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Last Wednesday afternoon, it rained heavily. The rain hit the windows with a “tick-tock” sound, and the sky was gray. I couldn’t go out to play, but I had a cozy and happy afternoon at home with my mom.

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First, I read a storybook on the sofa. The book was 《The Little Prince》—it’s a very interesting story about a little prince who travels to different planets. I sat under a warm blanket, and my cat curled up next to me. The rain outside and the warm room made me feel very comfortable. I read two chapters and then told my mom about the story—she listened carefully and asked me questions about the little prince. 小學(xué)生語(yǔ)文培訓(xùn)，蘇州易優(yōu)閱讀寫(xiě)作同步提升</a>

Then, we made crafts together. Mom found some colored paper, scissors and glue. We decided to make paper boats. I folded the paper step by step, following mom’s instructions. My boat had a blue sail with a small star on it. Mom’s boat was pink, with flowers on the sail. We put the boats in a basin of water—they floated well, and we laughed as we blew on them to make them move. 蘇州小學(xué)生語(yǔ)文培訓(xùn)，（TEl:181-1815-9898）蘇州易優(yōu)閱讀寫(xiě)作同步提升

In the evening, we baked cookies. Mom measured the flour, sugar and butter, and I mixed them together. I also shaped the dough into small animals—cats, dogs and rabbits. We put the cookies in the oven, and soon the kitchen smelled sweet. When the cookies were ready, they were golden and crispy. We ate them with hot milk—they were delicious! 小學(xué)生語(yǔ)文培訓(xùn)，蘇州易優(yōu)閱讀寫(xiě)作同步提升</a>

Even though it rained and I couldn’t go out, this rainy afternoon was very happy. I love spending time with my mom at home on rainy days.

作文點(diǎn)評(píng)：
標(biāo)題 “Rainy Afternoon at Home” 點(diǎn)明場(chǎng)景，營(yíng)造溫馨氛圍。內(nèi)容按 “讀書(shū) — 做手工 — 烤餅干 — 總結(jié)” 的活動(dòng)順序?qū)懀壿嬤B貫，“First, Then, In the evening” 等過(guò)渡詞明確時(shí)間線。細(xì)節(jié)如 “《The Little Prince》”“紙船放 basin”“動(dòng)物形狀餅干” 充滿生活氣息，體現(xiàn)雨天室內(nèi)的愜意。情感上，“cozy”“happy”“comfortable” 表達(dá)溫馨感受，感染力強(qiáng)。缺點(diǎn)是 “讀書(shū)” 部分可加更多感受，如對(duì)角色的喜愛(ài)。改進(jìn)建議：在讀書(shū)段落加 “我最喜歡 the fox in the book，它 taught the little prince about friendship”，深化閱讀體驗(yàn)。（180 字）