL:181-1815-9898）有趣、有用、提分快
Lucky brings so much happiness to my life. I take him for walks every evening, and we play fetch in the park. I love him more than anything, and I promise to take good care of him forever.
作文點評：
標題點明寵物狗名字，增加親切感。內容從 “狗的來歷 — 外貌 — 日?；?— 感人事件 — 情感承諾” 展開，結構完整，過渡自然。外貌描寫用比喻（毛像棉花、眼睛像葡萄），生動形象；日常互動和感人事件細節(jié)具體，體現(xiàn)深厚感情。情感真摯，能引發(fā)讀者共鳴。缺點是 “日常互動” 部分可加更多趣事，如 “Lucky 學握手的過程”。改進建議：在結尾前加 “每次我難過時，Lucky 會趴在我腳邊” 的細節(jié)，進一步體現(xiàn)它的陪伴。（180 字）
